
1/23/2006 c1
10Cookie20007
this poem is excellent there are no words to describe it and the title is great for it"ghost"

this poem is excellent there are no words to describe it and the title is great for it"ghost"
1/29/2004 c1
39zelle
"Dying lilies
Trace my eyes"
This reminded me of that one scene from 40 Days and 40 Nights...if you ever saw it. Um, the one where Hartnett is making love to that one girl with a flower branch?
Um, yeah. Everything just went hormonal from there.
And, dear lord, did he DIE?
...I miss you, goshdarnit!

"Dying lilies
Trace my eyes"
This reminded me of that one scene from 40 Days and 40 Nights...if you ever saw it. Um, the one where Hartnett is making love to that one girl with a flower branch?
Um, yeah. Everything just went hormonal from there.
And, dear lord, did he DIE?
...I miss you, goshdarnit!
10/14/2003 c1
16Opera Ghost Kid
SOunds very much like the Secret Garden.. hmm... oh well.. very nice !

SOunds very much like the Secret Garden.. hmm... oh well.. very nice !
10/9/2003 c1
31ButterfliKysses
Thought-Provoking and deep. I like your use of words a lot! Different compared to your other ones I read,

Thought-Provoking and deep. I like your use of words a lot! Different compared to your other ones I read,
6/7/2003 c1 romancingthemoon
you are really good. thanks for that. sometimes I hate love. Isn't that a parallax?
you are really good. thanks for that. sometimes I hate love. Isn't that a parallax?
6/4/2003 c1
141Suicidal Butterfly
Very lovely poem. I like it , descriptive enough to give you a picture. Great job.

Very lovely poem. I like it , descriptive enough to give you a picture. Great job.
5/27/2003 c1
9Hana
Hey what a nice poem, thanks for reviewing mine =) The first four paragraph are nice... i like the second paragraph the best, I don't know why, anyway the last paragraph scared me.
'A sickening crack
As you plummeted
To the roses below'
left me with an eerie feeling. I thought i heard something actually cracked when I read the line. Anyway good job and i like you style of writing =)

Hey what a nice poem, thanks for reviewing mine =) The first four paragraph are nice... i like the second paragraph the best, I don't know why, anyway the last paragraph scared me.
'A sickening crack
As you plummeted
To the roses below'
left me with an eerie feeling. I thought i heard something actually cracked when I read the line. Anyway good job and i like you style of writing =)
5/23/2003 c1
1aleppine
This created such a real vivid scene for me, and the wistful, fragile atmosphere in this is very powerful, complimenting the title perfectly. I love the reference to Tchaikovsky, drifting through empty rooms - so striking. The last stanza which I am assuming sumamrises the death of this person is excellent - very succint, and such an original way to die (sorry - I meant that in the case of this being fiction - I got the impression it's fiction. If it's based on a real event, I take that back.)
Hauntingly lovely poem. Leaves the distant echo of childish laughter resounding faintly in my eyes, for some reason. You've captured the essence of 'ghost' beautifully.

This created such a real vivid scene for me, and the wistful, fragile atmosphere in this is very powerful, complimenting the title perfectly. I love the reference to Tchaikovsky, drifting through empty rooms - so striking. The last stanza which I am assuming sumamrises the death of this person is excellent - very succint, and such an original way to die (sorry - I meant that in the case of this being fiction - I got the impression it's fiction. If it's based on a real event, I take that back.)
Hauntingly lovely poem. Leaves the distant echo of childish laughter resounding faintly in my eyes, for some reason. You've captured the essence of 'ghost' beautifully.
5/7/2003 c1
127godawful teen-angst poetry
wow. That was-wow.
I love the little details-the second and last stanzas are my favorite. Keep writing!

wow. That was-wow.
I love the little details-the second and last stanzas are my favorite. Keep writing!
4/23/2003 c1
87OptimisticRomantic
AH! I loved it. I don't kno wut it is bout this poem but i just loved it. It just draws me for some unknown reason. It seems professional. I have goosebumps for some reason and my stomach is fluttering (not in the fluffy love way) It does that when my adrenaline flows and i like a poem.I liked the part that said "dying lillies trace my eyes" I'm twisted i like weird parts. I like ur descriptions and the poem wuz over all lovely. ~_^
~Sandra~

AH! I loved it. I don't kno wut it is bout this poem but i just loved it. It just draws me for some unknown reason. It seems professional. I have goosebumps for some reason and my stomach is fluttering (not in the fluffy love way) It does that when my adrenaline flows and i like a poem.I liked the part that said "dying lillies trace my eyes" I'm twisted i like weird parts. I like ur descriptions and the poem wuz over all lovely. ~_^
~Sandra~
4/23/2003 c1
40Special K Birmingham
I love the beautiful images at the beginning, and the way it suddenly changes in the last stanza. The roses are well used to show good and bad associations aswell. Keep writing.
Keri X

I love the beautiful images at the beginning, and the way it suddenly changes in the last stanza. The roses are well used to show good and bad associations aswell. Keep writing.
Keri X
4/20/2003 c1
7AngelFire2
Aw, that's really sad...it kinda reminds me of my aunt and how i often think of her...keep it up, you're very talented. Thank you for the nice review on my poem!
~*~AngelFire~*~

Aw, that's really sad...it kinda reminds me of my aunt and how i often think of her...keep it up, you're very talented. Thank you for the nice review on my poem!
~*~AngelFire~*~