for Storm of Dreams7/17/2003 c6 Amaya
Ireally liked what you have so far of your story. The one thing that I hate about reading stories on-line is that the good ones are never finished. Hmph! Ihonestley don't blame you if it takes a while to finish your story, I haven't worked on mine in days and even if I wrote down all of my ideas there were still be so much that you could do:)
Anyways I just wanted to tell you to keep up the good work and plead with you to hurry up, the suspence is killing me.
Bye!
Ireally liked what you have so far of your story. The one thing that I hate about reading stories on-line is that the good ones are never finished. Hmph! Ihonestley don't blame you if it takes a while to finish your story, I haven't worked on mine in days and even if I wrote down all of my ideas there were still be so much that you could do:)
Anyways I just wanted to tell you to keep up the good work and plead with you to hurry up, the suspence is killing me.
Bye!
7/17/2003 c1 
6grenstar
I hope to see this story devolpe quickly. It seems he licks his lips a lot...not that it's bad, but I find it kind of funny. I could image him licking his lips, which to me, looked funny.
How does this necklace effect him in the long run? I hope that soon you explain the origin of the necklace and how the three people are tied to it. I'm just guessing, but is the girl who you mentioned in your description of the story the boy's sister?
Keep up the good work!
6grenstarI hope to see this story devolpe quickly. It seems he licks his lips a lot...not that it's bad, but I find it kind of funny. I could image him licking his lips, which to me, looked funny.
How does this necklace effect him in the long run? I hope that soon you explain the origin of the necklace and how the three people are tied to it. I'm just guessing, but is the girl who you mentioned in your description of the story the boy's sister?
Keep up the good work!
7/16/2003 c5 2FalconoftheWind
The greatest stories are those that stick true to life, without many words to soften the expressions. (You can quote me on that.)
You did a great job, and it looks like a concious effort not to use pronouns so much! Keep the chapters coming!
=Any way the wind blows=
2FalconoftheWindThe greatest stories are those that stick true to life, without many words to soften the expressions. (You can quote me on that.)
You did a great job, and it looks like a concious effort not to use pronouns so much! Keep the chapters coming!
=Any way the wind blows=
7/16/2003 c5 Aeitul
Another good chapter! More mystery and more stuff to think about. I think that there's a good possibility that Tinker experienced whatever it was that he experienced because of the necklace. I wonder, though, if the little girl is somehow related to the necklace. I guess I won't find out until you write more!
I'm guessing that the two of you have this whole thing, or at least a fair portion of it, written out already, judging by your quick updates. Either that or your very fast workers.
Another good chapter! More mystery and more stuff to think about. I think that there's a good possibility that Tinker experienced whatever it was that he experienced because of the necklace. I wonder, though, if the little girl is somehow related to the necklace. I guess I won't find out until you write more!
I'm guessing that the two of you have this whole thing, or at least a fair portion of it, written out already, judging by your quick updates. Either that or your very fast workers.
7/16/2003 c5 7Flamehail
Oh, so now we have a glimpse of what's going on with Tinker! Awesome! I can't think of any criticism, so I'll just go back to
Waiting impatiently,
Katie
7FlamehailOh, so now we have a glimpse of what's going on with Tinker! Awesome! I can't think of any criticism, so I'll just go back to
Waiting impatiently,
Katie
7/16/2003 c5 13Vitamin Kitten
That's really good. That thing about the blood on his pants gave me goosebumps. Very interesting so far. And the poor little girl. She's so cute! I wanna take her home and keep her forever and tell her how much I love her. ^_^ However, this is all just fiction, so, I don't see that happening.
Anyway, keep up the good work. And thanks for reviewing my story. ^_~
13Vitamin KittenThat's really good. That thing about the blood on his pants gave me goosebumps. Very interesting so far. And the poor little girl. She's so cute! I wanna take her home and keep her forever and tell her how much I love her. ^_^ However, this is all just fiction, so, I don't see that happening.
Anyway, keep up the good work. And thanks for reviewing my story. ^_~
7/16/2003 c5 Katie Kay
Oh My God! You have got to right more! I loved it..I was so into it that while I was reading, everytime I heard a noise, I jumped!
Oh My God! You have got to right more! I loved it..I was so into it that while I was reading, everytime I heard a noise, I jumped!
7/16/2003 c4 14DigiDayDreamer
The plot thickens.
Oh, Winter is definitely something. It makes me wish I could be as bold as her. Anyway, you came back to Winter! But hmm, what about Kyle? Will he come later? Oh well, I guess. The next chapter's probably about Tinker anyway.
