for The Stepbrother4/20/2012 c28 k1sarge
Okay loved the book and everything:) the only this is though that bothered me was that jade and zach would not have the same last name. she would obviously still keep her real fathers name because that is really disrespectful otherwise. okay thats it bye!
p.s. loved everything else!
Okay loved the book and everything:) the only this is though that bothered me was that jade and zach would not have the same last name. she would obviously still keep her real fathers name because that is really disrespectful otherwise. okay thats it bye!
p.s. loved everything else!
4/20/2012 c28 angelc18
I just read this from start to finish, and wanted to let you know that I loved it and that you are a great writer and story teller :)
I hope you write more in the future!
xoxo, Suze
I just read this from start to finish, and wanted to let you know that I loved it and that you are a great writer and story teller :)
I hope you write more in the future!
xoxo, Suze
3/8/2012 c13 eslover
This story just keeps getting more and more interesting :) I loved the interaction with the parents, especially when his dad says that maybe she's not ready to come out of the closet yet! Hilarious!
This story just keeps getting more and more interesting :) I loved the interaction with the parents, especially when his dad says that maybe she's not ready to come out of the closet yet! Hilarious!
3/8/2012 c7 eslover
Oh wow! The tension during the clean-up was just intense! I am enjoying this story so far, I am a bit shell-shocked with how the chapter ended though... On to chapter 8! :)
Oh wow! The tension during the clean-up was just intense! I am enjoying this story so far, I am a bit shell-shocked with how the chapter ended though... On to chapter 8! :)
8/6/2011 c28 Ashley
I loved your story! And how he asked her to marry him was just to die for. :D
I loved your story! And how he asked her to marry him was just to die for. :D
6/15/2011 c9 
7lahunnybee
Oh my your writing is more than just good. I'm attached to these characters already! I love what Zach said it made we smile the whole time I was reading this! Wonderful story so far! I shall continue to keep reading, even though I should go to sleep! You're wonderful at crafting your words!
7lahunnybeeOh my your writing is more than just good. I'm attached to these characters already! I love what Zach said it made we smile the whole time I was reading this! Wonderful story so far! I shall continue to keep reading, even though I should go to sleep! You're wonderful at crafting your words!
1/20/2011 c28 Pumpkin.-.-.Kween
Im just going to be honest because I feel sugar coating my review doesnt do the author any good. The plot itself was good even though it was a bit cliche but in the beginning of the story I liked the characters so I kept reading. As the story went on you lost me. There was good banter with sexual tension in the beginning but it turned into ackward and annoying repetition. The whole basis of being embarrassed over their relationship is ... well... dumb! Who cares if they're stepbrother and stepsister? No one in the real world would hold that against them especially since they didn't grow up together. Then the Zach character turns from cool free spirit bad boyish character into well.. to be honest.. slightly stalkerish. I mean seriously? It seems like you lost interest or the vibe of the story.. it went from a interesting story to having a vibe of a story being written by a inexperienced teenager with fantasies of what love and relationships are rather then reality. I'm not trying to diss you, I'm just saying.. you are a better author then the end result of this story.
Im just going to be honest because I feel sugar coating my review doesnt do the author any good. The plot itself was good even though it was a bit cliche but in the beginning of the story I liked the characters so I kept reading. As the story went on you lost me. There was good banter with sexual tension in the beginning but it turned into ackward and annoying repetition. The whole basis of being embarrassed over their relationship is ... well... dumb! Who cares if they're stepbrother and stepsister? No one in the real world would hold that against them especially since they didn't grow up together. Then the Zach character turns from cool free spirit bad boyish character into well.. to be honest.. slightly stalkerish. I mean seriously? It seems like you lost interest or the vibe of the story.. it went from a interesting story to having a vibe of a story being written by a inexperienced teenager with fantasies of what love and relationships are rather then reality. I'm not trying to diss you, I'm just saying.. you are a better author then the end result of this story.
7/4/2010 c5 jessica
its a little annoying how jade gets so offended over everything. like josh being surprised that she could cook & the apartment comment.
its a little annoying how jade gets so offended over everything. like josh being surprised that she could cook & the apartment comment.
4/20/2010 c28 Anara Celebvilya
That story was AMAZING! I absolutely loved it. It was really well written, and it had a great plot. Thanks for a great read!
That story was AMAZING! I absolutely loved it. It was really well written, and it had a great plot. Thanks for a great read!
1/5/2010 c28 SamanthaAllison
Despite what I thought before hand, it's a wonderful story (:
I love the ending, and your characters are awesome.
Despite what I thought before hand, it's a wonderful story (:
I love the ending, and your characters are awesome.
7/12/2009 c28 agadoo
That was just too cute!
And I really loved all of your characters.
Damn, now I have this silly smile on my face.
That was just too cute!
And I really loved all of your characters.
Damn, now I have this silly smile on my face.