for Storm of Dreams8/25/2003 c18 
87Romantic Squirrel
O.K great story. Hay it must be great to have so many reviews right. No really I like the story, great job.
87Romantic SquirrelO.K great story. Hay it must be great to have so many reviews right. No really I like the story, great job.
8/25/2003 c18 Allegretto
Yay! The promise of more updating!
And the explanation of Eric. Kinda a let-down. But IS it? Hmm, gotta think carefully... And have we met this Millie before? Oh, I'm interesting to see how this will all end up...
Yay! The promise of more updating!
And the explanation of Eric. Kinda a let-down. But IS it? Hmm, gotta think carefully... And have we met this Millie before? Oh, I'm interesting to see how this will all end up...
8/25/2003 c18 14Storysmith
Two reviews in one day! Yay! ANywhosies. Very good babbling from Kahiki. Though, you're right, this part seems utterly pointless. I'm sure it will all come together! WEll, I said all I really had to say in the last review, so Ta!
14StorysmithTwo reviews in one day! Yay! ANywhosies. Very good babbling from Kahiki. Though, you're right, this part seems utterly pointless. I'm sure it will all come together! WEll, I said all I really had to say in the last review, so Ta!
8/25/2003 c17 Storysmith
This is good so far, but can I make a sugestion that would just add something to make the storms also be unusual and bad. Maybe, extensive floding and some people forced out of their homes, etc. Just a thought. Good chapter, though i like demented Kyle better. Oh well. Nice Kyle is cool too! Keep it up!
This is good so far, but can I make a sugestion that would just add something to make the storms also be unusual and bad. Maybe, extensive floding and some people forced out of their homes, etc. Just a thought. Good chapter, though i like demented Kyle better. Oh well. Nice Kyle is cool too! Keep it up!
8/25/2003 c1 SoulessFreedom too lazy to sign in
**Sorry, i was asking if you would put any romance in it and it came out wrong
:/
This story ir really captivating and you update really fast! (...sometimes...) I hope something happens btwn Kyle and yeah... lolz
-Souless
**Sorry, i was asking if you would put any romance in it and it came out wrong
:/
This story ir really captivating and you update really fast! (...sometimes...) I hope something happens btwn Kyle and yeah... lolz
-Souless
8/25/2003 c18 SoulessFreedom too lazy to sign in
E short chapter...but thats ok :)
Is this going to have romnce in it?
PLEASE!
-Souless
E short chapter...but thats ok :)
Is this going to have romnce in it?
PLEASE!
-Souless
8/24/2003 c17 Aeitul
Finally! Finally you've revealed stuff! I know there's probably a lot more, but I'm glad that we've finally learned a few things about that bad, bad necklace.
You know, that situation is a little bizarre. Winter is friends with Kyle. Kyle is dead. A friendship between the living and the dead. Except for with Casper the friendly ghost, I don't think that sort of thing happens very often in literature, movies, TV, etc...
I think the oddest part, however was that Winter was glad to be talk to a ghost. She's one strange girl. I still like her, though.
Is it just me or did Kyle sound like a bit of an airhead in this chapter? Please don't be offended by that-I don't mean it as an insult or even as criticism. Then again, he was fourteen when he died, wasn't he? No offense to any fourteen-year-olds.
I'm looking forward to more exposition about the necklace!
Finally! Finally you've revealed stuff! I know there's probably a lot more, but I'm glad that we've finally learned a few things about that bad, bad necklace.
You know, that situation is a little bizarre. Winter is friends with Kyle. Kyle is dead. A friendship between the living and the dead. Except for with Casper the friendly ghost, I don't think that sort of thing happens very often in literature, movies, TV, etc...
I think the oddest part, however was that Winter was glad to be talk to a ghost. She's one strange girl. I still like her, though.
Is it just me or did Kyle sound like a bit of an airhead in this chapter? Please don't be offended by that-I don't mean it as an insult or even as criticism. Then again, he was fourteen when he died, wasn't he? No offense to any fourteen-year-olds.
I'm looking forward to more exposition about the necklace!
8/23/2003 c17 Amaya
I like this story I'm so glad that you updated this is getting really good. Bye-bye:p
I like this story I'm so glad that you updated this is getting really good. Bye-bye:p
8/23/2003 c17 Amaya
I like this story I'm so glad that you updated this is getting really good. Bye-bye:p
I like this story I'm so glad that you updated this is getting really good. Bye-bye:p
8/23/2003 c17 38Fate Thirteen
Oh, sure, just stop right there when you're getting to the good stuff.
I love this story. It scares me witless, but I love it.
Update soon, please!
Fate 13
38Fate ThirteenOh, sure, just stop right there when you're getting to the good stuff.
I love this story. It scares me witless, but I love it.
Update soon, please!
Fate 13
8/23/2003 c16 Fate Thirteen
Woah, wait a minute...
Lani's dad told her she couldn't do anything right. There is definitely something fishy going on.
Please explain soon!
Woah, wait a minute...
Lani's dad told her she couldn't do anything right. There is definitely something fishy going on.
Please explain soon!
8/23/2003 c15 Fate Thirteen
VERY BAD NECKLACE!
Very scared, now.
I wasn't entirely convinced by the midnight exchange - some of the conversation seemed a bit contrived, but for the most part it was good. I felt a bit cheated on reasons why Kahiki was so attracted to him, other than looks - I'd have liked a little more detail about his effect on her.
Next chapter, stop rambling...
VERY BAD NECKLACE!
Very scared, now.
I wasn't entirely convinced by the midnight exchange - some of the conversation seemed a bit contrived, but for the most part it was good. I felt a bit cheated on reasons why Kahiki was so attracted to him, other than looks - I'd have liked a little more detail about his effect on her.
Next chapter, stop rambling...
8/23/2003 c13 Fate Thirteen
OH MY GOD, I've just realised - Kahiki's name... KahikiLANI. That's got to be part of why Lani's so important. Whoa, is Tinker going to sort of repeat what happened with Kyle and Kahiki...?
This necklace is BAD!
OH MY GOD, I've just realised - Kahiki's name... KahikiLANI. That's got to be part of why Lani's so important. Whoa, is Tinker going to sort of repeat what happened with Kyle and Kahiki...?
This necklace is BAD!
8/23/2003 c12 Fate Thirteen
*screams and hides* Again, enough with the scaring me!
Why did Winter lie about seeing the ghost? I didn't get that.
And I didn't think the last sentence was needed - it was as if you were just repeating everything to make sure people knew what was going on.
OK, I'm going to keep reading... carefully.
*screams and hides* Again, enough with the scaring me!
Why did Winter lie about seeing the ghost? I didn't get that.
And I didn't think the last sentence was needed - it was as if you were just repeating everything to make sure people knew what was going on.
OK, I'm going to keep reading... carefully.
8/23/2003 c11 Fate Thirteen
*jumps a mile in the air* Oh my god, he's going to kill her...
This story is SCARING me.
One little criticism about this chapter was that I thought you might have overused Winter's name. For the most part, she's the only person in the scene, so it's not necessary to keep naming her. We'll manage with pronouns!
But that's all I can find. Otherwise it's excellent *sighs* as usual.
*jumps a mile in the air* Oh my god, he's going to kill her...
This story is SCARING me.
One little criticism about this chapter was that I thought you might have overused Winter's name. For the most part, she's the only person in the scene, so it's not necessary to keep naming her. We'll manage with pronouns!
But that's all I can find. Otherwise it's excellent *sighs* as usual.