for Greif7/22/2003 c1 
8Janice C. Vasquez
That was pretty. hehe. Your english teacher must think your insane, mine sure does. (insert insane laughter here)
It was good, lot of descriptive words. That's one thing i lack. I have a hard time describing things, i just want to get my point across and don't look at small details like that. Good job!
8Janice C. VasquezThat was pretty. hehe. Your english teacher must think your insane, mine sure does. (insert insane laughter here)
It was good, lot of descriptive words. That's one thing i lack. I have a hard time describing things, i just want to get my point across and don't look at small details like that. Good job!
5/6/2003 c1 33Tiefling
Very descriptive. I like it. It could benefit from spell checking, though. Veins, not vains, and more importantly grief (you spelled it right in the story but wrong in the title). Incorrectly spelled titles can put people off reading a fic, because they think (well, I usually do) that if you couldn't even get the title right the rest of it will suck.
33TieflingVery descriptive. I like it. It could benefit from spell checking, though. Veins, not vains, and more importantly grief (you spelled it right in the story but wrong in the title). Incorrectly spelled titles can put people off reading a fic, because they think (well, I usually do) that if you couldn't even get the title right the rest of it will suck.