for A Proxy Marriage4/22/2007 c20 dsd
hey u gonna update netym soon?
hey u gonna update netym soon?
4/17/2007 c20 
9Stahlut
ooh I like this story I haven't read one like it before. it's interesting and I am so into it so please keep it coming.
9Stahlutooh I like this story I haven't read one like it before. it's interesting and I am so into it so please keep it coming.
10/30/2005 c20 136LilLaTLuv
Hey!
Okay, this story is cool! But I wanna know when will they realize what's right in front of them, and take what they've been given. I mean, sheesh, they were practically handed to each other on a silver platter. Now, you haven't explained the REASON for the proxy marriage! GET TO IT! PLEASE? UPDATE SOON! DOUBLY PLEASE?
Luv ya,Tashi :)
136LilLaTLuvHey!
Okay, this story is cool! But I wanna know when will they realize what's right in front of them, and take what they've been given. I mean, sheesh, they were practically handed to each other on a silver platter. Now, you haven't explained the REASON for the proxy marriage! GET TO IT! PLEASE? UPDATE SOON! DOUBLY PLEASE?
Luv ya,Tashi :)
9/28/2005 c20 10Hell's first Icicle
=D BIG goofy cliche alert! =D i love it. =D all i can do is smile this really goofy smile after reading. =D aw =D luke and tanya =D how utterly predictable, and aw so sweet =D
10Hell's first Icicle=D BIG goofy cliche alert! =D i love it. =D all i can do is smile this really goofy smile after reading. =D aw =D luke and tanya =D how utterly predictable, and aw so sweet =D
4/4/2005 c18 2city-gal7
god! i really hate Jeff. I'm glad that Brett finally punched him! he deserved it. And calling Sera a whore? ha! yeah right! please update soon
2city-gal7god! i really hate Jeff. I'm glad that Brett finally punched him! he deserved it. And calling Sera a whore? ha! yeah right! please update soon
3/29/2005 c18 jamaica is where the heart is
no. its not like a soap opera
no. its not like a soap opera
2/24/2005 c20 city-gal7
are you a lakers fan too? i love them!...lst year! they are so sucking badly this year that i'm really no longer a fan of theirs. but about ur story, good chapter. I find it funny when sera said 'shit, what's wrong with you'. that was funny! i really hope you update soon
are you a lakers fan too? i love them!...lst year! they are so sucking badly this year that i'm really no longer a fan of theirs. but about ur story, good chapter. I find it funny when sera said 'shit, what's wrong with you'. that was funny! i really hope you update soon
2/5/2005 c20 40Moosher
Ooh, meh like it alot! Im glad theyve finally managed to be civil towards eachother! Finally! Brett sounds really sweet, although he's obviously clueless on how the female mind works..heh..yeah..So, Great story..update soon!plz? =DTake care
40MoosherOoh, meh like it alot! Im glad theyve finally managed to be civil towards eachother! Finally! Brett sounds really sweet, although he's obviously clueless on how the female mind works..heh..yeah..So, Great story..update soon!plz? =DTake care
1/28/2005 c20 CoOkIe MoNsTeR
where the fuck have you been? i know..bad words, cursing blah blah blah...but still! why haven't u update ur story? if i had ur email, id be whining to u right now u know! update this okay? please ?
where the fuck have you been? i know..bad words, cursing blah blah blah...but still! why haven't u update ur story? if i had ur email, id be whining to u right now u know! update this okay? please ?
1/21/2005 c20 teletubbies
i'm ur newest fan for this story...and..WHERE THE HELL ARE YOU GIRL? i love this story..though i just found it..who cares? i find Brett so cute and Sera's lucky to have him! please update soon...ur silent reviwer!
i'm ur newest fan for this story...and..WHERE THE HELL ARE YOU GIRL? i love this story..though i just found it..who cares? i find Brett so cute and Sera's lucky to have him! please update soon...ur silent reviwer!
1/21/2005 c20 4fazzingaway
hey, just read through your story and thought i'd drop you a comment. i think you've got a really cute idea here and i think its cool that you did all your research and stuff about the marriage contract (and i'm a law student so i was pretty darn impressed at your accuracy). the only issue i had with your story was that i thought the characters seemed a little immature for their age. i mean, a 23-yr-old sera sticking her tongue out at jack and then having a pyjama party with her girlfriends could have worked well but you kinda made it sound like they were 13 rather than 23. so i think you kinda need to think about that a little more and imagine how a real 23-yr-old would behave. otherwise, your descriptions were great and i love brett! i hope i didn't offend you and gave you something constructive to work with :) update soon!
4fazzingawayhey, just read through your story and thought i'd drop you a comment. i think you've got a really cute idea here and i think its cool that you did all your research and stuff about the marriage contract (and i'm a law student so i was pretty darn impressed at your accuracy). the only issue i had with your story was that i thought the characters seemed a little immature for their age. i mean, a 23-yr-old sera sticking her tongue out at jack and then having a pyjama party with her girlfriends could have worked well but you kinda made it sound like they were 13 rather than 23. so i think you kinda need to think about that a little more and imagine how a real 23-yr-old would behave. otherwise, your descriptions were great and i love brett! i hope i didn't offend you and gave you something constructive to work with :) update soon!