for Broken2/13/2004 c2 
70Burning Moon
so sad . . . im seriously about to cry here . . . i would be honored if u reviewed a few of mine . . .
70Burning Moonso sad . . . im seriously about to cry here . . . i would be honored if u reviewed a few of mine . . .
12/18/2003 c1 Burning Moon
wow . . . flows and rhymes perfectly . . . nothin more to say . . . btw, 2 ne1 interested, please r'n'r "falling angel" and "crush[ed] heart"
"n thats the way the cookie crumbles"
wow . . . flows and rhymes perfectly . . . nothin more to say . . . btw, 2 ne1 interested, please r'n'r "falling angel" and "crush[ed] heart"
"n thats the way the cookie crumbles"
12/9/2003 c2 Hindi Sad Diamonds
"I felt your soul—
It frightened me
I’m letting mine
Decay."
Beautiful. Stunning. I can't think of the right words to use. Everything you write is just so beautiful, m'dear, and well written. I'm so glad you came up with this second part, as it does fit perfectly, and is just as amazing as the first.
Just perfect. I adore it.
"I felt your soul—
It frightened me
I’m letting mine
Decay."
Beautiful. Stunning. I can't think of the right words to use. Everything you write is just so beautiful, m'dear, and well written. I'm so glad you came up with this second part, as it does fit perfectly, and is just as amazing as the first.
Just perfect. I adore it.
12/9/2003 c1 Hindi Sad Diamonds
Mary Helen, you are amazing. And look! There's a second part! Hurrah! Completely brilliant, m'dear. Everything you write is just so perfect! I love it! And now I'm off to read Part Two.
Yay!
~ Cinna.
Mary Helen, you are amazing. And look! There's a second part! Hurrah! Completely brilliant, m'dear. Everything you write is just so perfect! I love it! And now I'm off to read Part Two.
Yay!
~ Cinna.
11/29/2003 c2 49Finesse
...this is sheer brilliance. I am speechless after witnessing your talent *bows to you*
*adds to favorites*
49Finesse...this is sheer brilliance. I am speechless after witnessing your talent *bows to you*
*adds to favorites*
11/23/2003 c2 PepsiAngel
Your words are so -right-... so gorgeous. They rhyme with ease and perfection. Or, if not perfection, something real close.
The talent you have is undeniable.
xCryssa
Your words are so -right-... so gorgeous. They rhyme with ease and perfection. Or, if not perfection, something real close.
The talent you have is undeniable.
xCryssa
8/23/2003 c2 Sarah
Wow... I wish I could write songs that well.
That is truly emotional. I love angsty songs like this. Part 2 has inpired a character in a personal story I'm going to write. Keep up the great work!
Wow... I wish I could write songs that well.
That is truly emotional. I love angsty songs like this. Part 2 has inpired a character in a personal story I'm going to write. Keep up the great work!
6/27/2003 c2 18InSpiteOf
I loved the two parts of the poem. They were so meaningful and heartfelt. I loved the rhythm and motion of the piece. You were right in saying it was a good poem. I commend you. :)
18InSpiteOfI loved the two parts of the poem. They were so meaningful and heartfelt. I loved the rhythm and motion of the piece. You were right in saying it was a good poem. I commend you. :)
6/20/2003 c1 34Wasted Postage
This was very sad and very wonderful all at the same time! If that makes even a drop of sense. Excellent work!
34Wasted PostageThis was very sad and very wonderful all at the same time! If that makes even a drop of sense. Excellent work!
6/12/2003 c2 217MistrissD
Hun this is so beautiful! I love the dismal attitude you took with this, its so incredibly amazing,aahh I can't even explain how much in love with this I am! Keep up the fabulous work, luv ya!
217MistrissDHun this is so beautiful! I love the dismal attitude you took with this, its so incredibly amazing,aahh I can't even explain how much in love with this I am! Keep up the fabulous work, luv ya!
6/1/2003 c1 36obsidian katana
wonderful piece! well written, sad, full of emotion. you did a good job. keep up the good work!
36obsidian katanawonderful piece! well written, sad, full of emotion. you did a good job. keep up the good work!
5/27/2003 c2 12Tyde
Okay this bit is just wow-
“You felt me
Flinch away
I felt your soul—
It frightened me
I’m letting mine
Decay.”
Excellent writing!
12TydeOkay this bit is just wow-
“You felt me
Flinch away
I felt your soul—
It frightened me
I’m letting mine
Decay.”
Excellent writing!
5/27/2003 c1 Tyde
I love this bit “I saw your heart, Through ice and stone; You left my heart to bleed”. I can almost hear the tune in my head – it’s a shame you can’t add a sound file to this :o)
I love this bit “I saw your heart, Through ice and stone; You left my heart to bleed”. I can almost hear the tune in my head – it’s a shame you can’t add a sound file to this :o)