for The Angel's Seal9/19/2004 c1 
1Fallen Maverick
Heh, I can just imagine this as a late-night animé, which I'd inevitably be watching out of sheer adoration accompanied by boredom. In short, good for the feeling, though lacking somewhat in description.
Also, I'm not sure how realistic it is that the professor could say the exact words for the event with the cloaked man, Hyo, and the relic. It's as if you're trying to do a sort of flashback effect, in which case it may be better to imply that instead of having Ruiji verbally explain it.
1Fallen MaverickHeh, I can just imagine this as a late-night animé, which I'd inevitably be watching out of sheer adoration accompanied by boredom. In short, good for the feeling, though lacking somewhat in description.
Also, I'm not sure how realistic it is that the professor could say the exact words for the event with the cloaked man, Hyo, and the relic. It's as if you're trying to do a sort of flashback effect, in which case it may be better to imply that instead of having Ruiji verbally explain it.
8/17/2004 c7 Alaurei
I am back and I've finally caught up with my chores! Only a little bit more on the list to finish and I'm done and ready for highschool! (does a little dance)
This chapter was so funny. Not as funny as some of your other chapters, because, it also had a sense of sad and angry emotions flowing in it too. I gaped at the part where Granar and Kazo were eaten. I nearly fell out of my chair ready to cry. The hotshot and the raptor, gone? No, never. Then I remembered you talking about the group of four making another appearance in a third book. So, I made myself continue to read because I knew they would come back some how. ^^ I'm so happy! This story wouldn't the same without them.
I have an odd feeling that when Kazo says Sayoko and Dein are coming back, they truly are. I like Dein, but not Sayoko. She is just annoying to me, I would really rather that Hyo doesn't end up with anyone. But, that's only because I think Hana should stick with her 'true' father, and not have to put up with a step mother. But, that's all just my personal opinion right? I'll go on reader review strike if you right one sentence about them getting together. You hear me? Strike I tell you!
Not really, but, I'd be very disapointed. ~_^ Oh well, life doesn't always give you lemons. (aren't I corny? My jokes suck...XP) Anyway, the battle desciptions were even better in this chapter than the last. It was amazing! A punch that brakes bones, I would have never expected that from Granar. And Kazo, getting emotional. Granar too! I feel so bad. I hope we find out more about Granar's past...it's hard to read about how much he hurts. I mean, he's never the emotional type until now so it must be pretty bad. Or, Kisero is just making it really bad. He's so evil, but weak in strength I must say. And Lick, oh my gosh, I love lick! (cuddles him) I will adopt him. You can put me in the story too if he isn't already taken. I would keep him and brush him and feed him and play with him etc. Aww, if I can't have him, I shall be his number one fan. ^^
Amazing chapter once again. This is probably one of my favorites. It would be hard to choose, but this one was really great. Keep up the great work, can't wait for the next chapter and the next chapter of Dragon Warz. ^^ Talk to you later!
-Nickel City
I am back and I've finally caught up with my chores! Only a little bit more on the list to finish and I'm done and ready for highschool! (does a little dance)
This chapter was so funny. Not as funny as some of your other chapters, because, it also had a sense of sad and angry emotions flowing in it too. I gaped at the part where Granar and Kazo were eaten. I nearly fell out of my chair ready to cry. The hotshot and the raptor, gone? No, never. Then I remembered you talking about the group of four making another appearance in a third book. So, I made myself continue to read because I knew they would come back some how. ^^ I'm so happy! This story wouldn't the same without them.
I have an odd feeling that when Kazo says Sayoko and Dein are coming back, they truly are. I like Dein, but not Sayoko. She is just annoying to me, I would really rather that Hyo doesn't end up with anyone. But, that's only because I think Hana should stick with her 'true' father, and not have to put up with a step mother. But, that's all just my personal opinion right? I'll go on reader review strike if you right one sentence about them getting together. You hear me? Strike I tell you!
Not really, but, I'd be very disapointed. ~_^ Oh well, life doesn't always give you lemons. (aren't I corny? My jokes suck...XP) Anyway, the battle desciptions were even better in this chapter than the last. It was amazing! A punch that brakes bones, I would have never expected that from Granar. And Kazo, getting emotional. Granar too! I feel so bad. I hope we find out more about Granar's past...it's hard to read about how much he hurts. I mean, he's never the emotional type until now so it must be pretty bad. Or, Kisero is just making it really bad. He's so evil, but weak in strength I must say. And Lick, oh my gosh, I love lick! (cuddles him) I will adopt him. You can put me in the story too if he isn't already taken. I would keep him and brush him and feed him and play with him etc. Aww, if I can't have him, I shall be his number one fan. ^^
Amazing chapter once again. This is probably one of my favorites. It would be hard to choose, but this one was really great. Keep up the great work, can't wait for the next chapter and the next chapter of Dragon Warz. ^^ Talk to you later!
