
3/12/2016 c4 Guest
PLEASE! Update this! The storyline, the language and the setting is amazing. Hats off to you! And the characters are amazingly well shaped and you've given the PERFECT amount of descriptions, not too much, not too less. all in all, this is damn near perfection! So PLEEASE UPDATE IT!
PLEASE! Update this! The storyline, the language and the setting is amazing. Hats off to you! And the characters are amazingly well shaped and you've given the PERFECT amount of descriptions, not too much, not too less. all in all, this is damn near perfection! So PLEEASE UPDATE IT!
8/15/2015 c4 pearl
cool. kinda like it, but needed more upload
cool. kinda like it, but needed more upload
4/23/2011 c4
16Ioga
Hey, you're maybe not completely gone, great! I totally understand if getting back to old story projects is painfully hard, particularly with a life, but it's nice to at least imagine there is a pair of eyes maybe reading the review left.
I like the mystery behind Omen (nomen est omen, eh? - bet his parents just wanted to make that joke to the neighbours, repeatedly). It'd be interesting to see what your plans are for his exact nature.
I was wondering, though - if our world is separated from the others except via the Borderlands, how come the fire realm's prince has managed to get over to the water realm without going / knowing he's gone through the Borderlands?
Occasionally the story felt a bit like it was drifting or wandering around rather than determinedly going somewhere. This is not necessarily a bad thing, but I noticed my attention got a chance to waver during these transitions (right after coming back from Borderlands, and before getting arrested by the water folks, for example). Just a random thought.
Thanks for this, and good luck with writing! I know it's hard to find the time sometimes, but it can also be a nice release from mundane duties to dive into fantasy.

Hey, you're maybe not completely gone, great! I totally understand if getting back to old story projects is painfully hard, particularly with a life, but it's nice to at least imagine there is a pair of eyes maybe reading the review left.
I like the mystery behind Omen (nomen est omen, eh? - bet his parents just wanted to make that joke to the neighbours, repeatedly). It'd be interesting to see what your plans are for his exact nature.
I was wondering, though - if our world is separated from the others except via the Borderlands, how come the fire realm's prince has managed to get over to the water realm without going / knowing he's gone through the Borderlands?
Occasionally the story felt a bit like it was drifting or wandering around rather than determinedly going somewhere. This is not necessarily a bad thing, but I noticed my attention got a chance to waver during these transitions (right after coming back from Borderlands, and before getting arrested by the water folks, for example). Just a random thought.
Thanks for this, and good luck with writing! I know it's hard to find the time sometimes, but it can also be a nice release from mundane duties to dive into fantasy.
5/23/2010 c1 eiyuang999
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11/22/2009 c1 Tyan
Damnit. I hate it when my messages get sent incomplete. To sum up what I said: I love how Brian proves himself useful and I'm really wondering what Omen is. I love your writing style and I'm eager for updates, both in Game Over and Blurring the Line. :D
Damnit. I hate it when my messages get sent incomplete. To sum up what I said: I love how Brian proves himself useful and I'm really wondering what Omen is. I love your writing style and I'm eager for updates, both in Game Over and Blurring the Line. :D
8/1/2008 c4 Untitled Absence
Unusually well written, I applaud you for this. This world, its BorderLands, is so very involving. Draws you in, makes yopu a part of it. I find myself speechless at how well thought out you've made it. My only real concern is that perhaps, in the early chapters especially, our dear Brian might have saved his worry for his preferences for a more apt time and focused more on the situation at hand. It has since, it seems, petered out and he has, more or less, come to terms with it.
Now Omen. He's a character. And the way you keep everyone guessing just what he is, keeping us in the dark...it's almost as if its some dark secret or something. You'd think he were an outcast demon or something, ya know? Of course, he keeps his feelings very close to the vest, only really opening himself up when Brian starts storytelling.
It has been some considerable time, granted, but surely the spark is still there, surely you can continue this? Woe am I to have never noticed it before, but now I shall and must wait to see your response. I adamantly hope you will give some sign of its continuation? There's, of course, no guarantee that you'll even pay attention, is there, but one must try.
Begin again..for our heroes sake. Let their story not die out without fulfillment.
Unusually well written, I applaud you for this. This world, its BorderLands, is so very involving. Draws you in, makes yopu a part of it. I find myself speechless at how well thought out you've made it. My only real concern is that perhaps, in the early chapters especially, our dear Brian might have saved his worry for his preferences for a more apt time and focused more on the situation at hand. It has since, it seems, petered out and he has, more or less, come to terms with it.
Now Omen. He's a character. And the way you keep everyone guessing just what he is, keeping us in the dark...it's almost as if its some dark secret or something. You'd think he were an outcast demon or something, ya know? Of course, he keeps his feelings very close to the vest, only really opening himself up when Brian starts storytelling.
It has been some considerable time, granted, but surely the spark is still there, surely you can continue this? Woe am I to have never noticed it before, but now I shall and must wait to see your response. I adamantly hope you will give some sign of its continuation? There's, of course, no guarantee that you'll even pay attention, is there, but one must try.
Begin again..for our heroes sake. Let their story not die out without fulfillment.
1/1/2008 c4 MoonlightWings13
Well, having read one, I couldn't just stop there! This story might not be quite as good as the last one... Although it was mostly just the first chapter I didn't like; but it's still fantastic! I wish you'd write more; I truly do.
Well, having read one, I couldn't just stop there! This story might not be quite as good as the last one... Although it was mostly just the first chapter I didn't like; but it's still fantastic! I wish you'd write more; I truly do.
10/8/2006 c4 umm.awestruck reader points to game over review
ah! i love your stories, both this one and Game Over! but, but, but...why haven't you updated in so long! *wails* the little excerpt in Edges of Reality hinted at some stuff i've been really anticipating in this story (guilty confession). i hope you haven't dropped any of your stories. they really are among the better few i've read. oh merciful Aphrael, spare us the agony of waiting any longer and UPDATE! please?
ah! i love your stories, both this one and Game Over! but, but, but...why haven't you updated in so long! *wails* the little excerpt in Edges of Reality hinted at some stuff i've been really anticipating in this story (guilty confession). i hope you haven't dropped any of your stories. they really are among the better few i've read. oh merciful Aphrael, spare us the agony of waiting any longer and UPDATE! please?
8/9/2006 c4 Shadesome
I like this. I think it would be good if you wrote some more. it's always ood to go back on oldstories, and this is lovely.
I like this. I think it would be good if you wrote some more. it's always ood to go back on oldstories, and this is lovely.
4/29/2006 c4
5Lady Psychic
This is an interesting story. I like the premese and loved what I have read so far. I hope you will eventually pick this story back up again.

