for Uprooted10/5/2003 c9 Saradys
Wow. This is getting better and better, I just can't wait to read another chapter.
Keep up the good work!
Wow. This is getting better and better, I just can't wait to read another chapter.
Keep up the good work!
9/29/2003 c9 Alaina
Oh, wow... That was so good. I am totally blown away. Liz that was so unbelievably good. Have I mentioned that it was good? Haha...well, keep writing, I'll make sure to keep reading.
Oh, wow... That was so good. I am totally blown away. Liz that was so unbelievably good. Have I mentioned that it was good? Haha...well, keep writing, I'll make sure to keep reading.
9/26/2003 c8 
87EchoesOfReason
Aloha my reviewer. I saw your very interesting pen name and read one of your works, something I do with almost all of my reviewers, it's a personal thing. Anywho...great story! I'm hooked already, only eight chapters and I'm hooked, normally that takes about ten or fifteen to do so, some really good stories get me on the second chapter, which, let me point out, you had me at first. It's really nice, I like it a lot. Very descriptive. You have an amazing writing style. And you've got quite a foil going on there between Rose and Lily and a very nice choice of names, even the meaning of their names. Lily: soft and delicate. Rose: soft and delicate but only once you get past the thorn. So metaphorical, either that or I'm reading way too much into this...I ten to do that a lot.
Well like I said, I love this story so far. I would have given you a review for every chapter but when I read a story that has a plot that's already kicked off the ground, likes yours, I decide to read all of it and then review and then review every chapter as it posts. SO this means that I am greatly anticipating your next post, and you can bet this is going on my author alert and fav. author if my list will let me *begs silently*.
This got really interesting, especially in this chapter. Seems like Lily's got some secret past of her own but she masks it with happiness perhaps. And Rose, oh how people are probably dying to find out Rose's past and where her newfound friendship with Shawn will take her, not to mention Joel's thing for Lily. Yes very very good. Throw a little romance into Angst and you've got one heck of a great bloody plot.
You can bet this is on my list of recommendations and in no time I'll have many people reading your amazing works. *Yes, flattery is one of my strong suites* But jokes aside, This is really good. Keep running with this and it'll turn out amazing.
I think I've made my point rather clearly, and I've typed up a long enough review...what can I say...I like to talk. NO, I like to ramble even though I don't mean to...and there I go again...I'm going to shut up and leave, because I think I just made an ass of myself...ciao!
Love always,
A-Light-From-Your-Darkness...
P.s.1- I'm with you on the saving yourself thing. Best and only way to go for me...keep it up...faith...woo-hoo:D
and 2: Just a simple question, how did you end up on my story? *just a query, random poll i'm taking* THANKS FOR THE REVIEW...SO GENEROUS...peace. love. life.
87EchoesOfReasonAloha my reviewer. I saw your very interesting pen name and read one of your works, something I do with almost all of my reviewers, it's a personal thing. Anywho...great story! I'm hooked already, only eight chapters and I'm hooked, normally that takes about ten or fifteen to do so, some really good stories get me on the second chapter, which, let me point out, you had me at first. It's really nice, I like it a lot. Very descriptive. You have an amazing writing style. And you've got quite a foil going on there between Rose and Lily and a very nice choice of names, even the meaning of their names. Lily: soft and delicate. Rose: soft and delicate but only once you get past the thorn. So metaphorical, either that or I'm reading way too much into this...I ten to do that a lot.
Well like I said, I love this story so far. I would have given you a review for every chapter but when I read a story that has a plot that's already kicked off the ground, likes yours, I decide to read all of it and then review and then review every chapter as it posts. SO this means that I am greatly anticipating your next post, and you can bet this is going on my author alert and fav. author if my list will let me *begs silently*.
This got really interesting, especially in this chapter. Seems like Lily's got some secret past of her own but she masks it with happiness perhaps. And Rose, oh how people are probably dying to find out Rose's past and where her newfound friendship with Shawn will take her, not to mention Joel's thing for Lily. Yes very very good. Throw a little romance into Angst and you've got one heck of a great bloody plot.
You can bet this is on my list of recommendations and in no time I'll have many people reading your amazing works. *Yes, flattery is one of my strong suites* But jokes aside, This is really good. Keep running with this and it'll turn out amazing.
I think I've made my point rather clearly, and I've typed up a long enough review...what can I say...I like to talk. NO, I like to ramble even though I don't mean to...and there I go again...I'm going to shut up and leave, because I think I just made an ass of myself...ciao!
Love always,
A-Light-From-Your-Darkness...
P.s.1- I'm with you on the saving yourself thing. Best and only way to go for me...keep it up...faith...woo-hoo:D
and 2: Just a simple question, how did you end up on my story? *just a query, random poll i'm taking* THANKS FOR THE REVIEW...SO GENEROUS...peace. love. life.
9/18/2003 c8 Saradys
Wow, I'm glad you liked my idea for the title.
This story is great, you've written so much more than before, that's wonderful.
Keep going, I like it so much, and I want to see what happens next.
(oh, I've added an actual chapter to my story too, if you want to see what that's like)
Wow, I'm glad you liked my idea for the title.
This story is great, you've written so much more than before, that's wonderful.
Keep going, I like it so much, and I want to see what happens next.
(oh, I've added an actual chapter to my story too, if you want to see what that's like)
8/22/2003 c1 LoStInHeAvEn
this story is so dam good! i love tha story line! heeheh.. please update soon! i wanna kno wat happens! =D =D!
this story is so dam good! i love tha story line! heeheh.. please update soon! i wanna kno wat happens! =D =D!
8/18/2003 c6 Furbs
This totally wocks! I love it! I can sense a love triangle in the near future, but who knows you may surprise me...
