4/24/2003 c1 89Lyria Shard
That was beautiful Silverlight. I really enjoyed reading it, I found it very angsty, lyrical, rythmic and sweet. It really made me think of the phrase "take the rough with the smooth" - the poem was a combination of both. I especially liked teh lines.

"Have you ever been left,

Never been kissed"

"With a cry and a sigh

Tonight I'm leaving , to die"

"Go,Back,Home

To the place you

Never known"

"And when you leave

I'll be better off, Alone"

Great work Silverlight, keep it up. I've posted some new stuff by the way, please review.

from

Princess Sal

P.s. Could you please send me the list of characters I sent you? I forgot which characters to make up.

4/21/2003 c1 10Atticus
good feel to the overall song, but it seems like you're struggeling to rhyme too much. don't use such simple words. and dont use unnecessary rhyming