for Child of the Sky5/11/2004 c1 
122Mistress Jakira
I love this poem when it began, and at the end I was so disheartened! Not because it was bad, mind you, but what an awful realization! :'( *sniff* That's sinister. *shiver* It is my speculation (correct me if I'm wrong, of course, lol) that the 'child of the sky' is a creative person (a writer like us? Hehe) who is optimistic and always finding great fantasy in simple things and such inspiration...only to be met by a cynical, harsh world when reality comes back to slap her in the face. How terrible. *cries* ;_; Good poem, though. ^_~ Yay I love your poems because they get better every time! ~MJ
122Mistress JakiraI love this poem when it began, and at the end I was so disheartened! Not because it was bad, mind you, but what an awful realization! :'( *sniff* That's sinister. *shiver* It is my speculation (correct me if I'm wrong, of course, lol) that the 'child of the sky' is a creative person (a writer like us? Hehe) who is optimistic and always finding great fantasy in simple things and such inspiration...only to be met by a cynical, harsh world when reality comes back to slap her in the face. How terrible. *cries* ;_; Good poem, though. ^_~ Yay I love your poems because they get better every time! ~MJ
2/3/2004 c1 DIEDELETED
Reminds me of another poem I read, Weaver of the dreams or something. Goddess's are fun and even more fun to create ^_^
Reminds me of another poem I read, Weaver of the dreams or something. Goddess's are fun and even more fun to create ^_^
7/7/2003 c1 86c0rvida3
This is such a nice...poem.o.o It's very touching for something short. It holds alot of meaning...meh..I sound stupid. But I decided to review one of your poems after you reviewed mine.Thankyou! The Metalliace song is...erm...I can't remember.O.O Anyway,brilliant poem.:)...
86c0rvida3This is such a nice...poem.o.o It's very touching for something short. It holds alot of meaning...meh..I sound stupid. But I decided to review one of your poems after you reviewed mine.Thankyou! The Metalliace song is...erm...I can't remember.O.O Anyway,brilliant poem.:)...
7/6/2003 c1 106cosmo-queen
This was beautiful. Very well-written. The first three stanzas created some lovely imagery, while I liked how the final stanza served as a sort of contrast which conveyed the reality of the world. Keep writing :)
*cosmo-queen*
106cosmo-queenThis was beautiful. Very well-written. The first three stanzas created some lovely imagery, while I liked how the final stanza served as a sort of contrast which conveyed the reality of the world. Keep writing :)
*cosmo-queen*
7/2/2003 c1 8Bitten Caliban
A beautiful poem. I didn't get much of the symbolism, but I guess it's from your life experience. A very neat piece of work.
Adios!
8Bitten CalibanA beautiful poem. I didn't get much of the symbolism, but I guess it's from your life experience. A very neat piece of work.
Adios!
7/2/2003 c1 Whiro
I liked it a lot! Kind of a story within a poem, it's cool. I think you probably could extend it some. Its possible I think, depending on the angle you take with it. Bravo!
~Whiro~
I liked it a lot! Kind of a story within a poem, it's cool. I think you probably could extend it some. Its possible I think, depending on the angle you take with it. Bravo!
~Whiro~
6/27/2003 c1 DragonsEclipse
Beautifully done and well written! I enjoyed reading this! Keep writing! ^_^
Beautifully done and well written! I enjoyed reading this! Keep writing! ^_^
6/17/2003 c1 128Zainab
What a beautiful poem! I really like the second to last paragraph : "She Cried with the moon, etc..." Really pretty! Yeah, it could be extended on, but only to give it more of an ending. But don't change anything of the poem you have so far! It's great the way it is!
128ZainabWhat a beautiful poem! I really like the second to last paragraph : "She Cried with the moon, etc..." Really pretty! Yeah, it could be extended on, but only to give it more of an ending. But don't change anything of the poem you have so far! It's great the way it is!
6/17/2003 c1 21Ezzara Santo'Caballero
This is beautiful. Almost as a wonderment and curiosity that this child lost as she grew older. Wonderful job! And thanks for the review ^_^
"Follow your heart, follow your pen."
~ Ezz
21Ezzara Santo'CaballeroThis is beautiful. Almost as a wonderment and curiosity that this child lost as she grew older. Wonderful job! And thanks for the review ^_^
"Follow your heart, follow your pen."
~ Ezz
6/16/2003 c1 3PeachPawz
Oh, absolutely beautiful. You have a wonderful talent! Please write poetry professionally!
I'd adore to read more. Please post more!
~Peach
PS If the whole thing is going to be poetry, you should categorize it under "poetry". If you plan on writing part of it as a story, however, what you have set is fine. :D
3PeachPawzOh, absolutely beautiful. You have a wonderful talent! Please write poetry professionally!
I'd adore to read more. Please post more!
~Peach
PS If the whole thing is going to be poetry, you should categorize it under "poetry". If you plan on writing part of it as a story, however, what you have set is fine. :D
6/16/2003 c1 2AngelEyes101
That was a wonderful poem...if only it could have been a tiny bit longer? I would have loved to read more!
2AngelEyes101That was a wonderful poem...if only it could have been a tiny bit longer? I would have loved to read more!
6/16/2003 c1 17Winged One1
Wow, what a great poem! It's wonderful in the way it sort of hints at secrets and a fuller story; it's very inviting to let the reader in. It has just enough to keep a reader interested. I'd give you suggestions...but I don't have any! ;)
winged one
17Winged One1Wow, what a great poem! It's wonderful in the way it sort of hints at secrets and a fuller story; it's very inviting to let the reader in. It has just enough to keep a reader interested. I'd give you suggestions...but I don't have any! ;)
winged one