-Nickel City
8/17/2004 c6 Alaurei
I finally get to review with no interuptions! (as I told you about over the phone. Stupid computer. *slams it into the wall a couple of times*) Back to the review now.
This was one action packed chapter. All of the fighting and discovering, such adventure! I'd call it a story in itself. And again, I seem to be so linked heart to heart with your characters. You describe them well! I felt so horribly bad when Hana was getting hurt. It's not cool! Kisero is pretty awesome but, not for what he is doing to Hana! All bad guys could have a better life, not being bad! That shall be my new saying. Bad guys need to live the better life, and not be bad. I shall remember that. Kisero really needs to hear it. ^_^
The fight descriptions were excellent. I think it's some of the most impressive work I've seen you write. However, I have yet to read the latest chapter. I should. I'm glad that Hyo and Granar have put some of the puzzle pieces together. It clears my mind a bit too. But, I almost feel like the story is going to come to an end soon...that would be so sad. I really hope that isn't true. For this to end so soon, bah, I'd cry!
Why, thank you for the plushie! (hugs it tight) I have several plushies now. I should draw my collection some time. (ponders) ^^; heh, that'd be pretty neat. As I read your work, I can really see improvement and I think it's great. Oh, and before I forget, I must say, I don't have any idea either why Hana doesn't like mineral water. You're the author so you'd be the person to know but, I guess I'm just weird. ~_^ Keep up the great work and continue to strive for those awesome goals!
I'm on to read the next chapter.
-Nickel City
I finally get to review with no interuptions! (as I told you about over the phone. Stupid computer. *slams it into the wall a couple of times*) Back to the review now.
This was one action packed chapter. All of the fighting and discovering, such adventure! I'd call it a story in itself. And again, I seem to be so linked heart to heart with your characters. You describe them well! I felt so horribly bad when Hana was getting hurt. It's not cool! Kisero is pretty awesome but, not for what he is doing to Hana! All bad guys could have a better life, not being bad! That shall be my new saying. Bad guys need to live the better life, and not be bad. I shall remember that. Kisero really needs to hear it. ^_^
The fight descriptions were excellent. I think it's some of the most impressive work I've seen you write. However, I have yet to read the latest chapter. I should. I'm glad that Hyo and Granar have put some of the puzzle pieces together. It clears my mind a bit too. But, I almost feel like the story is going to come to an end soon...that would be so sad. I really hope that isn't true. For this to end so soon, bah, I'd cry!
Why, thank you for the plushie! (hugs it tight) I have several plushies now. I should draw my collection some time. (ponders) ^^; heh, that'd be pretty neat. As I read your work, I can really see improvement and I think it's great. Oh, and before I forget, I must say, I don't have any idea either why Hana doesn't like mineral water. You're the author so you'd be the person to know but, I guess I'm just weird. ~_^ Keep up the great work and continue to strive for those awesome goals!
I'm on to read the next chapter.
-Nickel City
7/20/2004 c7 Kynria
As usual, very interesting and spontaneous. Always a pleasure to see what srtange things will come up next. I noticed some little mistakes here and there, nothing big though or too distracting.
I liked the wolf's name, Lycosfrosk, has a different feel to it than the others.
Well i guess that's it. Now go work on DW2!
++Morgan++
PS. i posted the first re-vamped chapter of Universal Balance, if you want to check it out. It will be very different.
By the way thanks for the plushies... wow i'm getting quite the collection! ^-^
As usual, very interesting and spontaneous. Always a pleasure to see what srtange things will come up next. I noticed some little mistakes here and there, nothing big though or too distracting.
I liked the wolf's name, Lycosfrosk, has a different feel to it than the others.
Well i guess that's it. Now go work on DW2!
++Morgan++
PS. i posted the first re-vamped chapter of Universal Balance, if you want to check it out. It will be very different.
By the way thanks for the plushies... wow i'm getting quite the collection! ^-^
7/18/2004 c7 6Belle the Shadow-Cat
It's nice to see that you got a new chapter of TAS out again! I was wondering what was going to happen. Although, I keep feeling bad for Hana, the poor girl. I can only wonder what would happen if all the seals were broken. Whatever will happen... it might release some interesting things in Hana as well, or so I'm thinking.
'
Of course Kisero is as annoying as ever, although I'm starting to wonder what happened to him indeed, if he did escape the explosion as proposed, he probably found something during that time that changed him. For worse, or so it seems.
'
But, his motives do keep me wondering... and I'll have to wait and find out why he has to break the seals. Hopefully, they will be revealed soon enough. And why half-demon? There are demi-humans, full alters, druethians (sp?) and now half demon.. considering the half demon reace isn't exactly mentioned, why was he accepted into the druthian way of life? I'd think he'd be shuned like the Full alters, or perhaps was shunne. Or are half demons just considered to be a demi=human like Hyo? Not much history background with the half demon thing, but cool nonetheless.
'
For some reason, I really liked Kazo in this chapter, though he didn't have as large of a part as usual. BUt still, I liked him in this one. And we're learning more about Granar's mysterious past.
