for Manda Rider 1: Friends and Enemies7/28/2003 c1 tzncz
You've been reviewing my story, so I'll review yours :)
That was an interesting chapter. Good intros. Interesting characters. Keep writing!
You've been reviewing my story, so I'll review yours :)
That was an interesting chapter. Good intros. Interesting characters. Keep writing!
7/10/2003 c27 
73aims80
Very interesting story, I just read the whole thing then and was pretty impressed by it. By the title I am thinking there is going to be a sequel or something? I hope so, cos I liked it.
Luv Aims :)
73aims80Very interesting story, I just read the whole thing then and was pretty impressed by it. By the title I am thinking there is going to be a sequel or something? I hope so, cos I liked it.
Luv Aims :)
6/11/2003 c27 lostinscotland
::dances happily:: i figured it out! i figured it out! in chapter...oh, billy, what chapter was it again? who cares! i win! do i get a prize?
::frolics around:: i wanna read the next one! all you need is one little chapter before you post! just a teensy one! ::holds fingers a hairs-breadth apart:: see? only this big! it can't take that long! please?
i wanna see more michael and manda! can they get married? please? or maybe you'll kill off michael in one of 'em...i wish i could do something like that, but i get too attached to the characters. but it makes the story so great! no, don't kill michael. i like him too much!
great story! ::bounces away, her babbling can still be heard miles off:: i like michael and manda, i like michael and manda...::brooke gets stifled, everyone else breathes a sigh of relief::
tehe!
::dances happily:: i figured it out! i figured it out! in chapter...oh, billy, what chapter was it again? who cares! i win! do i get a prize?
::frolics around:: i wanna read the next one! all you need is one little chapter before you post! just a teensy one! ::holds fingers a hairs-breadth apart:: see? only this big! it can't take that long! please?
i wanna see more michael and manda! can they get married? please? or maybe you'll kill off michael in one of 'em...i wish i could do something like that, but i get too attached to the characters. but it makes the story so great! no, don't kill michael. i like him too much!
great story! ::bounces away, her babbling can still be heard miles off:: i like michael and manda, i like michael and manda...::brooke gets stifled, everyone else breathes a sigh of relief::
tehe!
6/11/2003 c26 lostinscotland
muahaha! i lvoe it when villains feel the need to explain their entire plot to their victims...and then the victims live! ...i'm assuming manda survives this; after all, this is sposed to book one, if she dies then where's book two? unless! you write them backwards! like, the last book is the one she's the youngest in, and she dies in the first book! how clever would that be? i really should try that sometime...
::stifles herself:: next! and final! chapter! hahaha!
muahaha! i lvoe it when villains feel the need to explain their entire plot to their victims...and then the victims live! ...i'm assuming manda survives this; after all, this is sposed to book one, if she dies then where's book two? unless! you write them backwards! like, the last book is the one she's the youngest in, and she dies in the first book! how clever would that be? i really should try that sometime...
::stifles herself:: next! and final! chapter! hahaha!
6/11/2003 c25 lostinscotland
i knew it! he did it, he did it! and she beat him up herself, that's why's all bandaged! i'm so smart! ::dances gleefully::
oh, wait...it's not over yet. in fact, it's far from over. 'less he shoots 'em. that would be mean. i'm gonna write a story like that someday! they figure out the murderer, and he kills 'em! hehehe!
oh, wait, again...we probly don't wanna do that to michael and manda. ignore me. ::duct tapes her mouth shut...(or her fingers together) and goes to read some more::
i knew it! he did it, he did it! and she beat him up herself, that's why's all bandaged! i'm so smart! ::dances gleefully::
oh, wait...it's not over yet. in fact, it's far from over. 'less he shoots 'em. that would be mean. i'm gonna write a story like that someday! they figure out the murderer, and he kills 'em! hehehe!
oh, wait, again...we probly don't wanna do that to michael and manda. ignore me. ::duct tapes her mouth shut...(or her fingers together) and goes to read some more::
6/11/2003 c24 lostinscotland
eehee! the plot thickens even more! hafta go do the dishes, then i shall come figure this thing out once and for all! (i still think byron did it...dunno why)
eehee! the plot thickens even more! hafta go do the dishes, then i shall come figure this thing out once and for all! (i still think byron did it...dunno why)
6/11/2003 c23 lostinscotland
heh, kinda figured he'd have to marry her or something. and for that, she decides he killed her? ok.
lalalala! next chap
heh, kinda figured he'd have to marry her or something. and for that, she decides he killed her? ok.
lalalala! next chap
6/11/2003 c22 lostinscotland
billy...now you've gone and confused things again. i do hope i get to see what's on this paper soon?
::sigh:: onward!
billy...now you've gone and confused things again. i do hope i get to see what's on this paper soon?
::sigh:: onward!
6/11/2003 c20 lostinscotland
you killed pearl! 'course, i kill my characters, too, but no murders yet. car accidents, hunting accident, pnuemonia...heh, and all that in one chapter! i'm so bad at this.
i'm rambling again, sorry. next chapter!
you killed pearl! 'course, i kill my characters, too, but no murders yet. car accidents, hunting accident, pnuemonia...heh, and all that in one chapter! i'm so bad at this.
i'm rambling again, sorry. next chapter!
6/11/2003 c18 lostinscotland
yikes!
dratted pearl...mutter mutter
dratted murderer person...::mutters some more, then decides to be sensible and go read::
yikes!
dratted pearl...mutter mutter
dratted murderer person...::mutters some more, then decides to be sensible and go read::
6/11/2003 c14 lostinscotland
tehehe, why is michael ashamed to have an accent? i think they're the coolest things ever...XD
if i were a real person, i would get him to talk for me, and tell him that accents are fun! not that he'd listen...
oh, what am i rambling about now? off to read more!
tehehe, why is michael ashamed to have an accent? i think they're the coolest things ever...XD
if i were a real person, i would get him to talk for me, and tell him that accents are fun! not that he'd listen...
oh, what am i rambling about now? off to read more!
6/11/2003 c11 lostinscotland
byron wouldn't have murdered his own wife, would he? ehh...
::goes to read some more::
byron wouldn't have murdered his own wife, would he? ehh...
::goes to read some more::
6/11/2003 c10 lostinscotland
::tries to remember if she already knows anything about manda's past:: what are these rumors that byron was telling michael? i dun seem to remember them...ah, well, i'll probly see them soon enough. hmph...that wasn't very nice of him. wonder what he's up to...?
::tries to remember if she already knows anything about manda's past:: what are these rumors that byron was telling michael? i dun seem to remember them...ah, well, i'll probly see them soon enough. hmph...that wasn't very nice of him. wonder what he's up to...?