for Anatomy of a Breakdown4/13/2004 c1 
69t. Hudson
Wow, this is incredible. It's very complex and you haven't shyed away from writing a rather difficult poem that holds the reader's attention to the very end. Your parenthetical remarks sometimes lend a sort of bitter cynicism, sometimes a sad candor. It seems to me the beast is schizophrenia. Am I correct in this interpretation?
69t. HudsonWow, this is incredible. It's very complex and you haven't shyed away from writing a rather difficult poem that holds the reader's attention to the very end. Your parenthetical remarks sometimes lend a sort of bitter cynicism, sometimes a sad candor. It seems to me the beast is schizophrenia. Am I correct in this interpretation?
9/11/2003 c1 Who cares
"I can safely say that this is amongst the worst poems I've ever read. I couldn't help but to pause after every other line and laugh at how decrepit and immature this peice of cliche melodramatic mall-goth crap is. If I wrote poetry like that, I couldn't blame everyone for leaving.
Learn to right before you post anymore."
Back at you. It's called "constructive criticism". If you can't say anything nice or helpful, keep your fat a** mouth shut.
"I can safely say that this is amongst the worst poems I've ever read. I couldn't help but to pause after every other line and laugh at how decrepit and immature this peice of cliche melodramatic mall-goth crap is. If I wrote poetry like that, I couldn't blame everyone for leaving.
Learn to right before you post anymore."
Back at you. It's called "constructive criticism". If you can't say anything nice or helpful, keep your fat a** mouth shut.
7/2/2003 c1 25TylerB
the imagery here is amazing. I almost feel sick when i read the 2nd stanza, but the 3rd is my favorite.
keep it up
25TylerBthe imagery here is amazing. I almost feel sick when i read the 2nd stanza, but the 3rd is my favorite.
keep it up
6/23/2003 c1 DobbyTheHouseElf
I love this poem! Brilliant! :) I'm sorry to hear about you and your girlfriend breakin up. If ya eva depressed or just want sum1 2 talk 2, feel free to email me!
Bethany
I love this poem! Brilliant! :) I'm sorry to hear about you and your girlfriend breakin up. If ya eva depressed or just want sum1 2 talk 2, feel free to email me!
Bethany
6/22/2003 c1 64not sure yet
i love this one, very ironic in some places, bitter and aggressive with touches of hopelessness, plus well written as usual, every word just fits, in the second stanza, love the whole thing, but the sarcasm just between the first three lines of that one is great, dark and painful, and then saying "(All stories come to a good ending, don't they?)" bitter and sort of laughing sickness, if that makes any sense, in the third stanza the idea of gloved hands pushing away and then being polite about refusing to touch with bare hands, it seems like such a simple action, not really that agressive or harmful, yet while reading it, it still gives a gooshy feeling, like it was an off hand sort of thing, i dunno, just the way that was put was brillant, fourth stanza is used fairly often, at least the idea behind it but it was worded very well and it is true, on that just above level so i think it works very well, fifth stanza begins just like wow, the whole idea of being willing, and then being forced, it contrasted each other so oddly, yet it works well, love the end of this stanza too, the last line dark humor yet deadly seriousness, last stanza, its sad, dark, love the third line in it, but the last line just got to me, which really is part of what makes a GREAT poem different from a good one, the ending, just a hopeless yet hopeful cry...i skipped the first stanza because i just did, but anywayz, love the idea of beast pusing you out of heaven, on the same line they reflect and contrast each other well, esp since from the first few lines it says that its inside, trying to run away from something inside rarely ever works..but anywayz, i kinda got that heaven is outside for this one, so something inside pushing outta something outside, thats another little contrast, oddity that i just love...well, sorry for the crap review, lil outta it right now, but i seriously love this, intense, powerful, harsh, and raw, yet without seemingly so, awesome job
64not sure yeti love this one, very ironic in some places, bitter and aggressive with touches of hopelessness, plus well written as usual, every word just fits, in the second stanza, love the whole thing, but the sarcasm just between the first three lines of that one is great, dark and painful, and then saying "(All stories come to a good ending, don't they?)" bitter and sort of laughing sickness, if that makes any sense, in the third stanza the idea of gloved hands pushing away and then being polite about refusing to touch with bare hands, it seems like such a simple action, not really that agressive or harmful, yet while reading it, it still gives a gooshy feeling, like it was an off hand sort of thing, i dunno, just the way that was put was brillant, fourth stanza is used fairly often, at least the idea behind it but it was worded very well and it is true, on that just above level so i think it works very well, fifth stanza begins just like wow, the whole idea of being willing, and then being forced, it contrasted each other so oddly, yet it works well, love the end of this stanza too, the last line dark humor yet deadly seriousness, last stanza, its sad, dark, love the third line in it, but the last line just got to me, which really is part of what makes a GREAT poem different from a good one, the ending, just a hopeless yet hopeful cry...i skipped the first stanza because i just did, but anywayz, love the idea of beast pusing you out of heaven, on the same line they reflect and contrast each other well, esp since from the first few lines it says that its inside, trying to run away from something inside rarely ever works..but anywayz, i kinda got that heaven is outside for this one, so something inside pushing outta something outside, thats another little contrast, oddity that i just love...well, sorry for the crap review, lil outta it right now, but i seriously love this, intense, powerful, harsh, and raw, yet without seemingly so, awesome job