for Together with the Dragon7/8/2008 c1 Zwidon
I liked you poem a lot, the use of imagery was brilliant, I especially like
But even when the morning brings...
Us back down to these Earthly things.
Good one! ;)
I liked you poem a lot, the use of imagery was brilliant, I especially like
But even when the morning brings...
Us back down to these Earthly things.
Good one! ;)
6/5/2008 c1 
3TidesYonder
I like you'r verse "laid legend to be real" it has a great ring to it keep it up ;)
3TidesYonderI like you'r verse "laid legend to be real" it has a great ring to it keep it up ;)
2/1/2007 c1 65Nemonus
Good description of a fantasy. Your imagary is plain-which is appropriate and well used here, to make the images clear. Rhyme & rhythm is pretty good; the only line I didn't like on that front was "Then the two of us departed."
65NemonusGood description of a fantasy. Your imagary is plain-which is appropriate and well used here, to make the images clear. Rhyme & rhythm is pretty good; the only line I didn't like on that front was "Then the two of us departed."
12/5/2006 c1 2Force Edge
I just read this poem last night, and I'll say that I think that you have done a very good job with it!^_^
P.S. Yes, I did just get an account, and I hope to get some things uploaded to the site soon. ;)
2Force EdgeI just read this poem last night, and I'll say that I think that you have done a very good job with it!^_^
P.S. Yes, I did just get an account, and I hope to get some things uploaded to the site soon. ;)
7/1/2006 c1 8Barbados
Overall, I'd say this is a very charming little poem. The first stanza seems a little rough, but the third stanza was brilliant. (BTW, you are the only other person I know of to have read Raptor Red.)
8BarbadosOverall, I'd say this is a very charming little poem. The first stanza seems a little rough, but the third stanza was brilliant. (BTW, you are the only other person I know of to have read Raptor Red.)
6/17/2006 c1 insDragonclaw
Somehow, I get the idea that the name Anne McCafferey is familiar to you.
Somehow, I get the idea that the name Anne McCafferey is familiar to you.
4/27/2006 c1 4dragon-girl-of-golden-eyes
dude, this is SO cool! i luv it! it sounds like something like ERAGON. mayhap, i am a Dragon also. mayhap, i am an Elf. fantasy flows through my vens allowing me to understand the deeper meaning of magic. well done, and happy writing!
~*luthien*~
4dragon-girl-of-golden-eyesdude, this is SO cool! i luv it! it sounds like something like ERAGON. mayhap, i am a Dragon also. mayhap, i am an Elf. fantasy flows through my vens allowing me to understand the deeper meaning of magic. well done, and happy writing!
~*luthien*~
3/7/2006 c1 Walking through a Wall
Your poem sounds really awe-struck, it's so dreamy, it's an inspirational piece. I like it alot.
Write on!
Birley
Your poem sounds really awe-struck, it's so dreamy, it's an inspirational piece. I like it alot.
Write on!
Birley
2/21/2006 c1 5Heatless Flame
This was nice. It flowed nicely, and I like how you made them fight side by side. The best two parts was the last line and the last line in the 3rd stanza. Bravo!
Heatless Flame
5Heatless FlameThis was nice. It flowed nicely, and I like how you made them fight side by side. The best two parts was the last line and the last line in the 3rd stanza. Bravo!
Heatless Flame
11/22/2005 c1 1Kolyssa T. VonDeylen
I absolutely love this poem. When I read it, I can almost feel the dragon's presence. I especially love the statement about legend. Keep up the good work.
1Kolyssa T. VonDeylenI absolutely love this poem. When I read it, I can almost feel the dragon's presence. I especially love the statement about legend. Keep up the good work.
10/10/2005 c1 9Eyetk
Hmm. Very nice!
One thing, though-is this meant to rhyme, or not to rhyme? It sort of reads as if you couldn't decide, and so put in a bit of both, making it a bit awkward.
First stanza, third line:
'Thy ride the winds?'
Why is that 'thy'? In old english, 'thy' translates to the equivilent of 'your' when followed by a word that beings with a consonant. So, this translates to 'Your ride the winds?', which is...well, not proper grammar. Perhaps it was a typo?
Anyhow, nice poem. Well done!
- Eyetk
9EyetkHmm. Very nice!
One thing, though-is this meant to rhyme, or not to rhyme? It sort of reads as if you couldn't decide, and so put in a bit of both, making it a bit awkward.
First stanza, third line:
'Thy ride the winds?'
Why is that 'thy'? In old english, 'thy' translates to the equivilent of 'your' when followed by a word that beings with a consonant. So, this translates to 'Your ride the winds?', which is...well, not proper grammar. Perhaps it was a typo?
Anyhow, nice poem. Well done!
- Eyetk
9/20/2005 c1 59Lakoria
It's awesome. I loved your disrciptions and I loved how you worded it. It was just over-all great! I also love Dragons! Very cool! I would love to see more of your work.
God bless, Lakoria
59LakoriaIt's awesome. I loved your disrciptions and I loved how you worded it. It was just over-all great! I also love Dragons! Very cool! I would love to see more of your work.
God bless, Lakoria
9/9/2005 c1 Tabitha The Great
o...just as i clicked the submit button i realised i wanted to ask you something...could i pretty please copy this and print it out to keep on my wall? i'll put it under your name, or if you want, i'll make up a real name for you, and then put (in brackets) formerly NightDragon0...i just need your approval...i'm not goign to claim this as my own or anything...as if i could ever write something as good as this...reply if you want in a review for my new story! please read it!
Loved this poem, and i can't think of anything else better to say...
~Tabitha the Great
o...just as i clicked the submit button i realised i wanted to ask you something...could i pretty please copy this and print it out to keep on my wall? i'll put it under your name, or if you want, i'll make up a real name for you, and then put (in brackets) formerly NightDragon0...i just need your approval...i'm not goign to claim this as my own or anything...as if i could ever write something as good as this...reply if you want in a review for my new story! please read it!
Loved this poem, and i can't think of anything else better to say...
~Tabitha the Great
9/9/2005 c1 Charity F
Amazing...pure work of genius...wow! i could almost feel that unleashed power and momentum underneath the dragon...beautiful...
you are an amazing poet, even though you onyl have one here...i'll be waiting to see if there'll be more stuff from someone with pure talent...
inspiraional sutff, dude! loved it! keep it coming, army training or not!
~Tabitha the Great
Amazing...pure work of genius...wow! i could almost feel that unleashed power and momentum underneath the dragon...beautiful...
you are an amazing poet, even though you onyl have one here...i'll be waiting to see if there'll be more stuff from someone with pure talent...
inspiraional sutff, dude! loved it! keep it coming, army training or not!
~Tabitha the Great