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for My life My star

8/2/2003 c1 30Haley Kathleen Moss
This is by far my favorite that you have written. As usual, it is deep and powerful with a twinge of something hidden yearning to be revealed. I wonder... Did you truly see a star?
7/22/2003 c1 7Fortissamo
Hmm... haven't been around fictionpress in quite awhile, and I decided to check out your stuff first, because you are a truly admirable poet. ^_~

I really like this one for some vague reason- it's just very well done overall. Sorry I can't offer that much of a useful critique. I especially like the last line- you have the ability of perfectly closing the piece with lines such as those.

~Always,

Tenny
6/26/2003 c1 H. M. Banson
"I look at the sky with passion tonight

And wait for my life...to pass me by "

Wow... this was really great. I love how the person's life is compared to the star's, that was clever. Amazing poem, I loved it. Keep it up.

Always,

~Hollie

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