1/17/2005 c1 33TaraC
Oh my God... This poem is fucking amazing. Literally. I can identify with damn near everything written in here, especially this:

"Fear at school is when at home you walk around in cut-offs and tank tops while

you wear long pants and sweatshirts to school.

Because you still feel judged, you still ask yourself; If I wear this do I look fat?

Does it make me look sluty?

What will everyone think?"

And most especially this one:

"Or maybe you have a crush on someone and another someone finds out.

They tell the one you like. Who wouldn’t?

And then the one you like teases you, makes you think they are interested.

Until they laugh and say they are kidding while you sit there, embarrassed,

because now everyone knows.

And what if you still like that person even though it puts you through torment

and pain?"

I have been there, and yea, it does fucking hurt. And it seems, time, doesn't pass by quickly enough for you to get over them, and it sucks because you feel so helpess, so lost and hopeless, because you don't know when it is in time, that you will heal completely and be alright. You've done an excellent job with this poem, and I can feel that you put your heart into this. You are entitled to every right of being proud of this poem.

Love,Shay

8/20/2004 c1 14Black-raindb0w
wow that is so true. great poem.
oh and the elephant man is the most deformed man that ever lived. he had an illness that nobody could ever really figure out but he was a great guy. lol

6/17/2004 c1 5LassieC
Great poem, it was very touching. I liked the underlined words, and the feeling of hope at the end. It was very sad, but it really made me think.

5/17/2004 c1 4Robyn D
All it takes is for one person to read this and pass it to a friend, who will pass it to another friend who will pass it to another, until this chain is spread so far over the world that maybe things will eventually begin to change.
i hope so, because i felt as you do. reading all the time by myself in a corner at school.
but unlike you i'm guessing, i had a support system. i had a twin who was so exactly like me that i wasn't strange or outcast.
as for your writing style, i can't comment very much because i'm not very familiar with poetry. i never come to this section. i only read your story because alqualonde, one of MY reviewers who seems to follow my work where ever i post it recommended it. i'm glad she did because this poem was excellent.
i just have one question, at one point in your story, you address some of your comments directly to the people who have judged you, but it was such a switch from the way you were going that i wonder if perhaps it was intentional or even for the best. It was confusing for a moment or two... but again, i know very little about poetry. :$
i would also like to take this opportunity to thank you for your review on my story the order. i laughed at your comment that i was very descriptive, because generally i'm not. my fanfic stuff certainly isn't. i also have some stuff on this site posted under RobynD. for some reason it wasn't working for awhile so i got a second account then it started to work again, so whatever...shrugs
and my final comment, when the world judges you harshly for reading a book, you turn around, smile at them, and start a book club. :D worked for me.
later
luv bells/RobynD/dooz
P.S. will read your other stuff later... off to bed right now though. :D

5/9/2004 c1 81daphnegray78
Wow. That was really powerful. And I can totally relate to it...I was teased A LOT during Middle School because of my weight. But, I eventually learned to just not care what they think, and now that I'm in High-school the teasing has pretty much stopped...And if you're still teased a lot, please take hope in knowing that none of that "Popular" B.S. will matter in the real world.
Anyway, this was really good and I really liked it. Keep up the great work!

10/19/2003 c1 24echoes of chaos
You put all your feelings here really well. it's more of a monologue than a poem - like a credo. I think you've got the thoughts and fears down pat and it's cool to read, makes you feel like you're having these thoughts right as you're saying them. The underlining for emphasis helped a lot. kudos!

6/24/2003 c1 2cbprice25
Powerful, personal poem. I like what you wrote about your soul having a bleeding cut, an emotional wound. It looks like you really put yourself into this poem.