7/20/2005 c6 Guest
that was fast..

3/18/2005 c30 2BKGal-24
Congrats! You finished! I have to admit I'm over a month late in reviewing because I gave up checking for updates! Sorry...but it was a sweet ending even though I forgot what had happened earlier! lol. I'll had to go back and skim to prepare myself for the sequel!

2/18/2005 c1 3joeysmommy
wow this is a great story so far! i got to keep reading!

2/11/2005 c30 Star-Kid
Good story! I couldn't wait to finish it, so I kept reading...and reading...and reading...and reading...and reading...you get the point. And FINALLY I finished it!Hurry and write the sequel! Wonder what's it about...

2/10/2005 c1 3Queen Of Laughs
just found your story and by the first chapter i can tell im going to like it. Omg this chapter was so sad... im crying... Poor Cha... will have to continue to read and find out what happens to her!

2/8/2005 c30 ItalianQT
Great story! I was so happy that they finally got married! I'll check out the sequel too! : )

2/7/2005 c30 Die Hard
I can tell you have potential as a writer, but there are a lot of things you should work on. Something that really stood out to me throughout the story (though really quite minor) is that you spell 'thank you' as 'thankyou.' It really should be two words. But anyway, like I said, that's not very important.Another thing I would suggest is researching background information for your story. A major thing about historical fiction is accuracy. Without that, the story losses some of its believabilty. The reason I'm pointing this out is your references to sex and morals. Although it's true that religion was taken seriously in the time period that you're trying to portray, most disregarded the Church's advisings on 'sins of the flesh.' The only people who would actually remain virgins until marriage were the daughters of nobles or well-to-do families. Servants, peasants and aristocratic men often did enjoy carnal pleasures outside of wedlock and, though such going-ons were common knowledge, it was rarely considered scandolous except to particularly pious clergy.A third pointer I would like to give you is to work on your plot. It's fine to have a few minor things happening within the overall story, but it's my opinion that this story may have had a few too many. You kept having climax after climax after climax and then you ended it in a manor that many would call abrupt. A good story should have one main plot line, with one main climax and a smooth conclusion.Please know that I'm not telling you all of this because I think you're a bad writer, but because I think you could be a better one. Hope all of this helps.-Die Hard

2/7/2005 c30 dreamingmaggie
the last two chapters seem kind of rushed but i cant wait for the sequel!