for Under Crumbled Starlight5/22/2004 c1 
127godawful teen-angst poetry
All of your words are so...rich? I can't even single them out because I'd literally be writing the whole poem. Wistful milkfish twillight, loamy tones, inked toes...this is really really good. I love it, and the story it tells.
~lyv
127godawful teen-angst poetryAll of your words are so...rich? I can't even single them out because I'd literally be writing the whole poem. Wistful milkfish twillight, loamy tones, inked toes...this is really really good. I love it, and the story it tells.
~lyv
1/3/2004 c1 6Linmenel
Your words are beautiful, and I say 'your' because you seem to make them do what you want them to do, which is wonderful. And the mentioning of rowan trees makes me happy.
6LinmenelYour words are beautiful, and I say 'your' because you seem to make them do what you want them to do, which is wonderful. And the mentioning of rowan trees makes me happy.
5/9/2003 c1 16phoenixa-mechanique
Your description is indeed a wonder!
It's an excellent piece but you might need to work on some rhythm, the flow and the language is obviously there but perhaps the rhythm is a bit irregular.
Interesting like there - we pull at threads between us.
Very nicely put.
Do keep writing, I look forward to your next piece!
-Phoenixa.
16phoenixa-mechaniqueYour description is indeed a wonder!
It's an excellent piece but you might need to work on some rhythm, the flow and the language is obviously there but perhaps the rhythm is a bit irregular.
Interesting like there - we pull at threads between us.
Very nicely put.
Do keep writing, I look forward to your next piece!
-Phoenixa.
5/8/2003 c1 14reveileb maerdyad
oh. OH! this was somberly beautiful. i like this very, very much. pretty unique imagery, and you hold the reader captive all throughout. i'm mesmerized, to say the least. ^_^;;
14reveileb maerdyadoh. OH! this was somberly beautiful. i like this very, very much. pretty unique imagery, and you hold the reader captive all throughout. i'm mesmerized, to say the least. ^_^;;
5/7/2003 c1 28fallenone87
woah.. nice imagery.. it gave me a very weird yet nice sense of nostalgia.. like how you would play with your best friend without knowing what time is... it's very vivid. i liked it alot.. =) keep writing! thanks for reviewing my stuff.. =)
28fallenone87woah.. nice imagery.. it gave me a very weird yet nice sense of nostalgia.. like how you would play with your best friend without knowing what time is... it's very vivid. i liked it alot.. =) keep writing! thanks for reviewing my stuff.. =)
5/6/2003 c1 9Lonestar Sweetheart
love the images you conjure up... i love descriptive poetry. keep writing
9Lonestar Sweetheartlove the images you conjure up... i love descriptive poetry. keep writing