'
And Hana.. poor Hana. But at least she got Lick back to how he was supposed to be. lol, really, Lycosfrosk? I know that sounds out of character, but Lycosfrosk? lol. That's one of the most original names I've heard thus far. I do wonder what'll happen to him.
'
And Hyo's more powerful then he acts, eh? Just like Hana. ^_^ I'm sure we'll see even more of that as time goes by. But I know this isn't the greatest of reviews, but I enjoyed this chapter.
'
Thanks for the Plushies! Until next time
-Belle
::Even the brightest Light leaves a Shadow:
6Belle the Shadow-CatIt's nice to see that you got a new chapter of TAS out again! I was wondering what was going to happen. Although, I keep feeling bad for Hana, the poor girl. I can only wonder what would happen if all the seals were broken. Whatever will happen... it might release some interesting things in Hana as well, or so I'm thinking.
'
Of course Kisero is as annoying as ever, although I'm starting to wonder what happened to him indeed, if he did escape the explosion as proposed, he probably found something during that time that changed him. For worse, or so it seems.
'
But, his motives do keep me wondering... and I'll have to wait and find out why he has to break the seals. Hopefully, they will be revealed soon enough. And why half-demon? There are demi-humans, full alters, druethians (sp?) and now half demon.. considering the half demon reace isn't exactly mentioned, why was he accepted into the druthian way of life? I'd think he'd be shuned like the Full alters, or perhaps was shunne. Or are half demons just considered to be a demi=human like Hyo? Not much history background with the half demon thing, but cool nonetheless.
'
For some reason, I really liked Kazo in this chapter, though he didn't have as large of a part as usual. BUt still, I liked him in this one. And we're learning more about Granar's mysterious past.
'
And Hana.. poor Hana. But at least she got Lick back to how he was supposed to be. lol, really, Lycosfrosk? I know that sounds out of character, but Lycosfrosk? lol. That's one of the most original names I've heard thus far. I do wonder what'll happen to him.
'
And Hyo's more powerful then he acts, eh? Just like Hana. ^_^ I'm sure we'll see even more of that as time goes by. But I know this isn't the greatest of reviews, but I enjoyed this chapter.
'
Thanks for the Plushies! Until next time
-Belle
::Even the brightest Light leaves a Shadow:
3/23/2004 c6 Belle the Shadow-Cat
Heh, incrasing exponentionally? Heh, I can see that. Nice job though. ^^
So they're headed to a tower, ooh, another one, I can see a connection. And Hana, she's been awsome the whole chapter... and is Hana acting strange because Kisero is breaking the seal (like he did with the other one a few chapters ago) . He's gonna stab it through with his sword, isn't he. Gah! Leave Hana alone!
But does he listen? No. And Marbles... they just pop out from nowhere, yet they save the day! Randomness. And Kazo... and his car x.x What an attachment.
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Oh, and Kisero's memory, is that...like him? And you've been hinting that he /may/ be the one who brought Hyo back. But why would he if he did?
And Hana sure has a knack for dicovering things, though that's some vidication for her having little common sense... of course, sometimes I think she does, seriously. .
“Hana is different. It’s not easy to explain, but it is clear that she has a power, an authority over Kisero whereas the rest of us neither have. Kazo, I admit you’re the strongest of us all and that’s more reason to protect Hana
Granar said that? 0_0 How... Gah! Major OOC. And... to think Kazo's ego didn't seem to swell to much. Amazing. And more about Hana's power. ^^
And maybe only Hana can stop him, but not without someone to protect her.”
Forshadowing, perchance?
Ohh, and Hyo going whacky. I must say, Luna now reminds me of both Hyo and Hana: “This feels oddly familiar,” Hyo said, before kneeling and feeling the furry lichen with his free hand. He did this for a while before saying, “Someone. . .someone who lived here. . .had a lonely life. . .”
And familiar? More forshadowing?
“We should also stop every ten steps, I’m guessing those ceiling holes are where spikes could fall through.”
“How do you know that, Granar?” Hyo asked, amazed.
He sighed. “Hana’s archeological digs in the attic.”
^^ Great, Digi. I bursted up laughing.
OOh more hapless Minions. Bring them on! I actually like Kisero's minions... since they always seem to turn good. And /she/ was awsome, along with her little friends. And heere comes my favorite seen, the "counseling" session.
And Hana has a cell phone? ANd they're talking like everything was fine. GAH! Random! lol. Still, funny anyway. Striked me as a little odd, and definitely animeish.
“Well,” she looked left and right to assess the situation, “let’s all sit down and talk this over with me. Daddy said the road to peace starts with relaxation. Let’s take deep breaths like I do.” She sat down in the same spot where the jutted stone was, inhaled deeply and released her breath. . So it begins.
Ohh, Metal Ball! *cues Indiana Jones music* Run! And they're saved by a marble.
