for Kyle Jameson2/18/2004 c2 RCS
A chilling future indeed. A note, however. It's not necessary to apologize in a disclaimer about the actions of a fictional character. If someone reads the racist remarks of your story's villain and attaches those slurs to your beliefs, then that reader is a moron who deserves to be offended anyway. Hookerson's actions are actually more offensive than anything he says...which is perfectly fine. That's his character.
A chilling future indeed. A note, however. It's not necessary to apologize in a disclaimer about the actions of a fictional character. If someone reads the racist remarks of your story's villain and attaches those slurs to your beliefs, then that reader is a moron who deserves to be offended anyway. Hookerson's actions are actually more offensive than anything he says...which is perfectly fine. That's his character.
2/15/2004 c4 Mbwun
Still fun. Kyle bitching about swimsuits was funny. mblack1470 sounds like a dipshit... the opinions that really count are Deathworm's and Kyalia's. Although I'd rather like for him to review one of my stories... flames are fun.:)
~He Who Walks On All Fours
Still fun. Kyle bitching about swimsuits was funny. mblack1470 sounds like a dipshit... the opinions that really count are Deathworm's and Kyalia's. Although I'd rather like for him to review one of my stories... flames are fun.:)
~He Who Walks On All Fours
2/14/2004 c1 mblack1470
This SUCKS! what the hell where u thinking. it has no plot. it has no humor. the little action there is is weak. why don't you give up you obviously will not make a carrier out of this!
p.s. have you considered suicide?
This SUCKS! what the hell where u thinking. it has no plot. it has no humor. the little action there is is weak. why don't you give up you obviously will not make a carrier out of this!
p.s. have you considered suicide?
10/17/2003 c1 
7Delphian Wyrd
You're story is cool, but i can't really relate to it so i am sorry but i won't read on...the style is good though...oh and dark wizard has a sister and she is nine...read ch.9 again...duh...write other stories, ya can't rely on only one...
7Delphian WyrdYou're story is cool, but i can't really relate to it so i am sorry but i won't read on...the style is good though...oh and dark wizard has a sister and she is nine...read ch.9 again...duh...write other stories, ya can't rely on only one...
9/12/2003 c1 Mbwun
I really hope you plan on continuing this story... I noticed you haven't updated in a while...
~He Who Walks On All Fours
I really hope you plan on continuing this story... I noticed you haven't updated in a while...
~He Who Walks On All Fours
8/31/2003 c2 Dead Page
This is a great story. I like how you can switch from 1st to third person without confusing people. And i like Kyle's persona. I want you to update FAST!
This is a great story. I like how you can switch from 1st to third person without confusing people. And i like Kyle's persona. I want you to update FAST!
8/12/2003 c2 Kyalia
You're continuing this, aren't you? It's got potential- please do.
My only criticism: vary the way that you begin sentences.
You're continuing this, aren't you? It's got potential- please do.
My only criticism: vary the way that you begin sentences.
7/13/2003 c3 Mbwun
An interesting premise... people being shot for not paying their taxes, etc. I really don't think that the censored version of the second chapter was necessary; your character's racist remarks weren't really all that bad and, considering that it's an obviously evil character saying them and not an ideal that you the author is pushing, it's really not that offensive. Keep writing!
~He Who Walks On All Fours
An interesting premise... people being shot for not paying their taxes, etc. I really don't think that the censored version of the second chapter was necessary; your character's racist remarks weren't really all that bad and, considering that it's an obviously evil character saying them and not an ideal that you the author is pushing, it's really not that offensive. Keep writing!
~He Who Walks On All Fours
7/11/2003 c2 1istanbull
one of the best stories i have ever read
to much swearing tho but it wasnt to bad
nice code 32489 hahaha
great story
1istanbullone of the best stories i have ever read
to much swearing tho but it wasnt to bad
nice code 32489 hahaha
great story
7/10/2003 c1 istanbull
it was sweeter than sweet. it needs some more fighting tho.
but other than that it was superb.
it was sweeter than sweet. it needs some more fighting tho.
but other than that it was superb.