for Every Rose Has Its Thorns8/20/2004 c1 forsaken illusion
hey i don't know if you remember, but you reviewed one of my poems a while back, and i always return poetry reviews. don't ask why. so yes - i want to thank you for that, even though it was forever ago. better late than never, though, ne?
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i like this poem 'cause it's optimistic and has a nice message of hope in it. even if i suck at writing these things myself, you do it really well. and it's interesting, 'cause it really felt like it'd turn out depressing or cynical ... you know, like the whole thing about life being hard. grin and bear it? that kinda thing. and then you flipped it out of nowhere. haha i can't decide if i liked that or not. you just caught me WAY off guard. but then again, that's like a good thing it means i was really caught up in this, hehe.
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there's a lot of truth in the poem, that's just elegant and simple and impossible to refute. but it's also really well-known, too. you've taken a little cliché and woven it with a bunch of others into a poetry format. nice job. a couple little typos, though.
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=) and i like the repition of the "every rose has its thorns" there - that was clever. so yes, really good job. and completely true. keep up your outlook on this kind of thing, and don't ever lose it, 'cause trust me ... it's not easy to get back.
~k8
hey i don't know if you remember, but you reviewed one of my poems a while back, and i always return poetry reviews. don't ask why. so yes - i want to thank you for that, even though it was forever ago. better late than never, though, ne?
~
i like this poem 'cause it's optimistic and has a nice message of hope in it. even if i suck at writing these things myself, you do it really well. and it's interesting, 'cause it really felt like it'd turn out depressing or cynical ... you know, like the whole thing about life being hard. grin and bear it? that kinda thing. and then you flipped it out of nowhere. haha i can't decide if i liked that or not. you just caught me WAY off guard. but then again, that's like a good thing it means i was really caught up in this, hehe.
~
there's a lot of truth in the poem, that's just elegant and simple and impossible to refute. but it's also really well-known, too. you've taken a little cliché and woven it with a bunch of others into a poetry format. nice job. a couple little typos, though.
~
=) and i like the repition of the "every rose has its thorns" there - that was clever. so yes, really good job. and completely true. keep up your outlook on this kind of thing, and don't ever lose it, 'cause trust me ... it's not easy to get back.
~k8
8/7/2004 c1 Rose lover
Very interesting concept. A few things mar this poem, however.
First of all, "Every artwork has it flaws" a.) has a typo and b.) doesn't seem to fit with the flow of the poem thematically.
Secondly, the third line is too long and awkward. Poor word choice.
Another typo in the fourth line.
Freedom and restrictions and oppotunity and restraints really seem to be the same thing. Using both was uneccessary.
Person does not equal "it." If you wanted to continue to use the same pronoun, you shouldn't have used a human as an example.
The tenth and eleventh lines (life/death and rose/thorns)are great. The last two only serve to detract from them. The poem up until that point seems to be leading up to (preferrably NOT in these words) "Life's tough. Get over it." All of the sudden you hit the reader with "Be strong and overcome." WHAT? Totally destroys the poetry of the previous lines. If that was the theme of this poem, it should have been included earlier somehow so it wouldn't be so jarring.
I like the idea of this poem, but it could have been executed much better.
Very interesting concept. A few things mar this poem, however.
First of all, "Every artwork has it flaws" a.) has a typo and b.) doesn't seem to fit with the flow of the poem thematically.
Secondly, the third line is too long and awkward. Poor word choice.
Another typo in the fourth line.
Freedom and restrictions and oppotunity and restraints really seem to be the same thing. Using both was uneccessary.
Person does not equal "it." If you wanted to continue to use the same pronoun, you shouldn't have used a human as an example.
The tenth and eleventh lines (life/death and rose/thorns)are great. The last two only serve to detract from them. The poem up until that point seems to be leading up to (preferrably NOT in these words) "Life's tough. Get over it." All of the sudden you hit the reader with "Be strong and overcome." WHAT? Totally destroys the poetry of the previous lines. If that was the theme of this poem, it should have been included earlier somehow so it wouldn't be so jarring.