An what's with the oaths? And a Spirit Field. Glad they figured out how to break it. And the Triangular platform, just like the one in the other place. I can see the connection now. He's trying to break the seals, and this is another, but if they're all broken, who knows what will be released? It has to seal something.
And now the "counseling session." Because of this, I can also see Hana doing every kind of Yoga and taichi thing just because of the "meditation/breathing excercises" *snickers* My favorite scene in this chapter yet. It also kinda reminds me of the Finding Nemo thing. ^^
And... the ending... you leave it at a cliffhanger. How kind of you, lol.
Anyways, I seriously can't think of anything wrong, nice job.
Heh, incrasing exponentionally? Heh, I can see that. Nice job though. ^^
So they're headed to a tower, ooh, another one, I can see a connection. And Hana, she's been awsome the whole chapter... and is Hana acting strange because Kisero is breaking the seal (like he did with the other one a few chapters ago) . He's gonna stab it through with his sword, isn't he. Gah! Leave Hana alone!
But does he listen? No. And Marbles... they just pop out from nowhere, yet they save the day! Randomness. And Kazo... and his car x.x What an attachment.
-
Oh, and Kisero's memory, is that...like him? And you've been hinting that he /may/ be the one who brought Hyo back. But why would he if he did?
And Hana sure has a knack for dicovering things, though that's some vidication for her having little common sense... of course, sometimes I think she does, seriously. .
“Hana is different. It’s not easy to explain, but it is clear that she has a power, an authority over Kisero whereas the rest of us neither have. Kazo, I admit you’re the strongest of us all and that’s more reason to protect Hana
Granar said that? 0_0 How... Gah! Major OOC. And... to think Kazo's ego didn't seem to swell to much. Amazing. And more about Hana's power. ^^
And maybe only Hana can stop him, but not without someone to protect her.”
Forshadowing, perchance?
Ohh, and Hyo going whacky. I must say, Luna now reminds me of both Hyo and Hana: “This feels oddly familiar,” Hyo said, before kneeling and feeling the furry lichen with his free hand. He did this for a while before saying, “Someone. . .someone who lived here. . .had a lonely life. . .”
And familiar? More forshadowing?
“We should also stop every ten steps, I’m guessing those ceiling holes are where spikes could fall through.”
“How do you know that, Granar?” Hyo asked, amazed.
He sighed. “Hana’s archeological digs in the attic.”
^^ Great, Digi. I bursted up laughing.
OOh more hapless Minions. Bring them on! I actually like Kisero's minions... since they always seem to turn good. And /she/ was awsome, along with her little friends. And heere comes my favorite seen, the "counseling" session.
And Hana has a cell phone? ANd they're talking like everything was fine. GAH! Random! lol. Still, funny anyway. Striked me as a little odd, and definitely animeish.
“Well,” she looked left and right to assess the situation, “let’s all sit down and talk this over with me. Daddy said the road to peace starts with relaxation. Let’s take deep breaths like I do.” She sat down in the same spot where the jutted stone was, inhaled deeply and released her breath. . So it begins.
Ohh, Metal Ball! *cues Indiana Jones music* Run! And they're saved by a marble.
An what's with the oaths? And a Spirit Field. Glad they figured out how to break it. And the Triangular platform, just like the one in the other place. I can see the connection now. He's trying to break the seals, and this is another, but if they're all broken, who knows what will be released? It has to seal something.
And now the "counseling session." Because of this, I can also see Hana doing every kind of Yoga and taichi thing just because of the "meditation/breathing excercises" *snickers* My favorite scene in this chapter yet. It also kinda reminds me of the Finding Nemo thing. ^^
And... the ending... you leave it at a cliffhanger. How kind of you, lol.
Anyways, I seriously can't think of anything wrong, nice job.
3/22/2004 c6 Kynria
Nice work!
It was quite amusing, Hana loosing her marbles, the multiple traps in the tunnel, and i especially liked the little demons ^-^ (as usual) It was intersting in the least how Hana controled the situation.
“Well,” she looked left and right to assess the situation, “let’s all sit down and talk this over with me. Daddy said the road to peace starts with relaxation. Let’s take deep breaths like I do.”
^-^ And how Hana's marble saved Hyo's life when he tripped on it, in the tunnel. Clever! and humorous!
Was it just me or did this chapter seem a bit shorter? Or maybe i'm just getting used to the length of your chapters...
Anyways, great chapter and an evil cliffhanger! Can't wait to see what happens!
++Morgan and Mondaiz++
Nice work!
It was quite amusing, Hana loosing her marbles, the multiple traps in the tunnel, and i especially liked the little demons ^-^ (as usual) It was intersting in the least how Hana controled the situation.
“Well,” she looked left and right to assess the situation, “let’s all sit down and talk this over with me. Daddy said the road to peace starts with relaxation. Let’s take deep breaths like I do.”
^-^ And how Hana's marble saved Hyo's life when he tripped on it, in the tunnel. Clever! and humorous!
