for Care For You8/3/2003 c1 
63Tormented Romantic
holy cow, like major major deja vu. This piece reminds me so much of one I wrote not too long ago. If I'm not mistaken, it's the one you reviewed (thanks btw). The entire first stanza just amazed me, I was especially fond of of the lines that read: "why can't you free ny doubtful mind/and melt my cold, cold heart" I know that feeling all too well.
ok ok here's the part of my reviews that no one ever likes but I love to give, I'm big on constructive critisism so here goes: the flowed seemed a bit off at times and distracted a bit from the piece, and the one line that reads "and I'll write you some different song" seems a bit out of place. I think this would be better as a normal poem as opposed to a song just because the flow was a bit off.
all in all, this was very nicely done and I can relate on an unimaginable level which makes critisising this piece extremely difficult. sorry this review is so long, I tend to get carried away lol. ^-^;
-Tormented Romantic-
63Tormented Romanticholy cow, like major major deja vu. This piece reminds me so much of one I wrote not too long ago. If I'm not mistaken, it's the one you reviewed (thanks btw). The entire first stanza just amazed me, I was especially fond of of the lines that read: "why can't you free ny doubtful mind/and melt my cold, cold heart" I know that feeling all too well.
ok ok here's the part of my reviews that no one ever likes but I love to give, I'm big on constructive critisism so here goes: the flowed seemed a bit off at times and distracted a bit from the piece, and the one line that reads "and I'll write you some different song" seems a bit out of place. I think this would be better as a normal poem as opposed to a song just because the flow was a bit off.
all in all, this was very nicely done and I can relate on an unimaginable level which makes critisising this piece extremely difficult. sorry this review is so long, I tend to get carried away lol. ^-^;
-Tormented Romantic-