for Epitaph1/8/2004 c1 
8PsychoticAngel777
*Nods* I agree with your outlook on this...It is sad really and most of the time...though I am ashamed to admit it...It applies to me as well,for I am not exempt from the ways of the world...
Another GREAT poem...
God Bless
-Kitten
8PsychoticAngel777*Nods* I agree with your outlook on this...It is sad really and most of the time...though I am ashamed to admit it...It applies to me as well,for I am not exempt from the ways of the world...
Another GREAT poem...
God Bless
-Kitten
6/17/2003 c1 187Strina
I especially liked the lines "Through green tinted glasses we peek/Tainted by the desires we seek".
187StrinaI especially liked the lines "Through green tinted glasses we peek/Tainted by the desires we seek".
6/16/2003 c1 7Matt5
Another well-written poem, but i'm not as crazy about this one as i was with "the potter and his clay." In Epitaph i find the image you are trying to convey somewhat hard to solidify in my mind, perhaps you could add some examples of how the commandments set out by god are being broken by our society, right after your 5th stanza? i dont really feel too strongly about this remark, but i thought i'd send it anyway. yet another well-written poem.
7Matt5Another well-written poem, but i'm not as crazy about this one as i was with "the potter and his clay." In Epitaph i find the image you are trying to convey somewhat hard to solidify in my mind, perhaps you could add some examples of how the commandments set out by god are being broken by our society, right after your 5th stanza? i dont really feel too strongly about this remark, but i thought i'd send it anyway. yet another well-written poem.
6/16/2003 c1 14quadellic
Perhaps you are right, my poem may not have served exactly what I wished it to in the beggining, But I am still rather proud of it and I don't see it wandering from subject, just that it never really fit my original subject in any way. Thanks for your input Thalia!
~Quadellic~
(the author)
14quadellicPerhaps you are right, my poem may not have served exactly what I wished it to in the beggining, But I am still rather proud of it and I don't see it wandering from subject, just that it never really fit my original subject in any way. Thanks for your input Thalia!
~Quadellic~
(the author)
6/16/2003 c1 74Thalia Weaver
Hmm. I think you should try freeverse- often the meaning and grace of the poem can be impeded by a restrictive format.
~Thalia
74Thalia WeaverHmm. I think you should try freeverse- often the meaning and grace of the poem can be impeded by a restrictive format.
~Thalia
6/16/2003 c1 xurbandecayx
very interesting interpretation; very true... people buy their images and they think that what they wear is who they are. i won't mention any names but i can think of one in specific... lol. i'll let you figure that out. :)
anyways, great poem; amazing metaphors... the descriptions in here are brilliant! hey, you probably already listen to this guy, but... i really think that you would like matthew good (with or without the band, lol), very similar views. :) excellent.
oh, and, yes, i did mean "you'd of known..." as "you would have known"... i don't know. in my twisted little head it sounded better as a contraction. :)
x
very interesting interpretation; very true... people buy their images and they think that what they wear is who they are. i won't mention any names but i can think of one in specific... lol. i'll let you figure that out. :)
anyways, great poem; amazing metaphors... the descriptions in here are brilliant! hey, you probably already listen to this guy, but... i really think that you would like matthew good (with or without the band, lol), very similar views. :) excellent.
oh, and, yes, i did mean "you'd of known..." as "you would have known"... i don't know. in my twisted little head it sounded better as a contraction. :)
x
6/16/2003 c1 kamikaze899
very strong point. makes the poem quite powerful.. with that and your use of words, it's a great poem ^^
very strong point. makes the poem quite powerful.. with that and your use of words, it's a great poem ^^
6/16/2003 c1 49recalcitrant
hey that was a good poem. you are a good writer maybe one of my favorites. if u want you should read some of my poems and review them to let me know if u like or hate them ( and or what u like or hate about them) i suggest ("time", "life(or a small part of it)", "you f* c* and girl1/girl2) thanx
49recalcitranthey that was a good poem. you are a good writer maybe one of my favorites. if u want you should read some of my poems and review them to let me know if u like or hate them ( and or what u like or hate about them) i suggest ("time", "life(or a small part of it)", "you f* c* and girl1/girl2) thanx
6/16/2003 c1 6Midnight Cosmos
I like the poem, for, I can understand of thou shall express to thee. Tis I, again, I believe thee to see thy's world completely unveiled to thee.
6Midnight CosmosI like the poem, for, I can understand of thou shall express to thee. Tis I, again, I believe thee to see thy's world completely unveiled to thee.
6/16/2003 c1 bloomangel
beautifully written, i can understand what you're trying to say. society has conditioned us to value physical appearance and wealth above morals and character. i whole heartedly agree with this poem. your description and wording is very impressive.
beautifully written, i can understand what you're trying to say. society has conditioned us to value physical appearance and wealth above morals and character. i whole heartedly agree with this poem. your description and wording is very impressive.