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6/9/2004 c1 1MythGalatea
Oh the many ways it sucks to love from afar. It's the truth though, it's only your fault that you don't say anything until you realize it's too late. Like with Chris...
3/31/2004 c1 5Green Angele
Great stuff... I'd have you reveiw my everflame account, but my dad deleted all my poetry... shit happens, huh?
Anyway, your sapcing kinda draws away from the message, carful with that, k?
Otherwise, good! :)
3/5/2004 c1 28Tk.T
Meaningful with a great message, great poem!
Happy writing!
Tk.T~
1/14/2004 c1 8Sarah Magdalene
Hey! I like this! Very good! Thanks for reviewing my poem. I was afraid some wouldn't read it because of its controversial title! :)
-SM
1/5/2004 c1 121Seeker of the Way
this is a great way of expressing yorself!
I have trouble people reaching out to meet my grasp. I am always reaching, look into my eyes, no .. deeper .. deep enough to see my soul. There truth and light lies within.
I am reaching out, don't you see me fighting against these chains of fear and doubt from pains of the past, both real and inagined.
Won't you try harder, won't you wear lenses of le Vrai et luminosity ground from the All within your own spirit?
HEAR it? The trumpets alreay calling "Come"?
SEE it? The lies of the media and the leaders meant to keep us ignorant and at each other's throats?
THINK it? Think you do not matter but YOU DO!
We are all in this together, we are not separate, we are part of the ALL, of GOD.
We are holographic images of everything. each part contains whole!
Stop rebelling, end your individuality even as you embrace it!
Join the Golbal Mind, the "nous"
We in French is "Nous", which is greek for the Global Mind.
Question! Explore! Love all! Fight the premature flight of your soul and laugh as you traverse the steep and rocky path which its the correct one.
Whatever happens, may yo be successful in your mission here.
- an original improvised poem written just for you in this review just now!
~ Seeker of the Way
12/19/2003 c1 6Elevator Love Letter
This is very well written. I especially like the first stanza:
'You called her Sally
But that is not her true name
The girl you love'
It caught my interest. The first line really is so important to a poem because you have to catch their attention at the beginning- and you achieved that. So congratulations on a fabulous poem, my dear. It really got me thinking. And the sad thing is, I'm not really sure what I'm thinking about. Well I'm off to go write some poetry of my own- I haven't written in a while but this poem really inspired me. Keep up the great work!
*~*~ Within a Dream ~*~*
12/15/2003 c1 11yumpop3188
I know that feeling! very powerful. Thanx for reviewing my poem, hope u keep writing and hope u get a chance to read more of mine
Peace Love and Empathy
11/20/2003 c1 6Windy Mountain
pretty good!

Keep Writing!

CaitlinSerene
7/8/2003 c1 11crazy-turner
A beatiful poem...

I like it very much. It was touching. Thanks for the review, BTW. /crazy_turner
6/11/2003 c1 Kiayla. again
This is really good! I like it a lot; it has a good 'plot' (can poems have those?) or, at least, has a meaning... more than I can say... (What is the meaning of life? As one of my friends informed me, cheese. I will choose not to believe that, thank you) ^^ Thanks for posting this!

~*~Kiayla~*~
6/10/2003 c1 35Mime
Yep, I completely agree. Love is strange.
6/10/2003 c1 34Smoky Bear
my other personality is called sally... mwa ha ha

cool haiku, it reminds me of my mate... he worships from afar too... lol.

i'm with you on the whole capital letters thing... gr. :-)
6/9/2003 c1 16kaika switched
This shows the feelings of all the shy people...great work. Keep writing!
6/9/2003 c1 26kamikaze899
interesting.. loved the last part! well written, keep up the good work ^^

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