for Just Another Night8/12/2003 c4 
8Luck of the Strigoi
Heh heh ^.^ You are still progressing, and making a consorted effort to continue on that route. If nothing else the flame must love you for that ~.^ I liked this one...no idea why ^.^;
8Luck of the StrigoiHeh heh ^.^ You are still progressing, and making a consorted effort to continue on that route. If nothing else the flame must love you for that ~.^ I liked this one...no idea why ^.^;
7/29/2003 c3 Luck of the Strigoi
Darn straight you did ^.^ Good job, lass! ^.^ You continue you fellow vampire enthusist, you! You're progress is steady and impressive and your dialouge much to my envy.
Darn straight you did ^.^ Good job, lass! ^.^ You continue you fellow vampire enthusist, you! You're progress is steady and impressive and your dialouge much to my envy.
7/28/2003 c2 Luck of the Strigoi
This was a bit better. Good to have a description of them. I do honestly enjoy your dialoge. I tried to use it more in my most recent chapter and it didn't go so well ^.^;; You -are- progressing. No doubt.
This was a bit better. Good to have a description of them. I do honestly enjoy your dialoge. I tried to use it more in my most recent chapter and it didn't go so well ^.^;; You -are- progressing. No doubt.
7/11/2003 c2 Cooking Spray
I like this! It's your first original story, I believe? And a good first attempt. You leave a lot of holes to be filled, so hopefully this will last a few chapters, because I want to know more!
Much mysteriousness... I like mysteriousness. *Thinks of Crooked Angel*
Yes, and you aren't overly descriptive... but it's still a good story. *Holds up thesaurus*
And I liked that part you wrote about 'why should I describe her, she'll soon be gone'. It was fitting, and revealed something somehow about Drake's character. I don't know... it was just very cool. *shrugs*
Sorry, I'm kinda floaty... only got five hours of sleep. Tee-hee ^_^ Anyway, keep at it, and keep improving! You have a great plot to contend with. I might post Crooked Angel sometime...
Bye now! *waves* Oh, this was long... ^_^0
I like this! It's your first original story, I believe? And a good first attempt. You leave a lot of holes to be filled, so hopefully this will last a few chapters, because I want to know more!
Much mysteriousness... I like mysteriousness. *Thinks of Crooked Angel*
Yes, and you aren't overly descriptive... but it's still a good story. *Holds up thesaurus*
And I liked that part you wrote about 'why should I describe her, she'll soon be gone'. It was fitting, and revealed something somehow about Drake's character. I don't know... it was just very cool. *shrugs*
Sorry, I'm kinda floaty... only got five hours of sleep. Tee-hee ^_^ Anyway, keep at it, and keep improving! You have a great plot to contend with. I might post Crooked Angel sometime...
Bye now! *waves* Oh, this was long... ^_^0
7/9/2003 c1 Luck of the Strigoi
I note that your a newbie, so I'll try and be gentle with my critisisms? Um...being descriptive would do grand things for your work. The dialog beats some that I have read, but the visuals leave much to be desired. As I'm in the porcess of wrtting a vampire story myself and recently wrote chapter in the first person of someone who was blind I can take pity with not being able to be all that descriptive. Otherwise a good effort. Keep it up.
I note that your a newbie, so I'll try and be gentle with my critisisms? Um...being descriptive would do grand things for your work. The dialog beats some that I have read, but the visuals leave much to be desired. As I'm in the porcess of wrtting a vampire story myself and recently wrote chapter in the first person of someone who was blind I can take pity with not being able to be all that descriptive. Otherwise a good effort. Keep it up.
7/9/2003 c1 2TristaCharon
Very nice story...short and sweet (Oh, wait, I take the sweet part back.) Write more and you'll improve. Be more descriptive with your stories. It helps the reader really imagine the scene...
2TristaCharonVery nice story...short and sweet (Oh, wait, I take the sweet part back.) Write more and you'll improve. Be more descriptive with your stories. It helps the reader really imagine the scene...