for Midnight Rayne4/16/2004 c1 
31Aedyn Star
ooh. i like this. one thought though. teh devil's number is thought to be 6, you have it as 9. or am i just assuming it is the devil number? doesn't matter either wway, great story!
31Aedyn Starooh. i like this. one thought though. teh devil's number is thought to be 6, you have it as 9. or am i just assuming it is the devil number? doesn't matter either wway, great story!
5/23/2003 c1 12Silverlight Elf
Wow... holy crap dude, this is awsume! I cant wait for you to get to the REALY stuff! Common! hehe, I'm waiting!
12Silverlight ElfWow... holy crap dude, this is awsume! I cant wait for you to get to the REALY stuff! Common! hehe, I'm waiting!
5/20/2003 c1 Lythande
Good characterization. I'm looking forward to seeing future installments.
Good characterization. I'm looking forward to seeing future installments.
5/18/2003 c1 12Naamela
Wow. I'm in awe. How do you fit that much characterization into one little chapter?
I definitely want to know more. Write more. More more more.
Nothing to complain about (and believe me, I do try! ^-^ )
~~Scotia Li
12NaamelaWow. I'm in awe. How do you fit that much characterization into one little chapter?
I definitely want to know more. Write more. More more more.
Nothing to complain about (and believe me, I do try! ^-^ )
~~Scotia Li
5/16/2003 c1 2onyx assassin
oh, this is a good story so far!
I don't think you have too much description at all, in fact, I think this would work really well as a prologue, considering it's a tad on the short side for a chapter (in my opinion)
The only qualm I have with your writing is that you switched tenses twice, and I don't know if that was intentional or not, but it was kind of awkward and didn't make a whole lot of sense. So if it was intentional, my apologies, but if it wasn't, you might want to look over your chapters once or twice before posting them, just to make sure they're okay and what you want. But you're a good writer, and I definitely will continue to read this story, so you will be getting some pretty long flames if you ever decide to discontinue it...
Thanks
Onyx Assassin
2onyx assassinoh, this is a good story so far!
I don't think you have too much description at all, in fact, I think this would work really well as a prologue, considering it's a tad on the short side for a chapter (in my opinion)
The only qualm I have with your writing is that you switched tenses twice, and I don't know if that was intentional or not, but it was kind of awkward and didn't make a whole lot of sense. So if it was intentional, my apologies, but if it wasn't, you might want to look over your chapters once or twice before posting them, just to make sure they're okay and what you want. But you're a good writer, and I definitely will continue to read this story, so you will be getting some pretty long flames if you ever decide to discontinue it...
Thanks
Onyx Assassin