for The girly next door10/4/2003 c1 
5Corvis
Wow. How sad. I understand how you feel (or the feeling you were trying to convey, and trust me, you succeeded). Very nice. I especially liked the line "Your voice sounds so hollow" I have one friend in particular I can relate this to. Once again, great job!
5CorvisWow. How sad. I understand how you feel (or the feeling you were trying to convey, and trust me, you succeeded). Very nice. I especially liked the line "Your voice sounds so hollow" I have one friend in particular I can relate this to. Once again, great job!
7/15/2003 c1 142youguessedit
Wow. I really like the way that used the childishly stated title as a contrast to the poem. So much poetry is written to shock or reduce the reader to tears and totally fail simply because it was written with that intention in mind. This poem, on the other hand, makes the reader simply fall apart because of the roughness of the narrator and how harshly this past relationship has broken. Keep up writing like this!
142youguesseditWow. I really like the way that used the childishly stated title as a contrast to the poem. So much poetry is written to shock or reduce the reader to tears and totally fail simply because it was written with that intention in mind. This poem, on the other hand, makes the reader simply fall apart because of the roughness of the narrator and how harshly this past relationship has broken. Keep up writing like this!