Was it just me or did this chapter seem a bit shorter? Or maybe i'm just getting used to the length of your chapters...
Anyways, great chapter and an evil cliffhanger! Can't wait to see what happens!
++Morgan and Mondaiz++
1/6/2004 c4 korakane
These chapters are still really long.
I also can't remember if I've reviewed this chapter or not... But nonetheless, it was a really good chapter.
Update DW2, please.
If I put "Dragons" up, please don't get mad when you find out what Grebb really is. I'm trying to tie "Dragonstone" and "Medallion" together, so it involves doing some pretty evil things...
1)The Fish Nomads are not who you think they are...
2)Grebb is...
3)Vergann is...
I am so evil. Short simple spoilers that don't spoil anything at all. MWA-HA-HA-HA-HA!
Sorry, its the paranoia again...
These chapters are still really long.
I also can't remember if I've reviewed this chapter or not... But nonetheless, it was a really good chapter.
Update DW2, please.
If I put "Dragons" up, please don't get mad when you find out what Grebb really is. I'm trying to tie "Dragonstone" and "Medallion" together, so it involves doing some pretty evil things...
1)The Fish Nomads are not who you think they are...
2)Grebb is...
3)Vergann is...
I am so evil. Short simple spoilers that don't spoil anything at all. MWA-HA-HA-HA-HA!
Sorry, its the paranoia again...
1/5/2004 c5 Blood Reign
I figured it out!
The answer to the trivia question! One of them anyways...
Dein's hat is orange and white!
YEAH! Anyways...I'll be going now
Bye ^-^
I figured it out!
The answer to the trivia question! One of them anyways...
Dein's hat is orange and white!
YEAH! Anyways...I'll be going now
Bye ^-^
1/5/2004 c5 Kynria
Hey, sorry for the late review, i kept getting error messages yesterday when i tried to review. Anyways on to the actual review.
It started a bit slow, but i guess with all the characters it's understandable, but i noticed in the first quarter of the chapter there were a lot of really long sentences without ANY punctuation!
Yeah so there's my critique part of the review. Since i'm not good at grammar i'll leave it at that.
I'm curious about the banner, with the angel that Hyo was so intrigued by. I'm wondering if that will have a huge part in the story later on. Hm...
As usual your descriptions are phenomenal! I'm working on my imagery, making sure not to use cliches and such. Yeah well i think that's all...
Great job and keep it up!
++Morgan and Mondaiz++
Hey, sorry for the late review, i kept getting error messages yesterday when i tried to review. Anyways on to the actual review.
It started a bit slow, but i guess with all the characters it's understandable, but i noticed in the first quarter of the chapter there were a lot of really long sentences without ANY punctuation!
Yeah so there's my critique part of the review. Since i'm not good at grammar i'll leave it at that.
I'm curious about the banner, with the angel that Hyo was so intrigued by. I'm wondering if that will have a huge part in the story later on. Hm...
As usual your descriptions are phenomenal! I'm working on my imagery, making sure not to use cliches and such. Yeah well i think that's all...
Great job and keep it up!
++Morgan and Mondaiz++
12/23/2003 c5 Nickel City
Well, I forgot something so here we go:
I forgot to guess for Dain's hat. ^_^ So here is my guess:
I beleive that his eyes color is either blakc or red. I am pretty sure that it is black so that is what I'm going to say. Black and/or red. I don't know if I'm aloud to guess more colors. If not, I go with black. If so, black and red. Thanks again and great chapter!
Well, I forgot something so here we go:
I forgot to guess for Dain's hat. ^_^ So here is my guess:
I beleive that his eyes color is either blakc or red. I am pretty sure that it is black so that is what I'm going to say. Black and/or red. I don't know if I'm aloud to guess more colors. If not, I go with black. If so, black and red. Thanks again and great chapter!
12/23/2003 c5 Alaurei
I knew it! that evil dude with the cloak is back! I knew he'd be here...*rubs chin* Hmm...this makes me think now. Mwee heheh, Reo and Hana are so cute. heheh. They would be good together. *sigh* I guess that means no Reo for me...how sad. That is alright! He goes better with Hana anyway. I shall find a knew lover, such as Seifer from FVI! ^_^ Anyway, back to your story.
What a fun chapter! I was dancing and humming to myself as I read through. I love these party/dance scences and/or chapters. They're so much fun! I especially loved the dancing part. I have an assumption to make!
*grabs loud speaker*
Attention. I believe Kazo and Ruki will get together. That is all.
*throws speaker away*
I really think they would be good togther. Though I would be parcially annoyed with Hyo and Sayoko if they ended up as a couple. For some reason. that finch gets on my nerves. *growl* Kisero was hillarious in this chapter! I guess it wasn't him alone but Hana and that table cloth. Boy, they kicked but. I will always remember the sole team that kicked but in this book! Hana and the Table Cloth! Yes, I can see it now! It will hit headlines soon! *stars twinkle* I have seen the light!
o.0 sorry about that. I was being a little dramatic but, I was half-serious. anyway, I loved the chapter. As I said, it was very fun and enjoyable. You're very good with teh fighting scenes even though I believe you mentioned you didn't like writting them? It might have been someone else. I don't know. Anyway, I really was amazed with this chapter.
