for Anila4/2/2005 c2 X
Looks good so far. I love the original names...so many stories now have the same names over and over...like "spike" and "blade"...
Looks good so far. I love the original names...so many stories now have the same names over and over...like "spike" and "blade"...
9/28/2003 c2 
13FiveToCharm
ooh... this story has got a real nice plot... u gots 2 update real soon k?
13FiveToCharmooh... this story has got a real nice plot... u gots 2 update real soon k?
8/27/2003 c2 12Smiley Gurl 1019
Right, good story, POST SOMETHING! And I mean NOW! POST NOW! POST NOW! POST NOW! POST NOW! POST NOW! POST NOW! POST NOW! POST NOW! POST NOW! POST NOW! POST NOW! POST NOW! POST NOW! POST NOW! POST NOW! POST NOW! POST NOW! POST NOW! POST NOW! POST NOW! POST NOW! POST NOW! POST NOW! POST NOW! POST NOW! POST NOW! POST NOW! POST NOW! POST NOW! POST NOW! POST NOW! POST NOW!
12Smiley Gurl 1019Right, good story, POST SOMETHING! And I mean NOW! POST NOW! POST NOW! POST NOW! POST NOW! POST NOW! POST NOW! POST NOW! POST NOW! POST NOW! POST NOW! POST NOW! POST NOW! POST NOW! POST NOW! POST NOW! POST NOW! POST NOW! POST NOW! POST NOW! POST NOW! POST NOW! POST NOW! POST NOW! POST NOW! POST NOW! POST NOW! POST NOW! POST NOW! POST NOW! POST NOW! POST NOW! POST NOW!
8/2/2003 c1 Jade is going to kill me I swear
*edging away from a short, golden-haired jade-eyed elf who's brandishing a butcher knife* HELP! MY CHARACTER'S GOING TO KILL ME! DOWN, JADE, DOWN!
*manages to send Jade back to the Realm* Okay, now that she's gone...YOU BETTER STINKIN UPDATE THIS BEFORE I KILL OFF CERTAIN CHARACTERS! AND DON'T THINK I WON'T!
*Jade comes back, still wielding her butcher knife*
Uh oh. I'll yell at you to update more later...I've got difficulties with characters. *takes off, Jade running behind*
*edging away from a short, golden-haired jade-eyed elf who's brandishing a butcher knife* HELP! MY CHARACTER'S GOING TO KILL ME! DOWN, JADE, DOWN!
*manages to send Jade back to the Realm* Okay, now that she's gone...YOU BETTER STINKIN UPDATE THIS BEFORE I KILL OFF CERTAIN CHARACTERS! AND DON'T THINK I WON'T!
*Jade comes back, still wielding her butcher knife*
Uh oh. I'll yell at you to update more later...I've got difficulties with characters. *takes off, Jade running behind*
7/6/2003 c2 16Lady Kickass
You've set up the tone for this piece really nicely. After reading the end of chapter two, I had a understanding of Inakayla's perspective on life that I wouldn't have gotten with just a usual introduction shpeal. Cool that you make more of her character show as the story continues, without making it seem like "okay, now I have to show you this side of her because this and this have to happen..." -It seems as though the story is just flowing on its own.
The overall construction of this story so far is very strong. You've left a lot of subtle openings for a reader's questions and curiosity. Plus, the characters have great, interesting personalities that will make reading about them in the future fun. Please keep going with this story, its a pleasure to read!
~~Lady Kickass
16Lady KickassYou've set up the tone for this piece really nicely. After reading the end of chapter two, I had a understanding of Inakayla's perspective on life that I wouldn't have gotten with just a usual introduction shpeal. Cool that you make more of her character show as the story continues, without making it seem like "okay, now I have to show you this side of her because this and this have to happen..." -It seems as though the story is just flowing on its own.
