for The Ancient Butterfly Dance8/8/2003 c1 anon63
I liked it... so beautiful... last line so sad... but sad is good... my online friend called me an angst-aholic... lol... great work! :-)
I liked it... so beautiful... last line so sad... but sad is good... my online friend called me an angst-aholic... lol... great work! :-)
7/25/2003 c1 
32aulliana
Thanks for reviewing for me! I adore long reviews, hehe. ~_^ Well anyways, I shall now return the favor and review for you! 1st of all) Awesome job on this! I really, ReAlly like the lines "Your words were always music notes/Whispering secrets in my waiting ears/That seemed to say 'I love you'/But, like watermarks, they were just a smidge." Kudos! I liked this so much I went back and read it again. ^_^ g2g now, I will definitely be checking out "Aries' Lover" though, it sounds like a good one. Ciao!
~~aulliana~~
32aullianaThanks for reviewing for me! I adore long reviews, hehe. ~_^ Well anyways, I shall now return the favor and review for you! 1st of all) Awesome job on this! I really, ReAlly like the lines "Your words were always music notes/Whispering secrets in my waiting ears/That seemed to say 'I love you'/But, like watermarks, they were just a smidge." Kudos! I liked this so much I went back and read it again. ^_^ g2g now, I will definitely be checking out "Aries' Lover" though, it sounds like a good one. Ciao!
~~aulliana~~
7/24/2003 c1 72CancerianQueen
Hey! This is a great poem! :) My friend, Midnight Bat, would like you to review her. She is a kool writer. Very funny too! :)
I love this poem though. This is great. It is so well written! :)
Keep writing well,
~Naomi~
72CancerianQueenHey! This is a great poem! :) My friend, Midnight Bat, would like you to review her. She is a kool writer. Very funny too! :)
I love this poem though. This is great. It is so well written! :)
Keep writing well,
~Naomi~
7/5/2003 c1 86shiniwa
I like it. Great flow and rhythm for a freeform poem. I like the simile in the second line; it adds a nice atmosphere. Referring to the nights' beauty just adds layers of connotations. And like four is great too. It really helps to set a mood. 2 and 4 together really reek of a quasi-gothic, deep, but beautiful poem. But I could just be on some horribly incorrect tangent. 12-14 were also brilliant, for reasons I can't really explain (which makes lines 15-16 almost ironic ;-) ). And the ending was just as great, going back to the gothic-esque mood brought out by the lunar and insanity referance.
86shiniwaI like it. Great flow and rhythm for a freeform poem. I like the simile in the second line; it adds a nice atmosphere. Referring to the nights' beauty just adds layers of connotations. And like four is great too. It really helps to set a mood. 2 and 4 together really reek of a quasi-gothic, deep, but beautiful poem. But I could just be on some horribly incorrect tangent. 12-14 were also brilliant, for reasons I can't really explain (which makes lines 15-16 almost ironic ;-) ). And the ending was just as great, going back to the gothic-esque mood brought out by the lunar and insanity referance.
6/15/2003 c1 1Kierst
That was very cute, simple and sweet until the last two lines, which were very true and back to reality.
You are awesome at imagery, you painted a vivid picture in my mind.
-Kiersten
1KierstThat was very cute, simple and sweet until the last two lines, which were very true and back to reality.
You are awesome at imagery, you painted a vivid picture in my mind.
-Kiersten
6/12/2003 c1 38LoV3lee
the only thing i can say is...wow. that's amazing. you rite so beautifully. your poems are pieces of art made by the hands of a master. *bows* i hope to someday hav skill like ures. amazing poetry, stories. you are a true writer. ure so good at it. i'd hav reviewed sooner, but had SAT II's and finals. byez
38LoV3leethe only thing i can say is...wow. that's amazing. you rite so beautifully. your poems are pieces of art made by the hands of a master. *bows* i hope to someday hav skill like ures. amazing poetry, stories. you are a true writer. ure so good at it. i'd hav reviewed sooner, but had SAT II's and finals. byez
5/20/2003 c1 51Lieschen
Beautiful metaphors here: "a painted Russian Easter Egg" and "math-equation certain". Absolutely brilliant. Excellent job.
ELise
51LieschenBeautiful metaphors here: "a painted Russian Easter Egg" and "math-equation certain". Absolutely brilliant. Excellent job.
ELise
5/13/2003 c1 Wonky Donkey
hey great poem.
Have I commented on this one already?
oh well, I like 'to vague to be math-equation certain' really nice.
hey great poem.
Have I commented on this one already?
oh well, I like 'to vague to be math-equation certain' really nice.
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5/3/2003 c1 wheresmydopamine
This is beautifully written. I don't usually like romantic poems, but this is incredible! Keep writing!
This is beautifully written. I don't usually like romantic poems, but this is incredible! Keep writing!
5/1/2003 c1 14jaded but alive
the last four lines are my favorite, this is a great poem, keep writing!
14jaded but alivethe last four lines are my favorite, this is a great poem, keep writing!
4/27/2003 c1 68Princess Mulan
This is absolutely beautiful...
very lovely thoughts, very true emotions. You're vision on love is very very amazing!
I love the wonderful feel of this one. YOu're writing make love so poetic.
Sweet writing.
68Princess MulanThis is absolutely beautiful...
very lovely thoughts, very true emotions. You're vision on love is very very amazing!
I love the wonderful feel of this one. YOu're writing make love so poetic.
Sweet writing.