for Two Thieves in the Cloister2/11/2005 c1 Kassey
Waltraute,
Im a big fan of this short story, and while of course there is always room for improvement.. I have to say, this is an incredibly well written tale, and I adore it. The characters are keen - and the kiss. Oh, the kiss.. I can honestly say I did not seem that coming. Your talent really shines through in this story. I enjoyed reading the humors The Best Damn Battle Ever, but Two Thieves in the Cloister appeals to a more soulful (grah, what a cheesy adjective!) part of myself. I hope to see more from you. You've obviously got the talent to write something great. I sincerely hope that you harness that and get something quality such as Two Thieves published, so I can buy myself a copy. Bravo!
*Kassey
Waltraute,
Im a big fan of this short story, and while of course there is always room for improvement.. I have to say, this is an incredibly well written tale, and I adore it. The characters are keen - and the kiss. Oh, the kiss.. I can honestly say I did not seem that coming. Your talent really shines through in this story. I enjoyed reading the humors The Best Damn Battle Ever, but Two Thieves in the Cloister appeals to a more soulful (grah, what a cheesy adjective!) part of myself. I hope to see more from you. You've obviously got the talent to write something great. I sincerely hope that you harness that and get something quality such as Two Thieves published, so I can buy myself a copy. Bravo!
*Kassey
9/13/2003 c1 
12Coni
I really like this story! I just read it again.. :P and the development is very well-done! I could feel Dey's anxiety and I was really surprised when she kissed him! Good write! :)
12ConiI really like this story! I just read it again.. :P and the development is very well-done! I could feel Dey's anxiety and I was really surprised when she kissed him! Good write! :)
6/29/2003 c1 2ermie
I loved it! I'm so impressed that you made the characters so real in such a short amount of text... And using first person pov was a good choice on this one, I think. I think any reader would be able to identify with the thrill of sneaking and spying... as well as the inner conflict Dey struggled with. :D
2ermieI loved it! I'm so impressed that you made the characters so real in such a short amount of text... And using first person pov was a good choice on this one, I think. I think any reader would be able to identify with the thrill of sneaking and spying... as well as the inner conflict Dey struggled with. :D