The overall construction of this story so far is very strong. You've left a lot of subtle openings for a reader's questions and curiosity. Plus, the characters have great, interesting personalities that will make reading about them in the future fun. Please keep going with this story, its a pleasure to read!
~~Lady Kickass
6/28/2003 c2 4Framage
okay... im a bit confused, but i guess thats how its supposed to be. anyway, please continue, im rather interested.
4Framageokay... im a bit confused, but i guess thats how its supposed to be. anyway, please continue, im rather interested.
6/28/2003 c1 Framage
interesting. i do really like it. i wanted to say, though, that when (mind you im only on the first chapter) you someone is talking and then another person talks, your supposed to change paragraphs. other than that and the fact that perhaps you should describe scenery/characters more i have nothing else to say. i go on the higher chapters.
interesting. i do really like it. i wanted to say, though, that when (mind you im only on the first chapter) you someone is talking and then another person talks, your supposed to change paragraphs. other than that and the fact that perhaps you should describe scenery/characters more i have nothing else to say. i go on the higher chapters.
6/25/2003 c2 Penthesilea
I recieved your review for Elemental and couldn't resist peeking at one of your stories. All I can say is Anila is pretty freakin' cool so far.
I love the culture blend. Too many people underestimate the power of a culture blend in a story, I hope you use it well.
The only suggestion I have is with the dialogue. Don't get me wrong, the words are fine, but you've got Rhondon and Inakayla talking in the same paragraph sometimes.
Over all it looks pretty awesome... awsom... awesom... awsome... however you spell it. Do you have some sort of update list or something, 'cause I'd like to be on it.
Righty-O, I'm off to read your other to stories.
I recieved your review for Elemental and couldn't resist peeking at one of your stories. All I can say is Anila is pretty freakin' cool so far.
I love the culture blend. Too many people underestimate the power of a culture blend in a story, I hope you use it well.
The only suggestion I have is with the dialogue. Don't get me wrong, the words are fine, but you've got Rhondon and Inakayla talking in the same paragraph sometimes.
Over all it looks pretty awesome... awsom... awesom... awsome... however you spell it. Do you have some sort of update list or something, 'cause I'd like to be on it.
Righty-O, I'm off to read your other to stories.
6/25/2003 c2 14The Ruin
OK this is actually pretty good but remember that in dialogue when another person begins to speak you should start a new paragraph.
Also, more explanation about your world is needed, because it's pretty confusing seeing as how one moment it seems to be our normal, real world and the next people are talking about 'Wind' and everyone has strange names.
14The RuinOK this is actually pretty good but remember that in dialogue when another person begins to speak you should start a new paragraph.
Also, more explanation about your world is needed, because it's pretty confusing seeing as how one moment it seems to be our normal, real world and the next people are talking about 'Wind' and everyone has strange names.
6/14/2003 c1 Aceles
Oh, forgot to say that it was a bit confusing, but I liked it! and I like Rondron too. (Rhondrons a patsy... :?((Mr.Confused face) Oh well, anyway, keep going please! And the hooded guy was kinda cool and freaky...where'd you learn about all the name symbolism anyway? And I agree, Tolkein names are cool. Bye-Ya!
Aceles
Oh, forgot to say that it was a bit confusing, but I liked it! and I like Rondron too. (Rhondrons a patsy... :?((Mr.Confused face) Oh well, anyway, keep going please! And the hooded guy was kinda cool and freaky...where'd you learn about all the name symbolism anyway? And I agree, Tolkein names are cool. Bye-Ya!
Aceles
6/14/2003 c2 Aceles
very good, get rid of your writers block SOHOHOHON! Very good so far, I liked the ozone torturer AKA bus bit, being an enviromentalist. Anyway, I can't wait for this to continue! Bye-ya!(I've decided to onlky end some reviews with away, as it is very strange)
very good, get rid of your writers block SOHOHOHON! Very good so far, I liked the ozone torturer AKA bus bit, being an enviromentalist. Anyway, I can't wait for this to continue! Bye-ya!(I've decided to onlky end some reviews with away, as it is very strange)
6/8/2003 c1 Katie
what can i say, michelle? you know how much i like this one...it's cool knowing what namir is too, but that's just me! you're doing a great job, i really like this one. keep me posted.
what can i say, michelle? you know how much i like this one...it's cool knowing what namir is too, but that's just me! you're doing a great job, i really like this one. keep me posted.
