11/11/2004 c1 27Alcione Pendergast
Wow. I really must say, I'm becoming quite a fan of your work. :-) The title Sisterhood of the Moon caught my eye, and I'm thinking, "Wow, that sounds like Daughters of the Moon." And lo and behold, that's what had inspired you to write this. (So says the summary!) I loved DotM, so I figured I'd give your story a try. Good job!

6/21/2003 c6 27Nicole Lauren
I believe it was Esther who suggested I take a look at your work. She wasn't kidding when she spoke so highly of you. :)

You have a wonderful talent with creating imagery and setting a scene inside the reader's mind. This story in particular seems quite nice. I do see how it was inspired by the Daughter of the Moon series, however I would try to be careful with using Ms. Ewings ideas. Just to avoid conflicts later.

I personally think I might like your story MORE then Daughters Of the Moon. A few things I would like to point out though for developing a better story.

May I suggest trying to develop the personalities and actions of the characters. With stories involving several main characters, often their personalities will become cardboard and lifeless. I think that was one of Ms. Ewings problems. To set an example of what I am describing as a lifeless character think:

Jenny is a nice person.

or

Crystal was always quiet and really smart.



In short, give your characters depth. There are MANY excerises out there that will help you create realistic characters.

Well other then that I think you have a fairly nice to story on your hands and I look forward to seeing more of your work in the future. Also, congrads on publishing your novel. :)

5/26/2003 c1 bubabaloo
wow! That was good! At first I thought it was gonna be like Sailor Moon or The Power Rangers, but it changed. I'm hoping you're planning on writing more?

~*S.J. Winter*~