for Tale of Argo8/12/2003 c1 YoungFlower
hey there! You're blowing me away. AGAIN. it's awesome, i can't really say much more than that without being redundant. :-) Keep writing, and check out my new one, a love story.
hey there! You're blowing me away. AGAIN. it's awesome, i can't really say much more than that without being redundant. :-) Keep writing, and check out my new one, a love story.
6/24/2003 c1 
30Preston2099
Please look at fruits of humanity. I wrote something and I hope you read it; it's important.
30Preston2099Please look at fruits of humanity. I wrote something and I hope you read it; it's important.
5/28/2003 c2 6InsaneHikari
Great writing. Really descriptive, but not to the point where it's overdone.
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6InsaneHikariGreat writing. Really descriptive, but not to the point where it's overdone.
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*thud* ahhe!
5/28/2003 c1 5tHeLoVeLeSsSoLdIeR
Wow! That was an amazing story. It left me in suspense. The ideas were brilliant. i hope u will create an ending to this story.
5tHeLoVeLeSsSoLdIeRWow! That was an amazing story. It left me in suspense. The ideas were brilliant. i hope u will create an ending to this story.
5/28/2003 c2 69Lowell Boston
Nice cliffhanger. The plot thickens as they say. I'll try to check back to see if you've posted more.
Lowell
69Lowell BostonNice cliffhanger. The plot thickens as they say. I'll try to check back to see if you've posted more.
Lowell
5/28/2003 c1 Lowell Boston
Good opening chapter. You've caught my interest. The only part that I would suggest cutting down was when Michael wakes up in the moring and goes through his grooming routine in the bathroom. There was nothing there that advanced the story forward other than showing that Mike likes to be clean. Other than that - well done!
Lowell
Good opening chapter. You've caught my interest. The only part that I would suggest cutting down was when Michael wakes up in the moring and goes through his grooming routine in the bathroom. There was nothing there that advanced the story forward other than showing that Mike likes to be clean. Other than that - well done!
Lowell
5/27/2003 c2 5Muzak-Freak06
Hm... First of all I am confused of your review of my poem, Forest Despair. You say that it id not my writing that impressed you yet you say later that my use of repition was impressing and it was, "clever." Also you say that I wrote about the topic effortlessly. However, isn't repitition a part of writing and don't you need to have good writing to make your story flow? Oh well...my opinion.
Anyways onto your piece. It was a very good piece of work. Your use of word choice is impressive and helps to color the story. You also put a great deal of depth into the writing. In your words,"Cheers!"
5Muzak-Freak06Hm... First of all I am confused of your review of my poem, Forest Despair. You say that it id not my writing that impressed you yet you say later that my use of repition was impressing and it was, "clever." Also you say that I wrote about the topic effortlessly. However, isn't repitition a part of writing and don't you need to have good writing to make your story flow? Oh well...my opinion.
Anyways onto your piece. It was a very good piece of work. Your use of word choice is impressive and helps to color the story. You also put a great deal of depth into the writing. In your words,"Cheers!"