Oh yeah, and the guitar is so awesome, maybe you need a drum player now, hm!
This totally wocks! I love it! I can sense a love triangle in the near future, but who knows you may surprise me...
Oh yeah, and the guitar is so awesome, maybe you need a drum player now, hm!
8/15/2003 c5 5Mandier
hey!
Your story is SO awesome! I *cant* wait to read more, dead serious. It's so good, and it's really sparked my interest! Awesome!
5Mandierhey!
Your story is SO awesome! I *cant* wait to read more, dead serious. It's so good, and it's really sparked my interest! Awesome!
8/11/2003 c4 Hannah
The story always leaves enough to keep the reader interested just enough to read the first few lines of the next page. That's where the reader gets hooked and keeps on goin. Although, I like the idea of the two different views and opinions of the characters, sometimes I find Lily's point of view, nearly pointless. Rose gives you every hint of what Lily is thinking, and Lily's point of view only confirms what Rose thought. The only thing that makes Lily more important than any of the other characters is her conversations with the other characters. Those conversations could be shown just as well if Rose narrated the whole thing. I find that the small children are very difficult to keep track of, and now that i think about, that may be all for the best, if the idea you want to put off is that there are a significant amount of kids at the house. The more overwhelmed you are with the chidren characters, the more it seems that there are a ton of kids there. Other than those characters being a little confusing, Rose was presented in a very well written manner, i loved how the audience keeps learning more and more of her, and I cannot wait to learn more of her past. The part of the story where Becca gets bitten, was very interesting. I was intrigued. Although i thought it might be a little more..., oh i don't know, just more, maybe exciting? Maybe I expected for my heart to be racing. Haha, this review sounds so professional, i love it, haha. Well Liz, i finally read one of your stories, and I'm very impressed. I don't know what finally made me read it, maybe it was the fact that the link had twizzlers in it and then i was intrigued, lol. I really can't wait for the rest of this story, and seriously don't let anything i said ruin the story, cause what do i know!
-Hannah
The story always leaves enough to keep the reader interested just enough to read the first few lines of the next page. That's where the reader gets hooked and keeps on goin. Although, I like the idea of the two different views and opinions of the characters, sometimes I find Lily's point of view, nearly pointless. Rose gives you every hint of what Lily is thinking, and Lily's point of view only confirms what Rose thought. The only thing that makes Lily more important than any of the other characters is her conversations with the other characters. Those conversations could be shown just as well if Rose narrated the whole thing. I find that the small children are very difficult to keep track of, and now that i think about, that may be all for the best, if the idea you want to put off is that there are a significant amount of kids at the house. The more overwhelmed you are with the chidren characters, the more it seems that there are a ton of kids there. Other than those characters being a little confusing, Rose was presented in a very well written manner, i loved how the audience keeps learning more and more of her, and I cannot wait to learn more of her past. The part of the story where Becca gets bitten, was very interesting. I was intrigued. Although i thought it might be a little more..., oh i don't know, just more, maybe exciting? Maybe I expected for my heart to be racing. Haha, this review sounds so professional, i love it, haha. Well Liz, i finally read one of your stories, and I'm very impressed. I don't know what finally made me read it, maybe it was the fact that the link had twizzlers in it and then i was intrigued, lol. I really can't wait for the rest of this story, and seriously don't let anything i said ruin the story, cause what do i know!
-Hannah
8/7/2003 c4 Ashley
the story is great i cant wait till you add on and i can read the rest of the story well g2g bye
the story is great i cant wait till you add on and i can read the rest of the story well g2g bye
8/4/2003 c1 7Twilight Tiger
Hm... I like it. I want to know more about Rose's past and all. You have a nice way of writing. If I have time sometime, I'll come back and finish reading. I gotta go to soccer. Great job!
7Twilight TigerHm... I like it. I want to know more about Rose's past and all. You have a nice way of writing. If I have time sometime, I'll come back and finish reading. I gotta go to soccer. Great job!
7/24/2003 c4 5cOOkiMoNsteR626
wowsers! ye kind o' left us hangin' there! great story, btw!
*blushes* i rarely ask...but do ye mind checkin' out one o' my stories?
5cOOkiMoNsteR626wowsers! ye kind o' left us hangin' there! great story, btw!
*blushes* i rarely ask...but do ye mind checkin' out one o' my stories?
7/24/2003 c4 Furbs
This story is so good! I love it! The characters in this story are so awesome. I can't wait for the next chapter. Poor little Becca...
This story is so good! I love it! The characters in this story are so awesome. I can't wait for the next chapter. Poor little Becca...
7/24/2003 c4 26pneumothorax
this is a good start and I think it's interesting how they're all apartently christians. not that many young people in a normal population are but hey...your fic. it's a good start and i think it's definately worth continuing although some of the chapters legnths are a bit short. it's good the way you change between two perspectives. keep writing.
Cali.
26pneumothoraxthis is a good start and I think it's interesting how they're all apartently christians. not that many young people in a normal population are but hey...your fic. it's a good start and i think it's definately worth continuing although some of the chapters legnths are a bit short. it's good the way you change between two perspectives. keep writing.
Cali.
7/15/2003 c3 5BlEEdingrzrbLDz
woo! i like Rose. she seems kewl. thats kewl how you have it in the 2 diff point of vievs! welp i like it! update soon!
5BlEEdingrzrbLDzwoo! i like Rose. she seems kewl. thats kewl how you have it in the 2 diff point of vievs! welp i like it! update soon!
7/15/2003 c3 acm5887
This chapter is really good. It leaves a good cliffhanger for readers to wonder about. I can't wait to find out what happens in the next chapter!
This chapter is really good. It leaves a good cliffhanger for readers to wonder about. I can't wait to find out what happens in the next chapter!