for Invisible Suicide4/24/2003 c1 
89Lyria Shard
An incredible, yet morbid poem, I hope this isnt based on true feelings. It was angsty, scary and incredibly passionate. I'm not a fan of suicidal art, but this wasnt particularly bad. I especially liked the lines
"Never mind my tears
Never mind my sadness
Then a hope appears
There s a way out of this madness."
Keep going with the good work, but please, please, PLEASE try and make your poems more happy!
from,
Princess Sal
89Lyria ShardAn incredible, yet morbid poem, I hope this isnt based on true feelings. It was angsty, scary and incredibly passionate. I'm not a fan of suicidal art, but this wasnt particularly bad. I especially liked the lines
"Never mind my tears
Never mind my sadness
Then a hope appears
There s a way out of this madness."
Keep going with the good work, but please, please, PLEASE try and make your poems more happy!
from,
Princess Sal
4/23/2003 c1 64Sykes
Not much more to say that hasn't already been said. A good job! And thank you for reviewing my story.
64SykesNot much more to say that hasn't already been said. A good job! And thank you for reviewing my story.
4/23/2003 c1 luz perdida
I dunno. when I think about suicide I think of something more thoughtful. Pain. Hate.
Doesn't mean this is bad. Tis all really really good! I liked the first bunch of stanzas. There are a few grammar/spelling mistakes. Thus I would advise you to check it over. keep writing!
I dunno. when I think about suicide I think of something more thoughtful. Pain. Hate.
Doesn't mean this is bad. Tis all really really good! I liked the first bunch of stanzas. There are a few grammar/spelling mistakes. Thus I would advise you to check it over. keep writing!