for The SFiles6/3/2004 c2 shadowedskies
O.o Holy crap the ending scared me. I liked this alot though. MY mouth dropped when i read that his heart exploded. .O ouch. Fantastic though...i like these short little tidbits. You should write more...alot more. *grin*
O.o Holy crap the ending scared me. I liked this alot though. MY mouth dropped when i read that his heart exploded. .O ouch. Fantastic though...i like these short little tidbits. You should write more...alot more. *grin*
7/17/2003 c2 Morbid Fascination
Much, much better than the last one. There is variety and it's not too redundant.
MF
Much, much better than the last one. There is variety and it's not too redundant.
MF
7/16/2003 c2 
28GoldenTears
Umm...that just makes me wanna cry...talk about tails from the cript...lol...It just wasn't the happy ending I suppose I was expecting! It was good though!
-GoldenTears-
28GoldenTearsUmm...that just makes me wanna cry...talk about tails from the cript...lol...It just wasn't the happy ending I suppose I was expecting! It was good though!
-GoldenTears-
6/19/2003 c1 Morbid Fascination
Be afraid, be very afraid.
Hrrm, that came out of nowhere...anyway. I'd just like to say that it's a nice sex scene, but leaves more to be desired. Piece of advice, don't use 'Ross' or 'the Stranger' for the beginning of almost every sentence. The redundancy makes it a bit monotonous. And your choice of words is not the best, if you want to write mindless smut, at least change some words here and there where you pull a "welcome to the department of redundancy department" move, and there's something that's like an itch I can't reach about the story, if I ever do manage to get it, I'll tell you.
Spud
Be afraid, be very afraid.
Hrrm, that came out of nowhere...anyway. I'd just like to say that it's a nice sex scene, but leaves more to be desired. Piece of advice, don't use 'Ross' or 'the Stranger' for the beginning of almost every sentence. The redundancy makes it a bit monotonous. And your choice of words is not the best, if you want to write mindless smut, at least change some words here and there where you pull a "welcome to the department of redundancy department" move, and there's something that's like an itch I can't reach about the story, if I ever do manage to get it, I'll tell you.
Spud
6/19/2003 c1 20Simoriah Tyler
::amused:: I've written similar... 'cept it was straight... but mine wasn't as well written, I think. Luv the punchline =). yay!
20Simoriah Tyler::amused:: I've written similar... 'cept it was straight... but mine wasn't as well written, I think. Luv the punchline =). yay!
6/19/2003 c1 28GoldenTears
I need a life too. lol. Or else I would be R/R steamy sex dreams! lol. It wasn't bad...your choice of words was a little off, but it was great non-the-less. (=9_9=)
-GoldenTears-
28GoldenTearsI need a life too. lol. Or else I would be R/R steamy sex dreams! lol. It wasn't bad...your choice of words was a little off, but it was great non-the-less. (=9_9=)
-GoldenTears-