for Long Lived Magic
4310/18/2003 c1 JessE
It really won't be fair to critique this poem because it would be based on feeling not fact. I don't like magic and sort so it really wasn't appealing to me.
Maybe if u were vivid about the fighting and gore and HAHAHAHA *cough* yea it would be a nice poem to read to lil chidren so it doesn't scare their pants off, but for someone a bit older, the poem needed more action (and gore!). Yes, more action.
*wink* i'm a fan, though :off to read more:
It really won't be fair to critique this poem because it would be based on feeling not fact. I don't like magic and sort so it really wasn't appealing to me.
Maybe if u were vivid about the fighting and gore and HAHAHAHA *cough* yea it would be a nice poem to read to lil chidren so it doesn't scare their pants off, but for someone a bit older, the poem needed more action (and gore!). Yes, more action.
*wink* i'm a fan, though :off to read more: