
10/9/2016 c26
75AlysonSerenaStone
Great story! This is far different than anything I've ever read on fictionpress!

Great story! This is far different than anything I've ever read on fictionpress!
10/22/2005 c1 Hoshiko
This is honestly the best story I'v read in long time. If you don't mind I'm going to print this out and show all my friends. Winter is so mcuh like me it's amazing. Are you based off Winter? Becuase then you would be like me too? Wow! You should so get this thing published!
This is honestly the best story I'v read in long time. If you don't mind I'm going to print this out and show all my friends. Winter is so mcuh like me it's amazing. Are you based off Winter? Becuase then you would be like me too? Wow! You should so get this thing published!
5/31/2005 c26
21Aella88
I absolutely love it. Personally, I think that you should do a sequel of some sorts. Kyle and Winter definitely need to end up together. Maybe a sequel about All of their kids or something. I don't know. I just really loved this story, and I really liked the characters. I would love to know more about them. I will go back later and review the chapters individually, but as a whole, I love it.

I absolutely love it. Personally, I think that you should do a sequel of some sorts. Kyle and Winter definitely need to end up together. Maybe a sequel about All of their kids or something. I don't know. I just really loved this story, and I really liked the characters. I would love to know more about them. I will go back later and review the chapters individually, but as a whole, I love it.
5/31/2005 c1 Aella88
I really really wish that at this very moment I had time to read the whole story. If I could, I would. However, I am at school, alas. Knowing me, I will probably go home, copy and paste the whole thing into an incrediblt tiny font and print it out to read at my leisure over and over again. Plus, to show to any and every person who will listen to my ravings. It is the truth, I swear it. I have done it countless times already. Anyway, as for what I think of the prologue, it is great. It is really descriptive, which I love. That is something I do a lot in my own work. I try to make the reader see exactly what I am seeing in my mind as I write it with as vivid description as I can come up with. I happen to be a major fan of fantasy and supernatural things, so I love the necklace that he picks up. Also, I have a very bad habit of leaving off chapters in cliffhangers. Suspense does wonders for a story. This prologue has it with the final words about it being too late. *wheels turn in head* In fact, If I can manage it I am going to copy and paste the rest of it now and print it out on scratch paper. I can't wait until I get home to read it. Anyway, I will come back to review the other chapters, and if you like, you are free to check out my stories.
I really really wish that at this very moment I had time to read the whole story. If I could, I would. However, I am at school, alas. Knowing me, I will probably go home, copy and paste the whole thing into an incrediblt tiny font and print it out to read at my leisure over and over again. Plus, to show to any and every person who will listen to my ravings. It is the truth, I swear it. I have done it countless times already. Anyway, as for what I think of the prologue, it is great. It is really descriptive, which I love. That is something I do a lot in my own work. I try to make the reader see exactly what I am seeing in my mind as I write it with as vivid description as I can come up with. I happen to be a major fan of fantasy and supernatural things, so I love the necklace that he picks up. Also, I have a very bad habit of leaving off chapters in cliffhangers. Suspense does wonders for a story. This prologue has it with the final words about it being too late. *wheels turn in head* In fact, If I can manage it I am going to copy and paste the rest of it now and print it out on scratch paper. I can't wait until I get home to read it. Anyway, I will come back to review the other chapters, and if you like, you are free to check out my stories.
6/8/2004 c10
1Kinoki
i know you must have heard this already, but...GREAT STORY! i know, i'm dull. :D

i know you must have heard this already, but...GREAT STORY! i know, i'm dull. :D
6/2/2004 c21 Decollage
What?... Other than the jewlery, and the cave bit, it sounds nothing like LOTR...
What?... Other than the jewlery, and the cave bit, it sounds nothing like LOTR...
6/1/2004 c1 Decollage
*Nod* I reviewed this on Homefrys account, but I figured I should also review it here... It's really great. Instead of wasting time, yours and mine, reviewing every chapter I'll just review everything in this review... Yeah... I know that made no sense, but ANYWAY... It's very cool. And here I am (stupid me) realizing that there are more than the fourteen chapters I read on Homefrys account. Or is is Homefries? *Adds comma so it's possesstive) And now that you know that I'm an idiot, I'm off to read the rest of this wonderful work of art.
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Rock on, peace out, you rule.
*Nod* I reviewed this on Homefrys account, but I figured I should also review it here... It's really great. Instead of wasting time, yours and mine, reviewing every chapter I'll just review everything in this review... Yeah... I know that made no sense, but ANYWAY... It's very cool. And here I am (stupid me) realizing that there are more than the fourteen chapters I read on Homefrys account. Or is is Homefries? *Adds comma so it's possesstive) And now that you know that I'm an idiot, I'm off to read the rest of this wonderful work of art.
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Rock on, peace out, you rule.
12/12/2003 c26
8DeeEe
Umm... you need to say more about Millie. She sounds like she has just given birth too... I'm not sure how to fix it just that I confused me quite a bit.

Umm... you need to say more about Millie. She sounds like she has just given birth too... I'm not sure how to fix it just that I confused me quite a bit.
12/12/2003 c24 DeeEe
Poor Lani, I guess you can't stop fate. She probably was meant to die on her escape attempt but she died because of the necklace in a way.
Poor Lani, I guess you can't stop fate. She probably was meant to die on her escape attempt but she died because of the necklace in a way.
12/12/2003 c22 DeeEe
I think this is one of those not so intense parts of the story. Good, it gives me a chance to breath. Still I think I was confused with Eric's last sentence. You may want to clarify it or you already have in the next chapter...
I think this is one of those not so intense parts of the story. Good, it gives me a chance to breath. Still I think I was confused with Eric's last sentence. You may want to clarify it or you already have in the next chapter...
12/12/2003 c15 DeeEe
Kahiki will probably be key in this story because she can connect the necklace to Kyle. :) I'm not completely stupid. I hope I right or I'll feel real stupid.
Kahiki will probably be key in this story because she can connect the necklace to Kyle. :) I'm not completely stupid. I hope I right or I'll feel real stupid.