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3/11/2004 c1 31Modern Poet
Strong piece. Great feeling to it.
11/3/2003 c1 64Samara-chan
And you call me good? This is excellent! I love dark poems... ~-^

YES, and thank you for reading my poems and ficcy! It means a lot to me ^^

Samara-chan signing out... needa go to school :| Dum dum dum...
7/9/2003 c1 1liquor knight
guilt is such a horrible feeling...

hope your not feeling it now...

Self destruct if you can't take it, k?
7/3/2003 c1 8Moril
This is another excellent poem. I would recommend, however, that you replace the word "selfishness" with a more expressive word - "arrogance," (although the definition of that is conceit), or even "greed."

Maybe "selfishness" is the correct word, after all... I just feel that it could be improved.

This is a great poem.
6/14/2003 c1 14quadellic
potent, and moving. It flows well, but you repeated "broken wings" and for some reason that just stuck out at me, could you try for example "crushed limbs of downy feather"? I don't know, I have screwy opinions anyways!

I really like the imagery in this poem though and can't wait to read the rest of your works! You talent seems so promising and indeed it is very expressive! Sadly *says this with a tear* My mother has called the men in white to take me away(put me to bed). Gotta go! Bye!

~Quadellic~
6/14/2003 c1 2Chirleep
ah, the things that make us stay up late at night. lovely poem. thanks for your review on mine:)
6/12/2003 c1 2Margarita Balmaseda
Well, I saw 23 reveiws for this poem and thought "Damn... this has to be good"... Quite effectively enough, it was. It was brilliant. I liked it very, very much!
6/11/2003 c1 53Lidless Eye
Very powerful words, and great meaning. Awesome piece, keep writing like this.
6/10/2003 c1 35rocket baby doll
i love the whole guilty thing...'

U are so amazing with imagery, you barely use any words, but like bam! an wow... an yeah... i liked it...

^-^
6/6/2003 c1 319ALK214
Very nice, but not my style. I love the flow and the rhyme, and I love how it goes together, but it just isn't what I'm used to. It's still great though!
6/5/2003 c1 36Psycho-kyugurl
That was so touching and beautiful...
6/5/2003 c1 34curiouzkatt
hmm... reminds me of something =^-^= anyways, great poem! I think i know who you're talking about... i didn't know she was making a fanfic!
6/4/2003 c1 41InkedinSin
pretty images, nicely done.
6/4/2003 c1 11Acidhurtstheskin
Love the poem. Me I'm a big fan of emotionaly poetry ^-^;; as you can tell...Keep up the good work
6/3/2003 c1 SerAnonima
WOW PRETTY DEEP MESSAGE..LOVED IT VERY MUCH...GREAT CHOICE OF WORDS AND EMAGERY.
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