for Unwanted1/10/2004 c1 
3Angel of the sea
...i think im gonna cry
it doesnt suck!its really good!
~Angel of the Sea
3Angel of the sea...i think im gonna cry
it doesnt suck!its really good!
~Angel of the Sea
6/5/2003 c1 Angele Raye
This poem has a really personal meaning for me. The flow, however, was very choppy and made for difficult reading. Best Wishes!
This poem has a really personal meaning for me. The flow, however, was very choppy and made for difficult reading. Best Wishes!
6/5/2003 c1 2blinkie
i liked mthe run-ons very much.
ex.
it hurts a lot and you
feel the pain it swells
however, i have some comments. there's no such eord as 'causer'. the proper one would be 'cause'. another thing, the word 'sucks' at the strat of your poem was too slang to be beautiful. i hoep you are not offended by these comments, as they are constructive criticism.
ja, take care..
blinkie
2blinkiei liked mthe run-ons very much.
ex.
it hurts a lot and you
feel the pain it swells
however, i have some comments. there's no such eord as 'causer'. the proper one would be 'cause'. another thing, the word 'sucks' at the strat of your poem was too slang to be beautiful. i hoep you are not offended by these comments, as they are constructive criticism.
ja, take care..
blinkie
6/5/2003 c1 Gabster
oh my god, I think I'm crying! That is seriously a good poem. You are the type of person who - without knowing it - will write something that will get to everyone and anyone who reads your work. Keep it up, and I will look for more of your work! -Gabster.
oh my god, I think I'm crying! That is seriously a good poem. You are the type of person who - without knowing it - will write something that will get to everyone and anyone who reads your work. Keep it up, and I will look for more of your work! -Gabster.