You probably noticed, but Winter and Tinker have similar names. In the third chapter, I thought Tinker was the owner. But now I understood. Hmm, skinnydipping. You forgot to put the nudity sign.O_O But the chapter's still good. It's get darker the more I read it. *Suddenly everything goes black* Hey, I didn't mean that dark! *Lights turn out again* There, much better!
Anyway, I'll keep reading if you keep writing!
Spell ya later!
14DigiDayDreamerThe plot thickens.
Oh, Winter is definitely something. It makes me wish I could be as bold as her. Anyway, you came back to Winter! But hmm, what about Kyle? Will he come later? Oh well, I guess. The next chapter's probably about Tinker anyway.
You probably noticed, but Winter and Tinker have similar names. In the third chapter, I thought Tinker was the owner. But now I understood. Hmm, skinnydipping. You forgot to put the nudity sign.O_O But the chapter's still good. It's get darker the more I read it. *Suddenly everything goes black* Hey, I didn't mean that dark! *Lights turn out again* There, much better!
Anyway, I'll keep reading if you keep writing!
Spell ya later!
7/16/2003 c3 DigiDayDreamer
Eh, things are starting to get a little more interesting. . .
So now Tinker has the necklace? What happened to Kyle? And Winter? Maybe that spooky house and the light blue necklace could be connected somehow.
Okay, it confuses me to why boys would want to wear necklaces now. I wore a necklace one too many times and all I get is an itchy neck. ~_~
Well, I wonder what's going to happen next. You better not be bouncing to a completely new topic! I'll get confused if you do that.
Anyway, until then. . .
Spell ya later!~Daiger
Eh, things are starting to get a little more interesting. . .
So now Tinker has the necklace? What happened to Kyle? And Winter? Maybe that spooky house and the light blue necklace could be connected somehow.
Okay, it confuses me to why boys would want to wear necklaces now. I wore a necklace one too many times and all I get is an itchy neck. ~_~
Well, I wonder what's going to happen next. You better not be bouncing to a completely new topic! I'll get confused if you do that.
Anyway, until then. . .
Spell ya later!~Daiger
7/16/2003 c2 DigiDayDreamer
Yeah, Winter! Huh, what happened to Kyle? Hmm, anyway.
It's great. You know I feel the same way too. I'm a bit of a loner myself.
Grr, I dislike those boys. They act very much like those bullies in real life. But they got what they deserved. Wish Winter could kick all of them instead of just one.^_^
Hmm, Winter seems to be important now that she heard that voice, though the voice wasn't very dramatic. Oh well. I gotta know what will happen next!
Spell ya later!~Daiger
Yeah, Winter! Huh, what happened to Kyle? Hmm, anyway.
It's great. You know I feel the same way too. I'm a bit of a loner myself.
Grr, I dislike those boys. They act very much like those bullies in real life. But they got what they deserved. Wish Winter could kick all of them instead of just one.^_^
Hmm, Winter seems to be important now that she heard that voice, though the voice wasn't very dramatic. Oh well. I gotta know what will happen next!
Spell ya later!~Daiger
7/16/2003 c1 DigiDayDreamer
M, a nice start. I think this is a great hook to a possibly great story. Even though I've begun to read, I hope the next chapters are just as great as this.
But why does Kyle keep licking his lips? Were they dry or something? Well, he's a great character so far, even though the only thing I know about him is that he cares about his sister very much and that he's 14 years old.
Is it true you will review my story? Wow! If so please review "The Unwavering Desire". I would appreciate very much if you do.
Well, gotta read more of those chapters!
Spell ya later!~Daiger
M, a nice start. I think this is a great hook to a possibly great story. Even though I've begun to read, I hope the next chapters are just as great as this.
But why does Kyle keep licking his lips? Were they dry or something? Well, he's a great character so far, even though the only thing I know about him is that he cares about his sister very much and that he's 14 years old.
Is it true you will review my story? Wow! If so please review "The Unwavering Desire". I would appreciate very much if you do.
Well, gotta read more of those chapters!
Spell ya later!~Daiger
7/16/2003 c3 suslin
he put on the necklace? but why...
he put on the necklace? but why...
7/16/2003 c2 suslin
geez, winter, aren't we rude? tch tch.
hmm, well i guess she has a reason. kick em, i say. yes, yes! kick 'em.
hmm. the fact that there's dead grass and the house should have clued her in. nothing's that interesting
geez, winter, aren't we rude? tch tch.
hmm, well i guess she has a reason. kick em, i say. yes, yes! kick 'em.
hmm. the fact that there's dead grass and the house should have clued her in. nothing's that interesting