for Mors Araneus: Death of a Spider8/15/2003 c5 Jolly Green Giant
this was good but still needs to be longer, but there is a good plot twist to it so keep it coming
this was good but still needs to be longer, but there is a good plot twist to it so keep it coming
8/15/2003 c4 Jolly Green Giant
This was pretty cool i still want the chapters to be longer and that would be good for me
This was pretty cool i still want the chapters to be longer and that would be good for me
8/6/2003 c3 
64not sure yet
cute at the end there, if slightly foreboding, anywayz, like it, nicely done
64not sure yetcute at the end there, if slightly foreboding, anywayz, like it, nicely done
8/6/2003 c2 not sure yet
interesting, i like it thus far, pretty good plot set up and i like the characters, muchly enjoyed, nicely done
interesting, i like it thus far, pretty good plot set up and i like the characters, muchly enjoyed, nicely done
7/18/2003 c5 27Krashbandit333
Aww come on you can't just leave it like that! You have such a way with words it's amazing like the "getting knocked out by the punchline", bloody brilliant. GET TO WORK and write more I can't wait to read on! You should be extremely proud!
27Krashbandit333Aww come on you can't just leave it like that! You have such a way with words it's amazing like the "getting knocked out by the punchline", bloody brilliant. GET TO WORK and write more I can't wait to read on! You should be extremely proud!
7/18/2003 c4 Krashbandit333
Things are starting to fall into place, i'm sad there is only one more chapter left. Keep writing and remember about more depth. Awesome though.
Things are starting to fall into place, i'm sad there is only one more chapter left. Keep writing and remember about more depth. Awesome though.
7/18/2003 c3 Krashbandit333
This one was definately a better chapter, suspensful, I really like it! The brothers are both cool.
This one was definately a better chapter, suspensful, I really like it! The brothers are both cool.
7/18/2003 c2 Krashbandit333
The relationship is really good. Like I said before though you should try and add in a little more depth to your chapters. I'm not saying this to dis your story but to help you make it better. I LOVE the story line, I'm looking forward to reading all the chapters so for now keep posting them!
The relationship is really good. Like I said before though you should try and add in a little more depth to your chapters. I'm not saying this to dis your story but to help you make it better. I LOVE the story line, I'm looking forward to reading all the chapters so for now keep posting them!
7/18/2003 c1 Krashbandit333
Hey, I think this story could be really interesting! I think you should try and develop you're first chapter a little more to give a little more background, but I'm totally excited to read on! Write back later! Good plot!
Hey, I think this story could be really interesting! I think you should try and develop you're first chapter a little more to give a little more background, but I'm totally excited to read on! Write back later! Good plot!
5/9/2003 c5 7Shinosenshi
FU-
I hate you.
Well, not really, i just hate the cliffhanger..wait, no, the cliffhanger was an excellant one, that's why it's so annoying!
Well, yet again from me, very well done.
7ShinosenshiFU-
I hate you.
Well, not really, i just hate the cliffhanger..wait, no, the cliffhanger was an excellant one, that's why it's so annoying!
Well, yet again from me, very well done.
5/5/2003 c5 8EBS
This chapter was good, but I need more! Must have more! Keep writing.
Yours, Irish Princess
8EBSThis chapter was good, but I need more! Must have more! Keep writing.
Yours, Irish Princess
5/1/2003 c4 ben
this story is pretty good so far, i am surprised at your writting talent. i still say the
chapters should be longer but all in all it its very good keep it coming
this story is pretty good so far, i am surprised at your writting talent. i still say the
chapters should be longer but all in all it its very good keep it coming