
4/11/2004 c1
64not sure yet
interesting, i like the poem, never actually listened to gackt before but ive read lyrics and two of my friends love him, muchly pretty imagery, nicely done

interesting, i like the poem, never actually listened to gackt before but ive read lyrics and two of my friends love him, muchly pretty imagery, nicely done
4/18/2003 c1 Nerilka-chan
I like your imagery. The best writers uses opposite images to get the most feeling across in a poem (ie dark/light etc.) and you do a good job there. I especially like
"A battered sheet of metal,
Wrapped in satin."
The only thing I might add was that the stanzas came across a bit choppy. However, I felt that maybe that was the impression you wanted to give. Anyway enjoy listening!
-Nchan
I like your imagery. The best writers uses opposite images to get the most feeling across in a poem (ie dark/light etc.) and you do a good job there. I especially like
"A battered sheet of metal,
Wrapped in satin."
The only thing I might add was that the stanzas came across a bit choppy. However, I felt that maybe that was the impression you wanted to give. Anyway enjoy listening!
-Nchan