for Blood, Sex and Magik6/4/2021 c33 Wren
Man I wish this story was still being updated. It’s really enjoyable and I’ve been invested in the characters for years
Man I wish this story was still being updated. It’s really enjoyable and I’ve been invested in the characters for years
12/16/2014 c33 Guest
Cool,nuns!
Cool,nuns!
3/21/2014 c33 Geno
Short and to the point so it doesn't drag and take away from the story. Gotta love the humor you stick in here.
Can't wait to read on and see how this resolves-or how Jess explains this one to Alice (if she ever does).
-L
Short and to the point so it doesn't drag and take away from the story. Gotta love the humor you stick in here.
Can't wait to read on and see how this resolves-or how Jess explains this one to Alice (if she ever does).
-L
7/23/2012 c32 Wolvenkite
hope you update soon. found this story on adultfanfiction first. was disappointed there wasn't more until i found it on here. update soon .
hope you update soon. found this story on adultfanfiction first. was disappointed there wasn't more until i found it on here. update soon .
2/14/2012 c32 breaktherules
Whoa...Hot sex and then the Valentines Day surprise. I really didn't expect that would happen to Lisa.
Another great chapter!
Whoa...Hot sex and then the Valentines Day surprise. I really didn't expect that would happen to Lisa.
Another great chapter!
2/13/2012 c32 Harry
Its good to see you back on the stories here Shane. Now, lets see how things play out with this assasination.
Its good to see you back on the stories here Shane. Now, lets see how things play out with this assasination.
2/13/2012 c32 Love it
Love it. :)
Love it. :)
1/17/2012 c31 
2Harry2.0
Sounds like a lul in the war that is going on. Now, lets see if negotiations take place or if the war starts up again.
2Harry2.0Sounds like a lul in the war that is going on. Now, lets see if negotiations take place or if the war starts up again.
9/7/2011 c31 35GothicPheonix
Aww, last chapter :( But, I finally, actually finished the story and reviewed (I think) for all the chapters. Also, you may want to change the 'a' to 'an' because it is front of 'odd' that starts with a vowel.
("I might," Jess admitted, "when I'm really drunk. It's a odd, embarrassing story and I don't like to talk about it.")
35GothicPheonixAww, last chapter :( But, I finally, actually finished the story and reviewed (I think) for all the chapters. Also, you may want to change the 'a' to 'an' because it is front of 'odd' that starts with a vowel.
("I might," Jess admitted, "when I'm really drunk. It's a odd, embarrassing story and I don't like to talk about it.")
9/7/2011 c30 GothicPheonix
Hunter being Hunter :) She reminds me of a flirty Haruka Tenoh (Sailor Uranus). And, wow, Hunter did a great job on revenge :)
Anyways, here I think you want to capitalize the 'come' in the sentence:
("come on, baby," the sandy haired woman purred into the ear of her partner, "just undo the vest.") And I think something may be missing in this sentence (I'll indicate where):
(As they_, Hunter deliberately maneuvered Catherine and Mary together, even as she turned up her succubus abilities.)
Hunter being Hunter :) She reminds me of a flirty Haruka Tenoh (Sailor Uranus). And, wow, Hunter did a great job on revenge :)
Anyways, here I think you want to capitalize the 'come' in the sentence:
("come on, baby," the sandy haired woman purred into the ear of her partner, "just undo the vest.") And I think something may be missing in this sentence (I'll indicate where):
(As they_, Hunter deliberately maneuvered Catherine and Mary together, even as she turned up her succubus abilities.)
9/7/2011 c29 GothicPheonix
You forgot an I in this sentence:
("And if_see you trying to hit anyone else in this area, I'll kill you.")
Those guys were idiots trying to attack Jess. People REALLY should do their research before trying to move in :)
You forgot an I in this sentence:
("And if_see you trying to hit anyone else in this area, I'll kill you.")
Those guys were idiots trying to attack Jess. People REALLY should do their research before trying to move in :)
9/7/2011 c28 GothicPheonix
I know you meant to say 'pants' here:
(She wore fancy dress pnts and somehow still presented a dignified image, even half undressed.)
And maybe you meant to say 'use'instead of it's past tense form:
("The paint I used dries quickly," she reassured her, "it's fine.")
I think you meant to say 'two' here instead of 'too', and 'degree' instead of 'drgree':
(Alice shook her head, laughing softly. "Yes, you too really are like boys," she said with a certain drgree of fondness.)
This was such a cute chapter, getting to see more with the couple. Aww! I love them together XD
I know you meant to say 'pants' here:
(She wore fancy dress pnts and somehow still presented a dignified image, even half undressed.)
And maybe you meant to say 'use'instead of it's past tense form:
("The paint I used dries quickly," she reassured her, "it's fine.")
I think you meant to say 'two' here instead of 'too', and 'degree' instead of 'drgree':
(Alice shook her head, laughing softly. "Yes, you too really are like boys," she said with a certain drgree of fondness.)
This was such a cute chapter, getting to see more with the couple. Aww! I love them together XD
9/7/2011 c27 GothicPheonix
Oh, yeah Jess, you *definitely* conquered. Probably won't let Alice know about this one. Anyways, here I think you meant to say 'do' instead of 'to':
(Chris guided Jess over to the kitchen table, then hurried to make up some coffee. "How to you take it?")
Oh, yeah Jess, you *definitely* conquered. Probably won't let Alice know about this one. Anyways, here I think you meant to say 'do' instead of 'to':
(Chris guided Jess over to the kitchen table, then hurried to make up some coffee. "How to you take it?")
9/7/2011 c26 GothicPheonix
Great chapter. Ghosts make an appearance :)
Anyways here, I think you mean to say 'for' instead of 'fort':
('In for a penny, in fort a pound' Jess mentally sighed.)
And here I think you meant to say 'off' instead of 'of':
("This is a load of my mind.")
Great chapter. Ghosts make an appearance :)
Anyways here, I think you mean to say 'for' instead of 'fort':
('In for a penny, in fort a pound' Jess mentally sighed.)
And here I think you meant to say 'off' instead of 'of':
("This is a load of my mind.")