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11/16/2003 c1 11midnight dreams
Aha...very vivid, descripitve. Nice job.

The swear word in the last stanza didn't appeal to me much, but it did create the power that you wanted to convey, i think. ^^ -shrugs- It's a really good poem. And falling for your best friend can get rather confusing. I wouldn't really know. ^^; Great job. Read mine?
7/1/2003 c1 Hinkle
Wow! Very similar to something that happened to me -ish. Though you've got the physics all wrong :)
5/9/2003 c1 17forever amore
Nice work! Really spoke to me. Everyone tells me that being with a friend doesnt work, but i guess i have to try it for myself...good writing!
4/16/2003 c1 3cinnamin girl
ah.. yeah i tried that once, too but it didnt work for us and we are much closer now as just friends... pretty good content but i think you have spelled a few things wrong and perhasp used the wrong word in a place or two...

thansk for rev.ing my piece.. btw, don't die or anything but it was inspired by something real.. you can ask me if you like...

cinnamin girl
4/11/2003 c1 79Groovy Angel
Powerful stuff! i love the "down, down, down" part - the structure of that is so effective. It's very sad but I really like it. I can relate to this...

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