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90Identity
i like the tone and beat of this poem. very well written. i actually enjoyed reading it instead of finishing it merely in the hope that it will get better (as i usually do). i dont know if you want to use this but how about'Dastards of Bravery' as the title. the poem seems to insinuae that the person(s) you are talking about pretend to be somethig but turn and change when confronted. at least that is what i got from the poem. i could be wrong. great poem
90Identityi like the tone and beat of this poem. very well written. i actually enjoyed reading it instead of finishing it merely in the hope that it will get better (as i usually do). i dont know if you want to use this but how about'Dastards of Bravery' as the title. the poem seems to insinuae that the person(s) you are talking about pretend to be somethig but turn and change when confronted. at least that is what i got from the poem. i could be wrong. great poem
5/24/2003 c1 12Naamela
Whoa...I definitely get the feeling that this is based on Grendel (the monster that the hero Beowulf defeats, for those of you that don't know from ancient epics). Is it? If it is, I feel really smart.
I like it, especially the format, with the indents and stuff. It's an interesting take on the character.
12NaamelaWhoa...I definitely get the feeling that this is based on Grendel (the monster that the hero Beowulf defeats, for those of you that don't know from ancient epics). Is it? If it is, I feel really smart.
I like it, especially the format, with the indents and stuff. It's an interesting take on the character.
5/4/2003 c1 4AcelinWhitefire
Have I already reviewed this? I think so, but just to make sure...this is a pretty good poem. I like the rhythm of it. The few places the poem rhymes seem out of place, though.
4AcelinWhitefireHave I already reviewed this? I think so, but just to make sure...this is a pretty good poem. I like the rhythm of it. The few places the poem rhymes seem out of place, though.
5/3/2003 c1 46SinNombre26
extremely good poem, love the images your words give off. as for title suggestions how about "Nothing More"? its the most commonly used line in poem and thats always a good way to pick a title. nice work keep writing
46SinNombre26extremely good poem, love the images your words give off. as for title suggestions how about "Nothing More"? its the most commonly used line in poem and thats always a good way to pick a title. nice work keep writing