for Suicide Mission6/20/2003 c1 
29Fuinixe
Very good, though the rhyming could use some work. I especially love the diamonds stanza.
29FuinixeVery good, though the rhyming could use some work. I especially love the diamonds stanza.
5/8/2003 c1 98ShadowGal
Very nice. Deep, but simple. Once again, a few grammar and spelling errors. E-mail me at or with Poetry or something in the subject if you'd like me to edit some/all of your poems-it'd help. Besides, I want to be an editor one day, so I don't mind at all. Great poem, hope you keep writing.
98ShadowGalVery nice. Deep, but simple. Once again, a few grammar and spelling errors. E-mail me at or with Poetry or something in the subject if you'd like me to edit some/all of your poems-it'd help. Besides, I want to be an editor one day, so I don't mind at all. Great poem, hope you keep writing.
4/27/2003 c1 89Lyria Shard
LOVELY poem darling, make sure that none of your buds do anyting stupid. By the wya, why did you open this seperate account?
Sal
89Lyria ShardLOVELY poem darling, make sure that none of your buds do anyting stupid. By the wya, why did you open this seperate account?
Sal
4/25/2003 c1 1Tenshi-Usa
This one- very deep. I've had a friend who tried to commit suicide numerous times. I know what you must me going though. (or use the past tense of that verb!) Ah! You have the gift of poetry! I wrote some poems, but no one cared and no one reviewed so I took them off.
1Tenshi-UsaThis one- very deep. I've had a friend who tried to commit suicide numerous times. I know what you must me going though. (or use the past tense of that verb!) Ah! You have the gift of poetry! I wrote some poems, but no one cared and no one reviewed so I took them off.
4/17/2003 c1 7FantasyWind
This is extremely good! ^-^
I really like how it flows when it rhymes - you chose wise words
And I think your story has a moral. Keep up the magnificent work!
~Fanty
7FantasyWindThis is extremely good! ^-^
I really like how it flows when it rhymes - you chose wise words
And I think your story has a moral. Keep up the magnificent work!
~Fanty
4/17/2003 c1 6futurebird
"This is what u receive" please consider writing out the word "you"
This poem is neat since it's written like something for a child, but the theme is so heavy.
6futurebird"This is what u receive" please consider writing out the word "you"
This poem is neat since it's written like something for a child, but the theme is so heavy.