I like the idea of this poem, but it could have been executed much better.
7/13/2004 c1 
4False Advertisement
That's good. (WOW!) Haha. That was just to spite you. I'm glad you caught the MOJOness. Don't have much to say now. You had to go. And that is all. So... bye.
-Katelyn
4False AdvertisementThat's good. (WOW!) Haha. That was just to spite you. I'm glad you caught the MOJOness. Don't have much to say now. You had to go. And that is all. So... bye.
-Katelyn
5/27/2004 c1 Liem
I would definitely reccomend this poem to anyone who's feeling down on a bad day. It's a really great poem, and I look forward to your other works.
I would definitely reccomend this poem to anyone who's feeling down on a bad day. It's a really great poem, and I look forward to your other works.
11/4/2003 c1 13Faded Soulfire
Hey Julia, I'm sick as a dog and I figured I'd read some more of your poems and stuff, while I'm stuck in my house doing absolutely nothing whatsoever. AND I really like this one. Right now, I know your having a hard time, but when I read this poem it kinda reminds me that WE will have obstacles in life to overcome and I know you can 'overcome' everything that your dealing with right now.
Read over this poem: I think there is a possibility that it could help you out. Thinking it over, I feel a bit relieved because I know HOW true those words are. Have a good day.
-Andrea
13Faded SoulfireHey Julia, I'm sick as a dog and I figured I'd read some more of your poems and stuff, while I'm stuck in my house doing absolutely nothing whatsoever. AND I really like this one. Right now, I know your having a hard time, but when I read this poem it kinda reminds me that WE will have obstacles in life to overcome and I know you can 'overcome' everything that your dealing with right now.
Read over this poem: I think there is a possibility that it could help you out. Thinking it over, I feel a bit relieved because I know HOW true those words are. Have a good day.
-Andrea
10/18/2003 c1 36obsidian katana
wonderful poem! so true, and encouraging. yeah, we should persist in life to strive to overcome the obstacles and weaknesses. i like the title of this. isn't there a song by the same title? anyway, good job here.
36obsidian katanawonderful poem! so true, and encouraging. yeah, we should persist in life to strive to overcome the obstacles and weaknesses. i like the title of this. isn't there a song by the same title? anyway, good job here.
9/7/2003 c1 8Keeper of the Key
Wow, this is an awsome poem! It has a powerful lesson behind it. Nice job with the title.
8Keeper of the KeyWow, this is an awsome poem! It has a powerful lesson behind it. Nice job with the title.
8/9/2003 c1 Secna
Hey this is a great poem. It really touched me b/c I know what it's like to go through major obstacles in life. You described practically what life is in a short but to the point poem. It's great and I read all of your poems, they are all very good. And you shouldn't put yourself down, you are a wonderful writer and you shouldn't think otherwise. Dont' think your writing is bad. Keep up the great work.
Hey this is a great poem. It really touched me b/c I know what it's like to go through major obstacles in life. You described practically what life is in a short but to the point poem. It's great and I read all of your poems, they are all very good. And you shouldn't put yourself down, you are a wonderful writer and you shouldn't think otherwise. Dont' think your writing is bad. Keep up the great work.
6/29/2003 c1 G.Z. DeMuertes
Hey
I dont know if you still check your reviews, but your work is amazeing im curently reading a chance for romance. its awesome your character structure is great. and your poems are awesome too. well keep up the good work
Hey
I dont know if you still check your reviews, but your work is amazeing im curently reading a chance for romance. its awesome your character structure is great. and your poems are awesome too. well keep up the good work
6/9/2003 c1 LEASLE WHO DESERVES HER OWN SPOT ON THE THIINGY
I like this. The end is kind of abrupt and un-rhymalbly thingy however you spell it. Maybe I'll sign up for this thingy now. ok! Talk to you later! BYE
I like this. The end is kind of abrupt and un-rhymalbly thingy however you spell it. Maybe I'll sign up for this thingy now. ok! Talk to you later! BYE