for A Night Forgotten6/26/2006 c1 Karea
This was good. I like you're style of writing and the fact you can get the events down without straying from the topic. Really good! ~Kae
This was good. I like you're style of writing and the fact you can get the events down without straying from the topic. Really good! ~Kae
10/18/2003 c1 JessE
Generally, this is a very well written story. Not a lot of people can pull of multiple flashbacks but you did it classically with no confusion attached. Bravo!
However, your use of ellipsis turned me off a bit. It did add to the emotionally effect and made the sadness real (It also showed that 'bleh' feeling anyone in Cody's situation would feel).
Other than that, it was a very good read. Grammar and punctuation was fabolous! If a part two comes to mind, don't hesistate, because I'd like to read it.
Great job and cheerios!
-jess
Generally, this is a very well written story. Not a lot of people can pull of multiple flashbacks but you did it classically with no confusion attached. Bravo!
However, your use of ellipsis turned me off a bit. It did add to the emotionally effect and made the sadness real (It also showed that 'bleh' feeling anyone in Cody's situation would feel).
Other than that, it was a very good read. Grammar and punctuation was fabolous! If a part two comes to mind, don't hesistate, because I'd like to read it.
Great job and cheerios!
-jess
6/4/2003 c1 skippyjo's sister
Good story. I like how the younger sister doesn't really know what's happening. If you're bored you can read my story if you want. It's more for sort of 10 or 11 year olds though. It's under skippyjo and it's skate or die right now.
Good story. I like how the younger sister doesn't really know what's happening. If you're bored you can read my story if you want. It's more for sort of 10 or 11 year olds though. It's under skippyjo and it's skate or die right now.