for Traces of the Past!7/3/2003 c6 Dark Auro
hey wut up gurl ne wayz i can tbleive u did dat dat wuz so shoking for me i hope u continue wit de story cuz itz goin really good and i dotn want ya to stop it half way and all ok k latez
hey wut up gurl ne wayz i can tbleive u did dat dat wuz so shoking for me i hope u continue wit de story cuz itz goin really good and i dotn want ya to stop it half way and all ok k latez
7/1/2003 c5 
12Little Mermaid
ouch...and her family didnt even bother to hear her out. what the...i think you kind of get the pic.
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12Little Mermaidouch...and her family didnt even bother to hear her out. what the...i think you kind of get the pic.
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7/1/2003 c1 1sweetieash1
This is really good. Ur a good writer, but i have a suggestion. The ending is a bit too dramatized, if u plan on having her parents realize their mistake it works, but if not then you might want to tone it down just a bit. Like have them be more disappointed in her or something. otherwise awesome story. update soon!
1sweetieash1This is really good. Ur a good writer, but i have a suggestion. The ending is a bit too dramatized, if u plan on having her parents realize their mistake it works, but if not then you might want to tone it down just a bit. Like have them be more disappointed in her or something. otherwise awesome story. update soon!
6/29/2003 c5 JazzeeT
Good chappie nice writing and you def have me looking forward for more but please let her tell her parents, guilt and anxiety isnt a good thing esp for rape victim. but gosh they could have had a little bit mor faith in her. Update soon
Good chappie nice writing and you def have me looking forward for more but please let her tell her parents, guilt and anxiety isnt a good thing esp for rape victim. but gosh they could have had a little bit mor faith in her. Update soon
6/27/2003 c4 JazzeeT
im sad, im really really sad. wow i hope that she tells her parents the truth. wow. sigh update soon
im sad, im really really sad. wow i hope that she tells her parents the truth. wow. sigh update soon
6/27/2003 c3 9Skript Talker
Wow, I'm likin' this. I guess romance is my second home here, after all. Thanks for the review, and wherever Sarah is-thank you too!
Um, I don't know if I can actually provide much help because I honestly think you're a well off writer already and to be honest, I get really annoyed with my own writing. Trust me, if I knew what the hell I wrote now and then, I would probably be a better helper, but I'm just as clueless. Maybe a little of bit of blind luck helps here and there.
I'd be happy to give suggestions, but not advice in particular. Everyone is still learning and developing, including myself. I don't think it would be my place to give you words of wisdom since I have none. I like your main character so far and I think the Garret character seems to grow onto the reader. The whole rape thing added to the turmoil that "Stealman" had and that goes for excellant "character developement". If you do want a little help with anything, just e-mail me and run whatever the problem was by me. I'd be grateful to help. Great story so far...I'm hooked already. I think this turned out longer than I expected, even though I didn't have anything important to say. Strange. Alright I'll stop now.
9Skript TalkerWow, I'm likin' this. I guess romance is my second home here, after all. Thanks for the review, and wherever Sarah is-thank you too!
Um, I don't know if I can actually provide much help because I honestly think you're a well off writer already and to be honest, I get really annoyed with my own writing. Trust me, if I knew what the hell I wrote now and then, I would probably be a better helper, but I'm just as clueless. Maybe a little of bit of blind luck helps here and there.
I'd be happy to give suggestions, but not advice in particular. Everyone is still learning and developing, including myself. I don't think it would be my place to give you words of wisdom since I have none. I like your main character so far and I think the Garret character seems to grow onto the reader. The whole rape thing added to the turmoil that "Stealman" had and that goes for excellant "character developement". If you do want a little help with anything, just e-mail me and run whatever the problem was by me. I'd be grateful to help. Great story so far...I'm hooked already. I think this turned out longer than I expected, even though I didn't have anything important to say. Strange. Alright I'll stop now.
6/26/2003 c2 PoeticJustice
This is a good story; you are very talented at writing natural-sounding, funny dialogue. You just need to work on grammar to make your story clearer and easier to read, and try not to use so many exclamation points. I like it overall.
This is a good story; you are very talented at writing natural-sounding, funny dialogue. You just need to work on grammar to make your story clearer and easier to read, and try not to use so many exclamation points. I like it overall.
6/26/2003 c2 10snowtiger13731
Hey. I saw who dis wuz written by and i thought 'hey julia, why don't u go read sumthin one of your reviewers wrote?' so here i am. anyway, i haven't read all of it, b/c i still have story requests that i have yet to fulfill, but mai constructive criticism for you is to really narrow down on the exclamation marks. about every few sentences there's an exclamation mark, and it kind of takes away from the value of the story. well, i'm outie so i'll ttyl, maybe.
*~jULiA~*
10snowtiger13731Hey. I saw who dis wuz written by and i thought 'hey julia, why don't u go read sumthin one of your reviewers wrote?' so here i am. anyway, i haven't read all of it, b/c i still have story requests that i have yet to fulfill, but mai constructive criticism for you is to really narrow down on the exclamation marks. about every few sentences there's an exclamation mark, and it kind of takes away from the value of the story. well, i'm outie so i'll ttyl, maybe.
*~jULiA~*
6/25/2003 c3 JazzeeT
well this is good. update soon, i dont see the song that you were talking about. so i like but you left me hanging- write more please. Update soon
well this is good. update soon, i dont see the song that you were talking about. so i like but you left me hanging- write more please. Update soon
6/25/2003 c3 silvercat324
Romance is not my field of expertise but I had a author alert for this I have read all three chapters..well written but no suggestion this time.
Romance is not my field of expertise but I had a author alert for this I have read all three chapters..well written but no suggestion this time.
6/25/2003 c2 JazzeeT
i like i really like. this was kinda sad though the whole rape thing but was a good chappie. i hope everything works out for her (well according to the ist chappie). Update soon
i like i really like. this was kinda sad though the whole rape thing but was a good chappie. i hope everything works out for her (well according to the ist chappie). Update soon
6/23/2003 c1 12Little Mermaid
thats pretty cool. i've never thought of my parents like that...i never want to either. but it's interesting to listen to their stories. poor josh; thats got to be disturbing.
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12Little Mermaidthats pretty cool. i've never thought of my parents like that...i never want to either. but it's interesting to listen to their stories. poor josh; thats got to be disturbing.
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