I can't wait for part two! ~_^
-Nickel City
"To infinity, and beyond!"
I knew it! that evil dude with the cloak is back! I knew he'd be here...*rubs chin* Hmm...this makes me think now. Mwee heheh, Reo and Hana are so cute. heheh. They would be good together. *sigh* I guess that means no Reo for me...how sad. That is alright! He goes better with Hana anyway. I shall find a knew lover, such as Seifer from FVI! ^_^ Anyway, back to your story.
What a fun chapter! I was dancing and humming to myself as I read through. I love these party/dance scences and/or chapters. They're so much fun! I especially loved the dancing part. I have an assumption to make!
*grabs loud speaker*
Attention. I believe Kazo and Ruki will get together. That is all.
*throws speaker away*
I really think they would be good togther. Though I would be parcially annoyed with Hyo and Sayoko if they ended up as a couple. For some reason. that finch gets on my nerves. *growl* Kisero was hillarious in this chapter! I guess it wasn't him alone but Hana and that table cloth. Boy, they kicked but. I will always remember the sole team that kicked but in this book! Hana and the Table Cloth! Yes, I can see it now! It will hit headlines soon! *stars twinkle* I have seen the light!
o.0 sorry about that. I was being a little dramatic but, I was half-serious. anyway, I loved the chapter. As I said, it was very fun and enjoyable. You're very good with teh fighting scenes even though I believe you mentioned you didn't like writting them? It might have been someone else. I don't know. Anyway, I really was amazed with this chapter.
I can't wait for part two! ~_^
-Nickel City
"To infinity, and beyond!"
12/22/2003 c5 Belle the Shadow-Cat
They haven't reviewed your stories yet! Shame on them. I'd go and make them review myself if I could.
Dravidian : *cough* Shouldn't you get on with the review?
Yes, yes I should. But first off, Happy Birthday . . . err belated, but happy birthday none-the-less. If I had known I would have sent you a Birthday E-card . . .
Drav: You mean one of those free, chessy ones. It's probably better that he didn't get it.
-_- Don't make me hit you . . . with Okibihou's frying pan. Anyway, since it was your birthday, it's only fair you get some sort of present . . . So how does 2 extra stat points for Faranda sound?
Anyway, on with the review .
Leave it to Reo to babysit, lol. But I suppose they would've ended up there anyway. And Hana throwing her voice . . . that was interesting. Though I am a bit surprised that Reo didn't recognize her voice, since he /likes/ her so well. But it was amusing none-the-less.
“Wait! I still haven’t told them to spin around twenty times and do the chicken dance to find me,” she said, before they crept for the door and entered the building.
Dravidian: that was just . . . strange . . . it fits Hana to say something like that, though I never would have expected her to say it though.
Yeah, surprised me, too. And the image I got from Mr. Derwek . . . I'm sorry, I just couldn't help but burst out laughing. A walrus Demi-human. lol.
And Rayins attempts to get Ruiji's attention was interesting, lol .
“So Ruiji, what do you think of me and my favorite dress? Does it make you feel good inside?” She blinked. “Ruiji?”
The Professor stood with fazed eyes, staring far away.
“Hello? Drueth to Ruiji?” Rayin waved her hand in front of his face.
Hehe, for a moment I thought he /was/ looking just at her . . . for a moment, until we found out the Pearl was what held his attention.
And Ruki seems like an orginized person to me. Her and her notepad, she brings it everywhere.
And the Drueth war . . . I'm curious about it, and I'm sure you'll let us know more as the chapters progress, but I'm interested in knowing what the whole war was about. And you said that the Druethens didn't like Demi-humans. And the first Drueth War was against Demi humans and Druethens. So what was the feud about? Maybe freedom, like the Civil War was with the slaves. But I can't do more than speculate. Like with the Dein/Kazo thing.
And which brings me to Dein. I thought the reaction of the people at the party would be different, in fact, there wasn't much reaction at all. And Dein's a full Alter. I would of thought the would have not wanted him there, considering that, since you've stated that full alters are looked down upon. But nothing happened, that surprised me.
And the mural, Hana is somehow the Angel in some way, if no more than symbolism. But the Druthian boy . . . Reo? Ruiji? Or maybe its a Symbol of Hana also. But then you had Mr. Derwek say:
His IQ is so high one might wonder even if he’s even human (or Druethians) at all.
Then come the Seal Breakers. That can open up to new worlds, what if Reo and Ruiji's decendants came from one of the other worlds. It's possible that he somehow arrived to the "earth" the story is set in that way, via the swords or something. But Ruiji doesn't seem to act like it, so I'm not sure. Just mere speculation. Which would not make Ruiji or Reo really fit into the 'druthian boy" theory I have, so then its completely useless.
