for pretty6/23/2004 c1 
70this is britt
The simplicity and starkness of it- really made it that tangible, that more heartfelt. I can relate- I want to be perfect too but am far from it.
70this is brittThe simplicity and starkness of it- really made it that tangible, that more heartfelt. I can relate- I want to be perfect too but am far from it.
1/4/2004 c1 28frugale
That's definitively awesome. Have I read anything like this? The poem is so powerful- underneath. Because you managed to carry on those briliant images with average words.
28frugaleThat's definitively awesome. Have I read anything like this? The poem is so powerful- underneath. Because you managed to carry on those briliant images with average words.
1/4/2004 c1 6Tatterdemalion
Brilliant work.
The words are so big (eg 'make me... beautiful special' etc) yet the content and structure feels so empty and sad; it's a very poignant contrast.
The yearning in this is so strong, honestly, reading this was amazing. The writing is so delicate and sparse, but elegant and specific... When I got to the line 'something tangible' I was really very moved.
Aw. Don't you just love our society? (And also THANK YOU for writing this, it's incredible and I cannot say that enough.)
6TatterdemalionBrilliant work.
The words are so big (eg 'make me... beautiful special' etc) yet the content and structure feels so empty and sad; it's a very poignant contrast.
The yearning in this is so strong, honestly, reading this was amazing. The writing is so delicate and sparse, but elegant and specific... When I got to the line 'something tangible' I was really very moved.
Aw. Don't you just love our society? (And also THANK YOU for writing this, it's incredible and I cannot say that enough.)
1/2/2004 c1 MissChamomile
Pretty! That doesn't capture it. It's perfect. You have a way with words that I really want. How DO you do it, Merc?
Pretty! That doesn't capture it. It's perfect. You have a way with words that I really want. How DO you do it, Merc?
12/8/2003 c1 127godawful teen-angst poetry
It's such a sad, unnattainable, true wish-brilliant. I've only ever read your stuff on ff.n (namely bible section); I was pleasantly surprised to find you here! This is different than what other stuff you've written; but hte tone, and the phrasing, fit the subject and the speaker perfectly. Brilliant.
~lyv
127godawful teen-angst poetryIt's such a sad, unnattainable, true wish-brilliant. I've only ever read your stuff on ff.n (namely bible section); I was pleasantly surprised to find you here! This is different than what other stuff you've written; but hte tone, and the phrasing, fit the subject and the speaker perfectly. Brilliant.
~lyv
9/23/2003 c1 willetts
clap clap clap, havent checked u out for a while, but damn, wish i had.
.w.
clap clap clap, havent checked u out for a while, but damn, wish i had.
.w.
8/31/2003 c1 Serenity
Oh . . . my . . . God. This is f*ing great! It's so perfect. It reminds me of something I as talking to Justin about yesterday . . . anyway I love it!
-Serenity
Oh . . . my . . . God. This is f*ing great! It's so perfect. It reminds me of something I as talking to Justin about yesterday . . . anyway I love it!
-Serenity
8/28/2003 c1 54Werecat99
I liked this. It's sad, but it's strangely beautiful at the same time. And I definitely loved the last two lines.
54Werecat99I liked this. It's sad, but it's strangely beautiful at the same time. And I definitely loved the last two lines.
7/26/2003 c1 Tafadhali
Ok, you got annoyed at the fact that I didn't review, so I WILL.
Although this theme is quite common, I think that you spoke about it in a unique and lyrical way. In fact, you inspired me to draw something, but I was lacking in motivation to go to CVS and buy makeup, and also thought that I couldn't think of an original enough way to do the drawing. So I did something on Procrustes' bed, instead, which is o a similar theme of fitting in and societal molds. Though it's considerably more violent than mannequins. Which is, of course, probably one of the reasons that it's one of my favorite myths and subjects of drawing. I'm quite pleased with my picture...Um, this has ceased to have anything to do with your poem, so I'll shut up now.
Good job!
Cheers!
Ok, you got annoyed at the fact that I didn't review, so I WILL.
Although this theme is quite common, I think that you spoke about it in a unique and lyrical way. In fact, you inspired me to draw something, but I was lacking in motivation to go to CVS and buy makeup, and also thought that I couldn't think of an original enough way to do the drawing. So I did something on Procrustes' bed, instead, which is o a similar theme of fitting in and societal molds. Though it's considerably more violent than mannequins. Which is, of course, probably one of the reasons that it's one of my favorite myths and subjects of drawing. I'm quite pleased with my picture...Um, this has ceased to have anything to do with your poem, so I'll shut up now.
Good job!
Cheers!
7/19/2003 c1 2Chirleep
I am no good at reviews...
Here goes.
Isn't it the sort of thing that everyone wants? To be "beautiful special" (a combination of words I particularly liked) and dainty, delicate, like a china tea cup? I know I sometimes wish for that. But with these Eastern European genes? Pah, not a chance.
I'm not bitter, no, not bitter in the least... ^_^;;
Anyways, I liked the understated phrasing of the poem. It tells how shallow and petty and flat the wish is, but still makes it seem incredibly sad.
Oh, now you've gone and inspired me...
=slaps herself= bad Claire, no biscuit! Bad! Bad! Must not give in to plotbunny. Must not give in. Must...not...give...in...
All right, all right, I'm giving in...
Hehe.
-Chirleep
PS: =has no AIM= Sorry...
2ChirleepI am no good at reviews...
Here goes.
Isn't it the sort of thing that everyone wants? To be "beautiful special" (a combination of words I particularly liked) and dainty, delicate, like a china tea cup? I know I sometimes wish for that. But with these Eastern European genes? Pah, not a chance.
I'm not bitter, no, not bitter in the least... ^_^;;
Anyways, I liked the understated phrasing of the poem. It tells how shallow and petty and flat the wish is, but still makes it seem incredibly sad.
Oh, now you've gone and inspired me...
=slaps herself= bad Claire, no biscuit! Bad! Bad! Must not give in to plotbunny. Must not give in. Must...not...give...in...
All right, all right, I'm giving in...
Hehe.
-Chirleep
PS: =has no AIM= Sorry...
7/17/2003 c1 4drama-nerd016
Very interesting...and so completely true! I hate that society does this, but I love that you wrote a poem about it!
4drama-nerd016Very interesting...and so completely true! I hate that society does this, but I love that you wrote a poem about it!
7/17/2003 c1 Thalia Weaver
*beautiful*. spectacular. amazing. wonderful.
*praises to the skies*
This rocked, Merc. Really rocked. It's more powerful for the sparseness of the words...you really struck a chord here. Fantastic job.
*beautiful*. spectacular. amazing. wonderful.
*praises to the skies*
This rocked, Merc. Really rocked. It's more powerful for the sparseness of the words...you really struck a chord here. Fantastic job.
7/17/2003 c1 39zelle
i...i mean, you-wow.
Heh. Articulate, ain't i? ^_-
This is so true...and I am in awe...and I can relate (oh dear...the PHASES I went through)...
this is SO joining my favorites list!
39zellei...i mean, you-wow.
Heh. Articulate, ain't i? ^_-
This is so true...and I am in awe...and I can relate (oh dear...the PHASES I went through)...
this is SO joining my favorites list!
7/17/2003 c1 60Angels Rebellion
Aww...thats not entirely true...physical beauty ain't everything and usually makeup doesn't do alot to improve it anyway...;p
I like the poem itself though, nice imagery.
Shadow
60Angels RebellionAww...thats not entirely true...physical beauty ain't everything and usually makeup doesn't do alot to improve it anyway...;p
I like the poem itself though, nice imagery.
Shadow