for Storm of Dreams8/14/2003 c8 
36MoonLitDemon
Wow, so this event didn't happen too long ago... Okay, so do the two girls, Winter and Kahiki go to the same school? You are doing an excellent job of tieing(sp?) everything together...
Megan
36MoonLitDemonWow, so this event didn't happen too long ago... Okay, so do the two girls, Winter and Kahiki go to the same school? You are doing an excellent job of tieing(sp?) everything together...
Megan
8/14/2003 c7 MoonLitDemon
I think I like Kyle the best.
He's so sweet and cute sounding... hehe.
Poor Kyle, left all alone... but why?
Megan
I think I like Kyle the best.
He's so sweet and cute sounding... hehe.
Poor Kyle, left all alone... but why?
Megan
8/14/2003 c6 MoonLitDemon
Poor Kyle. Turned violent, did he? I've always liked my ghosts, personally, so who knows? I think the cheerleader is lying about someone dying and getting sent to mental institutions... well, let's see what happens, shall we?
Megan
Poor Kyle. Turned violent, did he? I've always liked my ghosts, personally, so who knows? I think the cheerleader is lying about someone dying and getting sent to mental institutions... well, let's see what happens, shall we?
Megan
8/14/2003 c5 MoonLitDemon
I was not offended in the least. People are oversensitive. This kind of thing happens all of the time. Though sad, it's true. So, this all has to do with the necklace, I'm sure...
Megan
I was not offended in the least. People are oversensitive. This kind of thing happens all of the time. Though sad, it's true. So, this all has to do with the necklace, I'm sure...
Megan
8/14/2003 c4 MoonLitDemon
As I have said, she is just like the average teenager, with problems adjusting to a new school... I didn't expect her to go skinnydipping though. I wouldn't change it however, it just seemed kind of odd. Who is watching, I wonder...
Megan
As I have said, she is just like the average teenager, with problems adjusting to a new school... I didn't expect her to go skinnydipping though. I wouldn't change it however, it just seemed kind of odd. Who is watching, I wonder...
Megan
8/14/2003 c3 MoonLitDemon
Poor Tinker. He sounds cute. I like him. I feel bad for him, his girlfriend broke up with him on their Anniversary for God's sake! Well, anyway, the necklace falls into different hands...
Megan
Poor Tinker. He sounds cute. I like him. I feel bad for him, his girlfriend broke up with him on their Anniversary for God's sake! Well, anyway, the necklace falls into different hands...
Megan
8/14/2003 c15 12TheWoozler
I like the storyline of this chapter, but I didn't think it moved very smoothly in my opinion. The text was choppy and cut short. I think it should be drawn out more... his real name's Jordan? ^.^ *chibi laugh*
12TheWoozlerI like the storyline of this chapter, but I didn't think it moved very smoothly in my opinion. The text was choppy and cut short. I think it should be drawn out more... his real name's Jordan? ^.^ *chibi laugh*
8/14/2003 c2 36MoonLitDemon
Winter seems like your normal teenager, or in my eyes she is. Antisocial, filled with curiosity, and dreading school. The Victorian House sounds intriguing... Especially the graves, because my last name is on them.
Hehe.
Megan
36MoonLitDemonWinter seems like your normal teenager, or in my eyes she is. Antisocial, filled with curiosity, and dreading school. The Victorian House sounds intriguing... Especially the graves, because my last name is on them.
Hehe.
Megan
8/14/2003 c1 36MoonLitDemon
Very interesting so far. Nice foreshadowing... I like foreshadowing in a story, although I tend to not use it myself. Very nice. There is definitely some sibling love there. Which is refreshing, they don't hate each other or rival each other.
On to the next chapter...
Megan
36MoonLitDemonVery interesting so far. Nice foreshadowing... I like foreshadowing in a story, although I tend to not use it myself. Very nice. There is definitely some sibling love there. Which is refreshing, they don't hate each other or rival each other.
On to the next chapter...
Megan
8/13/2003 c1 3theangryfeminist
While I wait for an update on The Dragon's Scale, I decided to start reading something else.
I really like the way you began it, your description of the cavern, and the drip. Reminds me of the beginning of the Cell Block Tango, and you'd know why if you've seen Chicago.
The description is very vivid. I can really see all of Kyle's surroundings. I don't have a clear image of him yet, but it's only the beginning, so I'm sure there'll be more of him later. Unless I'm wrong.
And the ending to the prologue is nice and ominous. I'll have to come back to read more as soon as I have time.
3theangryfeministWhile I wait for an update on The Dragon's Scale, I decided to start reading something else.
I really like the way you began it, your description of the cavern, and the drip. Reminds me of the beginning of the Cell Block Tango, and you'd know why if you've seen Chicago.
The description is very vivid. I can really see all of Kyle's surroundings. I don't have a clear image of him yet, but it's only the beginning, so I'm sure there'll be more of him later. Unless I'm wrong.
And the ending to the prologue is nice and ominous. I'll have to come back to read more as soon as I have time.
8/12/2003 c9 Aeitul
Yeesh, I completely forgot to put it in my review for chapter 14! Thanks for the email explaining the Kahiki and Lani thing. I really appreciated it!
Yeesh, I completely forgot to put it in my review for chapter 14! Thanks for the email explaining the Kahiki and Lani thing. I really appreciated it!
8/12/2003 c14 Aeitul
Evil! You're evil! Leaving off right there. Grr... If you don't update soon, I'll... I'll... I don't know what I'll do. But it won't be pleasant!
Anyway, um, I'm confused. Very confused. I'm not even going to try to consider the possibilities. It was sweet, though, of Kyle to help her.
One little thing: in the third paragraph, you used "passed" instead of "past." Here's part of the sentence: "...headed passed the house..." An easy mistake to make (that rhymed!) and an easy mistake to fix.
Evil! You're evil! Leaving off right there. Grr... If you don't update soon, I'll... I'll... I don't know what I'll do. But it won't be pleasant!
Anyway, um, I'm confused. Very confused. I'm not even going to try to consider the possibilities. It was sweet, though, of Kyle to help her.
One little thing: in the third paragraph, you used "passed" instead of "past." Here's part of the sentence: "...headed passed the house..." An easy mistake to make (that rhymed!) and an easy mistake to fix.
8/12/2003 c14 The Winged Reaper
Damn your evil. You leave the story right when it starts to get interesting. You two work great together, this story is amazing.
Damn your evil. You leave the story right when it starts to get interesting. You two work great together, this story is amazing.
8/12/2003 c13 The Winged Reaper
Sorry it took so long for me to review but I have been busy. This story is so...captivating. I love it.
Sorry it took so long for me to review but I have been busy. This story is so...captivating. I love it.