Dravidian: You are thinking about this too much. You're confusing me . . . Move onto something different.
*sigh* maybe it is time for me to stop rambling on. Okay, lets go to the waltzing dancing whatever.
Hehe, Kazo trying to pick up those Druthian (hope I'm spelling that right) women, poor guy. I feel bad for him, but it brings in the humor anyway. And When you mentioned that it was a taboo for Demi-human and Druthian to be seen together like that . . . that was a little surprising, but I should have expected it. And it makes me more surprised to have Kazo go up to those Druthian women even more now, because of that Taboo, for fear of being seen like that. But he's Kazo . . .
Drav: Just say its part of Kazo's personality and be done with it. You know he is stupid enough to do such a thing.
He's right, and trying to spy on Hyo and Sayoko . . . she doesn't bug me as much as before, but she still does. Hehehe.
And here comes Kisero and ruins the whole party. He has impeccable timing. And here comes Hana and Reo to the rescue.
The flower girl lunged at him and embraced him. He could hear her praying softly in his ear and he was comforted in such great faith. Then he heard her say, “Just tell me what to do, Reo.”
With both heavy reluctance and inspired determination, he told her role. Then she parted from him and before she began crawling through the other tables, he called her. “Promise me you’ll be right.”
She looked back and still smiled. “I promise, because I know there’s always someone watching out for me.”
Now that was just cute, you know that. Very cute. Just had to point that out. And Hana has a way of subduing Kisero. Pure dumb luck I say, but she has a way with luck.
And go Ruki!
And Must you end with a cliffhanger . . . I hate them, yet love to use them.
Uhh . . . the color of Dein's hat.
Drav: You obviously don't know.
Nope, but I'll guess. In this chapter you said Kazo's eyes were red, so I'm going to guess that the cap in red . . . and white, just for the heck of it. A complete and total guess.
And as for the other, I really don't know. And I can't think of it.
Anyway, nice job. Good Luck with DW2 . . .
Drav: Now you have to get working on SGs now. YOu're getting lazy.
No, I'm not. It's Return of the King's fault. it's distracting. Hopefully I'll get it done this week.
Good luck and Merry Christmas.
-Belle the Shadow-cat
They haven't reviewed your stories yet! Shame on them. I'd go and make them review myself if I could.
Dravidian : *cough* Shouldn't you get on with the review?
Yes, yes I should. But first off, Happy Birthday . . . err belated, but happy birthday none-the-less. If I had known I would have sent you a Birthday E-card . . .
Drav: You mean one of those free, chessy ones. It's probably better that he didn't get it.
-_- Don't make me hit you . . . with Okibihou's frying pan. Anyway, since it was your birthday, it's only fair you get some sort of present . . . So how does 2 extra stat points for Faranda sound?
Anyway, on with the review .
Leave it to Reo to babysit, lol. But I suppose they would've ended up there anyway. And Hana throwing her voice . . . that was interesting. Though I am a bit surprised that Reo didn't recognize her voice, since he /likes/ her so well. But it was amusing none-the-less.
“Wait! I still haven’t told them to spin around twenty times and do the chicken dance to find me,” she said, before they crept for the door and entered the building.
Dravidian: that was just . . . strange . . . it fits Hana to say something like that, though I never would have expected her to say it though.
Yeah, surprised me, too. And the image I got from Mr. Derwek . . . I'm sorry, I just couldn't help but burst out laughing. A walrus Demi-human. lol.
And Rayins attempts to get Ruiji's attention was interesting, lol .
“So Ruiji, what do you think of me and my favorite dress? Does it make you feel good inside?” She blinked. “Ruiji?”
The Professor stood with fazed eyes, staring far away.
“Hello? Drueth to Ruiji?” Rayin waved her hand in front of his face.
Hehe, for a moment I thought he /was/ looking just at her . . . for a moment, until we found out the Pearl was what held his attention.
And Ruki seems like an orginized person to me. Her and her notepad, she brings it everywhere.
And the Drueth war . . . I'm curious about it, and I'm sure you'll let us know more as the chapters progress, but I'm interested in knowing what the whole war was about. And you said that the Druethens didn't like Demi-humans. And the first Drueth War was against Demi humans and Druethens. So what was the feud about? Maybe freedom, like the Civil War was with the slaves. But I can't do more than speculate. Like with the Dein/Kazo thing.
And which brings me to Dein. I thought the reaction of the people at the party would be different, in fact, there wasn't much reaction at all. And Dein's a full Alter. I would of thought the would have not wanted him there, considering that, since you've stated that full alters are looked down upon. But nothing happened, that surprised me.
And the mural, Hana is somehow the Angel in some way, if no more than symbolism. But the Druthian boy . . . Reo? Ruiji? Or maybe its a Symbol of Hana also. But then you had Mr. Derwek say:
His IQ is so high one might wonder even if he’s even human (or Druethians) at all.
