
8/28/2003 c1
47Anjeni Windsinger
I _love_ this poem. It's so beautiful, and extremely well written. Fantastic job, keep writing.

I _love_ this poem. It's so beautiful, and extremely well written. Fantastic job, keep writing.
7/17/2003 c1
80Plato's Optic Runaway
well, apparently you, unlike me, retain your talent when you're sick. not that i ever had any to being with. anyway, enough whining...i love it...twisted, in a magical fantasy way..makes me think of a book i read a while back...this is interesting. i like it alot.

well, apparently you, unlike me, retain your talent when you're sick. not that i ever had any to being with. anyway, enough whining...i love it...twisted, in a magical fantasy way..makes me think of a book i read a while back...this is interesting. i like it alot.
5/27/2003 c1 greenfroggies
I'm not exactly sure what the poem means but it is still excelent! Keep writing the long ones please!
I'm not exactly sure what the poem means but it is still excelent! Keep writing the long ones please!
5/21/2003 c1
7Little-sunandstars
that is a touching poem. It has depth and meaning, well writing, Bravo! I am a poetry freak and pretty much all I do in my spare time is write poetry.
your poem is a sweet mixture of a parent reasuring their child and their hopes for that child's future.
you rhyme sceme is very good. your use of iambic pentameter (I hope that's the right term for this rhythme) is excellent and the words flow together nicely.

that is a touching poem. It has depth and meaning, well writing, Bravo! I am a poetry freak and pretty much all I do in my spare time is write poetry.
your poem is a sweet mixture of a parent reasuring their child and their hopes for that child's future.
you rhyme sceme is very good. your use of iambic pentameter (I hope that's the right term for this rhythme) is excellent and the words flow together nicely.
5/20/2003 c1
1aleppine
This is so very gentle, and the little snippets of fantasy images that creep into it are lovely - I wish you'd expanded on them! (the 'evil spell' made me think that). For me, it had a wonderfully otherworldy feel to it, like it's something sung to faerie children. I love the reference to summer, and its edges fraying. I remember that feeling so very clearly, for some reason. I also like the title - hints at not quite a lullaby, but just the whispers of one ... well done!

This is so very gentle, and the little snippets of fantasy images that creep into it are lovely - I wish you'd expanded on them! (the 'evil spell' made me think that). For me, it had a wonderfully otherworldy feel to it, like it's something sung to faerie children. I love the reference to summer, and its edges fraying. I remember that feeling so very clearly, for some reason. I also like the title - hints at not quite a lullaby, but just the whispers of one ... well done!
5/16/2003 c1
38Shadafakup
You were sick when you wrote this? Wow man.. Its still very beautiful.. Awesome piece.. When you're sick, u still can rhyme so well.. Cool.. I liked it lots..

You were sick when you wrote this? Wow man.. Its still very beautiful.. Awesome piece.. When you're sick, u still can rhyme so well.. Cool.. I liked it lots..
5/16/2003 c1
51Lieschen
Fantastic...if everyone could write this kind of poetry while being "very sick", then the world would be a much better place :)
ELise

Fantastic...if everyone could write this kind of poetry while being "very sick", then the world would be a much better place :)
ELise
5/4/2003 c1
36obsidian katana
wonderful piece! very sweet and beautiful, nicely written with a bit of good imagery also. i like this. nice work. keep it up!

wonderful piece! very sweet and beautiful, nicely written with a bit of good imagery also. i like this. nice work. keep it up!
5/4/2003 c1
8RavenPhoenix
i like this 1 more than the other 1 well written keep up the great work :):)

i like this 1 more than the other 1 well written keep up the great work :):)
5/1/2003 c1
74wonky donkey
Maybe you should write more often when you are sick because this poem is awesome! It's like a whispered secret you receive a moment before you wake up...or something like that.
Hey not that your other stuff isn't good but this was fantastic!

Maybe you should write more often when you are sick because this poem is awesome! It's like a whispered secret you receive a moment before you wake up...or something like that.
Hey not that your other stuff isn't good but this was fantastic!
5/1/2003 c1 The Black Rider
Clearly you can be sick or well and still write amazing poetry. So lovely and magical, once again. I apologize for not reviewing sooner. And thank you for your kind reviews.
Clearly you can be sick or well and still write amazing poetry. So lovely and magical, once again. I apologize for not reviewing sooner. And thank you for your kind reviews.