for He Never Comes1/4/2005 c1 beyond-the-love
How sad...
I kind of relate to this short piece though... it's so emo lol
There are some sentence structure errors.. or maybe thats what you're going for.. lol
Nice!
How sad...
I kind of relate to this short piece though... it's so emo lol
There are some sentence structure errors.. or maybe thats what you're going for.. lol
Nice!
6/5/2004 c1 
26pneumothorax
That's quite sad and sweet really, I'm not sure exactly what it made me feel but I definately got an image of a broken person. Reminded me of all those chat shows when a friend sees a friend with someone who just doesn't care. I saw one a week ago and the guy was just sitting there shrugging going 'I don't care' when she'd just taken a lie detecter test and generally being an ass about it. It wasn't that he wasn't bothered .. it wasn't even that. It was like he was watching tv and not doing anything. But enough rambling. Let's just say though provoking lol. (r&r back?)
26pneumothoraxThat's quite sad and sweet really, I'm not sure exactly what it made me feel but I definately got an image of a broken person. Reminded me of all those chat shows when a friend sees a friend with someone who just doesn't care. I saw one a week ago and the guy was just sitting there shrugging going 'I don't care' when she'd just taken a lie detecter test and generally being an ass about it. It wasn't that he wasn't bothered .. it wasn't even that. It was like he was watching tv and not doing anything. But enough rambling. Let's just say though provoking lol. (r&r back?)
2/1/2004 c1 6Shavona
Very nice story, I know someone like that... She's dead in spirit but she's there phsyically.. Very nice, not much to say right now. Continue writing.
6ShavonaVery nice story, I know someone like that... She's dead in spirit but she's there phsyically.. Very nice, not much to say right now. Continue writing.
7/12/2003 c1 13Faded Soulfire
Oh gosh, I can almost completely relate to this short story here. It is so sad plus the girl in the story seems a lot like me in ways... I mean, we are also different in some senses but this story hits pretty close to home. And I think it is a wonderful short story. I adore your writing style.
Well, if I get a chance, I'll going to slowly look through some poems and stuff...very bored today lol so I'll catch up on reviewing ppl's stuff.
~Andrea
13Faded SoulfireOh gosh, I can almost completely relate to this short story here. It is so sad plus the girl in the story seems a lot like me in ways... I mean, we are also different in some senses but this story hits pretty close to home. And I think it is a wonderful short story. I adore your writing style.
Well, if I get a chance, I'll going to slowly look through some poems and stuff...very bored today lol so I'll catch up on reviewing ppl's stuff.
~Andrea
6/2/2003 c1 2Angelicphyre
Very nice. Totally something I can relate to. Don't worry, you'll be getting a lot of reviews from me as I get through your stories...
~*~Angelic~*~
2AngelicphyreVery nice. Totally something I can relate to. Don't worry, you'll be getting a lot of reviews from me as I get through your stories...
~*~Angelic~*~
5/28/2003 c1 Zee
Realistic much? i lied it alot. it was a great sort story! keep up with it!
Realistic much? i lied it alot. it was a great sort story! keep up with it!
5/23/2003 c1 georgie
this is so sad! and people want to know where you get your ideas? i really hope the real "she" doesn't turn out like that...i an so sad!its like what monsters inc does to Katie! who says im not sappy? lol j/k but it's still really sad
this is so sad! and people want to know where you get your ideas? i really hope the real "she" doesn't turn out like that...i an so sad!its like what monsters inc does to Katie! who says im not sappy? lol j/k but it's still really sad
5/19/2003 c1 Uhm
Sad. Sad. Where do you get such sad ideas?
Sad. Sad. Where do you get such sad ideas?
5/16/2003 c1 lyss
hey
this was good!
hey
this was good!
5/16/2003 c1 Cutie Eskimo
good job! ^_^ it's really nice!
good job! ^_^ it's really nice!
5/15/2003 c1 Tusaki Hibiki
I like much! Very sad though...But otherwise it's very good!
I like much! Very sad though...But otherwise it's very good!
5/15/2003 c1 loch lomond
I feel like the girl who is used... my ex treated me like shit and was always busy. i would wait and wait for him to call or to want to do something but he never would.
I feel like the girl who is used... my ex treated me like shit and was always busy. i would wait and wait for him to call or to want to do something but he never would.