6/1/2003 c2 5Yaviewen
Hee hee... it's my story and i like it still! Woo hoo.
cOOkiMoNsteR626(sorry if i didn't get all the caps right ^_^;): Tee hee, me like your stories! And I like Rhondon too! WOO HOO! ^_^ :D thanks for the compliments, :) SOMEBODY I DONT KNOW READS MY BIO? Woah...
Tweak McFreak: I can't wait for chapter three too! Wait... this is MY story... Oh well, still can't wait... :D
Kumi Sataki: *giggles* CU! MWAHAHAHAHA! I like how it's turning out too!
Waenros Iaurweth: Hurray for people with Tolkien names! yeah, it is kinda confusing, but that's the fun of it ;)
A Very Tired Lily: :P :P :P Go to bed you FREAK! And i put my story on my favorite authors list because I like it! *wacks Lilia the Nutcase on the head with a mallet for everytime she says "ANIA!"
The Artist Formally Known as Kitty: HIYA HANNAH!
Cachuate Loca: Hi Jen. :P I enjoy confusing the H3(( out of you! It's fun! Lily must be smarter than you ((no duh)), 'cause she doesn't get confused and neither does Katie...:D
Yaviewen: Hi me! I like my story too..:D
... wait... *looks confused, pops out*
5YaviewenHee hee... it's my story and i like it still! Woo hoo.
cOOkiMoNsteR626(sorry if i didn't get all the caps right ^_^;): Tee hee, me like your stories! And I like Rhondon too! WOO HOO! ^_^ :D thanks for the compliments, :) SOMEBODY I DONT KNOW READS MY BIO? Woah...
Tweak McFreak: I can't wait for chapter three too! Wait... this is MY story... Oh well, still can't wait... :D
Kumi Sataki: *giggles* CU! MWAHAHAHAHA! I like how it's turning out too!
Waenros Iaurweth: Hurray for people with Tolkien names! yeah, it is kinda confusing, but that's the fun of it ;)
A Very Tired Lily: :P :P :P Go to bed you FREAK! And i put my story on my favorite authors list because I like it! *wacks Lilia the Nutcase on the head with a mallet for everytime she says "ANIA!"
The Artist Formally Known as Kitty: HIYA HANNAH!
Cachuate Loca: Hi Jen. :P I enjoy confusing the H3(( out of you! It's fun! Lily must be smarter than you ((no duh)), 'cause she doesn't get confused and neither does Katie...:D
Yaviewen: Hi me! I like my story too..:D
... wait... *looks confused, pops out*
5/27/2003 c2 Veelenwen
Tee hee.
I love it!
YOu write too well. It's not fair!
oh well. I'm exceedingly proud of you anyway.
O. Tell Kitty it's cool for me
Luv Ya
Tootles
:P
Tee hee.
I love it!
YOu write too well. It's not fair!
oh well. I'm exceedingly proud of you anyway.
O. Tell Kitty it's cool for me
Luv Ya
Tootles
:P
5/26/2003 c2 5cOOkiMoNsteR626
the ending to this chapter wasn't bad. that was pretty kool with that dark hooded guy. i like Rhondon. anyway, i hope u update soon. im out...my medicines have succeeded in drugging n knocking me out...-_-;
5cOOkiMoNsteR626the ending to this chapter wasn't bad. that was pretty kool with that dark hooded guy. i like Rhondon. anyway, i hope u update soon. im out...my medicines have succeeded in drugging n knocking me out...-_-;