Then come the Seal Breakers. That can open up to new worlds, what if Reo and Ruiji's decendants came from one of the other worlds. It's possible that he somehow arrived to the "earth" the story is set in that way, via the swords or something. But Ruiji doesn't seem to act like it, so I'm not sure. Just mere speculation. Which would not make Ruiji or Reo really fit into the 'druthian boy" theory I have, so then its completely useless.
Dravidian: You are thinking about this too much. You're confusing me . . . Move onto something different.
*sigh* maybe it is time for me to stop rambling on. Okay, lets go to the waltzing dancing whatever.
Hehe, Kazo trying to pick up those Druthian (hope I'm spelling that right) women, poor guy. I feel bad for him, but it brings in the humor anyway. And When you mentioned that it was a taboo for Demi-human and Druthian to be seen together like that . . . that was a little surprising, but I should have expected it. And it makes me more surprised to have Kazo go up to those Druthian women even more now, because of that Taboo, for fear of being seen like that. But he's Kazo . . .
Drav: Just say its part of Kazo's personality and be done with it. You know he is stupid enough to do such a thing.
He's right, and trying to spy on Hyo and Sayoko . . . she doesn't bug me as much as before, but she still does. Hehehe.
And here comes Kisero and ruins the whole party. He has impeccable timing. And here comes Hana and Reo to the rescue.
The flower girl lunged at him and embraced him. He could hear her praying softly in his ear and he was comforted in such great faith. Then he heard her say, “Just tell me what to do, Reo.”
With both heavy reluctance and inspired determination, he told her role. Then she parted from him and before she began crawling through the other tables, he called her. “Promise me you’ll be right.”
She looked back and still smiled. “I promise, because I know there’s always someone watching out for me.”
Now that was just cute, you know that. Very cute. Just had to point that out. And Hana has a way of subduing Kisero. Pure dumb luck I say, but she has a way with luck.
And go Ruki!
And Must you end with a cliffhanger . . . I hate them, yet love to use them.
Uhh . . . the color of Dein's hat.
Drav: You obviously don't know.
Nope, but I'll guess. In this chapter you said Kazo's eyes were red, so I'm going to guess that the cap in red . . . and white, just for the heck of it. A complete and total guess.
And as for the other, I really don't know. And I can't think of it.
Anyway, nice job. Good Luck with DW2 . . .
Drav: Now you have to get working on SGs now. YOu're getting lazy.
No, I'm not. It's Return of the King's fault. it's distracting. Hopefully I'll get it done this week.
Good luck and Merry Christmas.
-Belle the Shadow-cat
9/27/2003 c4 Kynria
Wow, you got a lot of characters in this story. (just to point out the obvious ^-^) anyways, i'm tired and not making much sense right now so don't mind me.
Good chapter! i like the black blob, heck, i'd want to keep it for a pet if i found one! yeah i'm crazy!
Thanks for the plushies, oh and Margo is on vacation and Mondaiz *was* with me reading TAS but now he's gone to get some food. But he said it was good as he ran out of the room.
Wow am i babbling on! Sorry ^-^ anyways can't wait for the next chapter and DW2 of course!
^-^
Wow, you got a lot of characters in this story. (just to point out the obvious ^-^) anyways, i'm tired and not making much sense right now so don't mind me.
Good chapter! i like the black blob, heck, i'd want to keep it for a pet if i found one! yeah i'm crazy!
Thanks for the plushies, oh and Margo is on vacation and Mondaiz *was* with me reading TAS but now he's gone to get some food. But he said it was good as he ran out of the room.
Wow am i babbling on! Sorry ^-^ anyways can't wait for the next chapter and DW2 of course!
^-^
9/26/2003 c4 Belle too lazy right now
you forgot the dialougue huh? Well i went back and checked. It must've slipped my mind, when i went over this, glad you caught it.
"/ You, a crea. . .uphold th. . .forsaken rit. . .of your descenda. . .much awaits. . .your dea. . .orgotte. . .will be. . .fulfille. . . /"
hmm . . . can't translate it all, but i can guess you a creator (?) uphold the (?) forsaken rite of your decendants . . much awaits, your death (?) {I hope that's it, lol} forgotten(?) will be fulfilled (?)
can't be sure, just was fun trying to translate, don't know if i'm right or wrong.
-Belle
you forgot the dialougue huh? Well i went back and checked. It must've slipped my mind, when i went over this, glad you caught it.
"/ You, a crea. . .uphold th. . .forsaken rit. . .of your descenda. . .much awaits. . .your dea. . .orgotte. . .will be. . .fulfille. . . /"
hmm . . . can't translate it all, but i can guess you a creator (?) uphold the (?) forsaken rite of your decendants . . much awaits, your death (?) {I hope that's it, lol} forgotten(?) will be fulfilled (?)
can't be sure, just was fun trying to translate, don't know if i'm right or wrong.
-Belle