This is an interesting story. I like the premese and loved what I have read so far. I hope you will eventually pick this story back up again.
12/7/2005 c4
5Yoyo-chan
I think you should pick this back up. Even if they're too young for anything to happen (and they are... that's the only thing I don't like) the premise is so interesting.

I think you should pick this back up. Even if they're too young for anything to happen (and they are... that's the only thing I don't like) the premise is so interesting.
5/22/2005 c4 Sasha L. Miller
::pokes the story::
i hope it's not dead! I really really really like it. there are too few stories out there that are fantasy/sci-fi and slash. this is a good 'un though, very intriguing.
characters: brian seems to be taking it as well as can be expected, the whole borderlands thing, then his attraction to omen. i'm impressed by his smarts, er, sort of. books make you knowledgeable, and it's good to see he can actually apply that knowledge when it comes to real-life (heh) situations such as Cet's.
omen's a cutie, though i bet he's got to be a bit jealous at the attention brian's givin' cet. i've got this inkling he's got something to do with the whole gods thing being reborn, which puts me in mind of of similar questions that i'm dying to have answered. i like his penchant for stories, and how he gets all possesive (sort of) "And you owe me more stories - don't forget."
cet and aedwen's situation is interesting, as well as what's going to happen with those two. nice to see someone appreciating brian instead of calling him stupid all the time. in any case, that's intriguing as well, especially with the stolen relic.
anyway, it's a wonderful story, and i do hope you write/post more of it, for it would be a great travesty for it to die where it lays. hope you update soon (ish)
::pokes the story::
i hope it's not dead! I really really really like it. there are too few stories out there that are fantasy/sci-fi and slash. this is a good 'un though, very intriguing.
characters: brian seems to be taking it as well as can be expected, the whole borderlands thing, then his attraction to omen. i'm impressed by his smarts, er, sort of. books make you knowledgeable, and it's good to see he can actually apply that knowledge when it comes to real-life (heh) situations such as Cet's.
omen's a cutie, though i bet he's got to be a bit jealous at the attention brian's givin' cet. i've got this inkling he's got something to do with the whole gods thing being reborn, which puts me in mind of of similar questions that i'm dying to have answered. i like his penchant for stories, and how he gets all possesive (sort of) "And you owe me more stories - don't forget."
cet and aedwen's situation is interesting, as well as what's going to happen with those two. nice to see someone appreciating brian instead of calling him stupid all the time. in any case, that's intriguing as well, especially with the stolen relic.
anyway, it's a wonderful story, and i do hope you write/post more of it, for it would be a great travesty for it to die where it lays. hope you update soon (ish)